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Dr. Padma Venkatraman (she/her) is an Asian American author who immigrated from India on her own at age 19, studied oceanography, taught and directed a school and led diversity efforts at a university before writing 4 award-winning novels for young people (THE BRIDGE HOME, A TIME TO DANCE, ISLAND’S END and CLIMBING THE STAIRS). Most recently, her poems were published in Poetry magazine. Her next novel, BORN BEHIND BARS, which is loosely based on the true story of a boy who grew up in an Indian jail and struggled to free his incarcerated mother after he was forced to leave on his own, is available for pre-order from Nancy Paulsen Books, Penguin Random House. One of the characters from THE BRIDGE HOME has a cameo appearance, as an adult, in BORN BEHIND BARS! Follow Padma on Twitter @padmatv or Fb/ Instagram venkatraman.padma.

Inspiration

During the past year, every person on earth has been affected in some way by the pandemic. And this year, in our nation, we’ve unfortunately already witnessed terrible hate crimes; most recently a wave of hate crimes against Asians. But as a writer who cares about young people, I feel compelled to preserve hope in the face of all this. 

What does hope mean to me? How do I see it?

These are the questions that inspired me – and I hope my poem might inspire you to discuss both hate and hope with your students in an honest manner; and that you will be inspired, through the process of introspection, to write your own short poem dedicated to hope in defiance for hate. 

The first poem that comes to many minds when you think of hope is Emily Dickinson’s Feathers – but this resource (#DiverseVerse padlet) has several poems that encapsulate hope and speak to surviving and outliving hatred, that are written by BIPOC poets. 

If you enjoy creating a poem today, or if you encourage your students to write poems on this theme over the next few days, I’d also be delighted if you’d share it on social media on Tuesday April 20th, and tag #AuthorsTakeAction and #DiverseVerse. Both are initiatives I’m involved with, and we’re hoping, this April, to bring attention to the power of words by encouraging educators and authors to amplify the words of BIPOC poets and verse novelists who’ve written about this topic and also to invite teachers to discuss the horror of hate crimes with young people while preserving their sense of hope. We’ve created resource lists of BIPOC poets and poems on this topic, and suggestions on how to take anti-racist action,  and act as allies, as well as other ideas and activities around this theme for you to try if you wish as well. If you participate on April 20th, do please just keep in mind the safety and privacy of your students and respect copyright. Thanks, and onto my process! 

Process

It was a challenge to come up with a metaphor for hope that felt real to me but also, I hoped, was creative and fresh. So I tried not to think of words, but rather to think in images. If I closed my eyes and thought about surviving hatred, what images did I see in my mind? 

Here’s the first draft of the poem I wrote about the way I visualized hope.

Hope – Take 1 

Hope is the twisting flame that glows
while all around it crumbles and falls away.
Hope is the thread-thin shoot that grows
after thirsting in darkness day after day.

First thing I did after putting this down on the page was to read this aloud. As soon as I read it aloud, I could hear some clunkiness – some lack of rhythm. So I revised it for flow, although I did like the images of a flame and of the shoot. 

Hope – Take 2 

Hope is the twisting flame that glows
while all else crumbles and falls away.
Hope is the thread-thin shoot that grows
after thirsting in darkness day after day.

I was happy enough with this draft that I felt I could share it and invite feedback and suggestions from two respected friends: Laura Shovan (co-author of A Place at the Table) and Renee M. LaTulippe (poet and author of the No Water River blog, which has many poetry prompts and activities you might like to try with your students, too).  

Both of them, individually, responded that while they liked the idea of a short poem about hope, and importantly, the rhyme didn’t feel forced, the images had potential but weren’t working too well, because hope hope felt more fragile. So I revised again, keeping in mind the point they made that I agreed with – hope is fragile (and yet has its own immense strength, because it can survive hate).  

Hope – Take 3

Hope is the flickering flame that glows
and sparks a fire, warm and bright.
Hope is the thread-thin shoot that grows
after thirsting for days with no water or light.

I liked this. It was short and simple. But there’s no sense of something I was feeling as I wrote – about how hope, in its way, is far more important than hate. So I decided to make the title of the poem work for me as much as I could. The working title I’d used was – guess – yes, hope. Not too innovative or interesting. 

After a lot of thought, and rejecting many ideas that came up, I decided on Hate, Outlived. I also gave some thought to switching the place of the flame and the plant. Which metaphor did I want to start with and which one did I want to end with? 

At some point along the way, I also tried starting with the botanical metaphor (switching the first two and last two lines). But I decided to keep it the way it was and end with the sense of a shoot growing into a plant, which felt  like a more permanent and peaceful ending. 

Padma’s Poem (Final form)

Hate, Outlived

Hope is a flickering flame that glows,
and sparks a fire, warm and bright.
Hope is a thread-thin shoot that grows
after thirsting for days without water or light.

Your Turn

So there’s the final form. Or that’s it for now. I’m not thrilled with the title, but at least it’s one step better than the original title, which was redundant. If you have suggestions for me, I’d love that. 

But first, try writing a poem of your own. Either a quatrain (4 lines) or shorter or longer, on the theme of hate, or hope, or both. Thank you so much for participating and for everything each of you do as teachers every day, and especially all that you have done this past year to overcome so many of the challenges posed by the pandemic.

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Karen Halverson

Hope is the magnetic force that pulls
and unites marchers in the streets.
Hope is the wind that blows in hearts full
and lives in chants and feet.

Hate is the red-hot ember that glows
inside hearts dark and right.
Hate is the delusion that knows
that black bodies are less than white.

Padma T Venkatraman

Love the idea of hope as a magnetic force.

Noah Estes

Without a light to brighten the dark,
I can’t help feeling that things won’t get better.
But seeing my student’s eyes, loving and kind
Hope for the future is all that I can see.

Padma T Venkatraman

Love the way this captures a teacher’s hope for the students. So beautiful! Thank you!

Rachelle

Padma — thank you for this prompt. All the poems it has inspired have been powerful in one way or another. I enjoyed the process of writing mine.

Embedded with opportunity is the blank page —
it could be filled with adventure or epic fail.
Perhaps it is peppered with purpose and fiery rage,
but ultimately it is Hope that will prevail.

Cara

Ah, this is so perfect! A little stanza that perfectly captures sitting down to write.

DeAnna C.

Rachelle,
Wonderful little poem about writing. ?

Stacey Joy

Love this!

Perhaps it is peppered with purpose and fiery rage,

One of the freedoms I enjoy in poetry is sometimes I’m stuck in purpose and other times it’s rage! You hit the nail on the head!
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Denise Krebs

Rachelle, this is beautiful. the Rhythm and rhyme seem perfect to me (who has not idea technically, but it sounds perfect!) You were inspired well, it seems, by Allison!

My favorite:

peppered with purpose and fiery rage,

Allison Berryhill

What a lovely rhyme. Thank you for reminding me that writing=hope. Truth.

Padma T Venkatraman

Each time I see a blank page, I do see it this way I love how you captured the way I feel and the feeling we share!

Susan Ahlbrand

Padma,
You really provided a rich experience today. I tried to let it marinate all day, but I never came up with anything I am proud of. However, it is just a first draft so I can always revise it. Thank you for being such a force in diverseverse!

Hate is a wound gaping and sore,
Threatening a scar and infection.
Hope is the salve offering some relief
with a Band-aid to add some protection.

Rachelle

Susan, I had a similar process as you. Thank you for writing today, and I think you’ve got a good thing going here. I like the contrast and tension between the two halves of the poem.

Stacey Joy

Susan,
I love the image of hope as a Band-aid for protection. If we don’t have hope, we have nothing!
Love it!

Padma T Venkatraman

I’m so glad you shared this early draft. It is always scary to share unedited work. The first 2 lines have such powerful imagery.

Tarshana Kimbrough

Hate Depression

The dark sad space with no light
I feel as if I can no longer fight
it may be out of mind but it’s not out of sight
no more tears left to cry but they are there every night
why can’t I be more than just a dark night?

Rachelle

Tarshana, thank you for sharing this vulnerable and raw poem tonight. I would love to know more about the process you went through to write this and what inspired it. I like your use of rhyme and rhetorical question to help engage the reader further. Sending love your way <3

Stacey Joy

Tarshana, this poem leaves me wondering and questioning, wanting to know more. My son battles depression and is 8 months clean and sober so I’ve seen so much progress and healing. Thank you for sharing this because I know what it’s like when the darkness comes. I hope you know you are not alone and many of us here are a resource and a support.
Keep fighting!

Padma T Venkatraman

Tarshana, I can imagine how you feel. It is so depressing and so tiring to keep on fighting. There is so much emotion here, so much truth, so much power. I send you my wishes for strength, and my support. Thank you for sharing this strong, honest, beautiful poem.

Allison Berryhill

Good evening, poet friends. Thank you, Padma, for sharing your revision process with us! It was fun to watch your poem grow and unfold. Here is my poem of hope.

Vaccine

Little bee alights
Her stinger Moderna’s kiss
Hope buzzes my veins

Rachelle

Today my goal was to write more like Allison. I don’t think I nailed it today, but you did 😉 Thanks for sharing this vivid imagery of HOPE

Denise Krebs

What a sweet little bee sting!

Jennifer A Jowett

Allison, the simplicity of form is a reminder that the act of being vaccinated should be the same. As writers, we know the challenge of conveying a message so that it seems effortless and natural – you do that so well. Love that last line!

Noah Estes

I love this! This was so well done. I love the metaphor of the needle with a bee. It feels fresh and the short poem only further assets hope!

Padma T Venkatraman

Love how you wrote about the vaccine. I have been recovering from reaction to the J & J which is why some of these comments are so short and so late. But what a very original and creative poem!

Susie Morice

Hate, Who Needs Him?

Let Mr. Hate go home in his sorry rags,
his all-foam no-ambrosia self,
to sit on his throne of chiggers,
fomenting his IBS.

by Susie Morice, April 14, 2021©

Hope

You’ve written the billet-doux, the poem, the vows,
sent them on their way;
in the wistful drowse of a promise unbroken,
Hope hums, whispers like a messenger
till wait gives way to an arrival,
wearing a flowered stamp,
your name scripted in familiar ink
across the envelope resting in your mailbox,
validating a connection, a union, a sync,
born of a heart and mind’s exchanged words.

by Susie Morice, April 14, 2021©

Barb Edler

Susie, Oh my, I love the language in both your poems, but I had to laugh about Mr. Hate in his rags, “fomenting his IBS”…the perfect consequence for Mr. Hate. Whereas the hate poem shows the vileness of hate, I love how you show the beauty of hope. You have so many gorgeous lines. I especially loved

in the wistful drowse of a promise unbroken,

. Finding a special letter in the mailbox, yes, this is a sign of hope, especially when it is “scripted in familiar ink” . I’m reeling in all the layers of emotion in these poems. Sensational!

Jennifer A Jowett

Susie, I can perfectly envision Mr. Hate and am glad you have him heading home to wallow. “all-foam, no-ambrosia” – such a description! The idea of hope humming and whispering like a messenger – so soothing!

Linda S.

Susie, I love the way you bring hope home. It’s so familiar and comforting.

Hope hums, whispers like a messenger
till wait gives way to an arrival,
wearing a flowered stamp,
your name scripted in familiar ink
across the envelope resting in your mailbox

So beautifully developed. Thank you, Linda

Stacey Joy

Susie, today was rough. My day was Mr. Hate on steroids! You nailed it. How on earth did you come up with
“all-foam no-ambrosia self”??? That’s perfect!

But ohhhh how I fell deeply in love with the sweetness of

the billet-doux, the poem, the vows..

Made me think, when was the last time I received a hand-written love letter; hell, a hand-written anything! LOL. Sooo soooo good!

Glenda Funk

Susie,
Banishing hate to a “throne of chiggers” is perfect. Could anything be more miserable? This emphasis on waiting for hood is reassuring. All in good time, yes?

in the wistful drowse of a promise unbroken,
Hope hums, whispers like a messenger
till wait gives way to an arrival,

Gorgeous language in these lines.

Padma T Venkatraman

Hope hums… love that phrase and love the way you have personified hope – and hate.

Skiatook High School

Hope in Bloom

O, the promise of the blossom
Creamy petals open ‘round
A fuzzy yolky center
Birthplace of the berry.

Barb Edler

Katrina, wow, this poem is gorgeous. Is this yours or a student’s poem? Love the tactile appeal with “creamy” and “fuzzy yolky”. The final line is delightful!

Susie Morice

Katrina — This is lovely…”birthplace of the berry”… dang, that’s dandy! Susie

Padma T Venkatraman

Delicious! Scrumptious imagery!

Cara

I teach World Literature and love to see the awareness come alive in kids when they realize their world is not the only model of reality after reading works from places not usually read in the standard curriculum.

When you don’t know anything but your own world,
It is easy to form unfounded opinions of others.
Hate isn’t so much animosity as it is ignorance.
Those who don’t learn, choose to hate without reason.

Our own reality is limited by the ability to travel,
To be exposed to others, to listen to different ways.
But traveling can be undertaken in novels, poems,
and stories, cracking the shell of selfish blindness.

Sheltered minds believe that they know infinitely
More than they do, proclaiming it to every ear.
Listen now, though, to those who read, hear the
Hope breaking through and changing the world.

DeAnna C.

Cara,
Wonderful poem! The line “hate isn’t so much animosity as it is ignorance” spoke to me. I’ve never really thought about it that way, but it is so true. Of course “my” teacher would be so smart at to see it this way. As you well know, I love to travel via novels, poems, or stories.

Susie Morice

Cara — Wisdom here! Way to go! This:

traveling can be undertaken in novels, poems,
and stories, cracking the shell of selfish blindness

And hope:

Listen now, though, to those who read, hear the
Hope breaking through

I so appreciate this wise perspective! Thank you. Susie

Barb Edler

Cara, I so agree with the message of your poem. Travel can happen through literature, etc. We can gain a better understanding of others which can alleviate a great deal of misunderstanding and “hate without reason”. I adored your closing lines:

Listen now, though, to those who read, hear the
Hope breaking through and changing the world.

Outstanding poem!

Linda S.

Oh Cara, let the change begin! You said it boldly,

Listen now, though, to those who read, hear the
Hope breaking through and changing the world.

Rachelle

Cara, I love what you did with this! And I love that you used World Literature as your muse today — fitting! I love the wisdom I can feel through this poem. Can I take your class, please?

Padma T Venkatraman

I agree that one can travel through story and poetry. Such a great take on the subject of hope. Thank you!

Tammi

Hello Padma,
Thank you for this prompt. I actually used it for my Power of the Pen writing team during practice today. My students are eager to post their poems on the 20th.

Hands and Stitches

Hope is the hand extended through barbed
fences of mistrust and fear, the clenched fist to crush hate.
Hope is the stitch that mends fissures, threads unity
through acceptance, embraces diversity, and sutures the world’s wounds

Sarah

Tammi,
I love the image of the “stitch that mends fissures.” And the “s” sound is beautiful!
Sarah

Anna

Tammi, your image of hope extended through barbed wire brings to mind immigrants at the border and inmates in prisons.
Could also be a metaphor for students seeking to understand poorly aligned lessons that little culture relevance for them.

Cara

I love the contrasting images of rending and mending. Perfect for hope in the face of hate.

Susan O

I love the sewing images I get when reading this poem. “Hope is the stitch that mends fissures, threads unity” great words.

Padma T Venkatraman

Wow! Powerful image of hope extended through barbed wire. Eager to see your students’ poetry. Thank you.

Stacey Joy

Hello, Padma,
Thank you for your prompt today and all the resources. Your Padlet is OUTSTANDING! I can’t wait to dig in more and see what else I can use.

I opted for a Zappai today. It’s 5-7-5 like Haiku minus the nature theme.

Hope in blank pages
where my poetry gives birth
to seedlings of joy

© Stacey L. Joy

Heather Morris

Love this! “Seedlings of joy!” I love that line.

Tammi Belko

Stacey,
Poetry really does bring joy! This could be an inspirational quote on an English classroom wall. I love it!

Sarah

Oh, my, goodness! I have not given birth to a child but I love this image of a poem being born and we need, need seedlings of joy!

Sarah

Anna

Oh Stacey! Seedlings of joy, For us who read your poems, too!

Angie Braaten

Your poetry is surely “seedlings of joy” LOVE it!!

Susie Morice

Oooo, I like this, Stacey! I was thinking about poetry and words today as well… in letters. Your poetry is indeed JOYful! Love you, Susie

Barb Edler

Stacey, absolutely beautiful poem! Love the poetry giving birth to “seedlings of joy”…especially cool connection to your name! Gorgeous!

Julieanne Harmatz

Stacey,
I love haiku and this is a perfect, Poem seedlings, nature being nurtured.

Mo Daley

Seedlings of joy?!? Love the wordplay with your name. And you didn’t really skip the nature!

Stacey Joy

LOL nature sneaks in with such finesse! ?

Glenda Funk

Stacey,
In three short lines, 17 syllables, you r encapsulated what we hope for in this space. Bravo!

Padma T Venkatraman

Stacey, I’m so glad you loved my padlet. We will keep adding to it and the website. Love this haiku. And the hope in blank pages.

Donnetta D Norris

Hope, Outlived

Hope ~ the lyrics to the perfect song;
Words that keep a heartbeat strong.
Hope ~ the faith beyond what is seen;
Reimagining the present that’s being.

Tammi Belko

Donnetta — I find hope in lyrics too and hope really is “reimagining the present”. Just love this!

Sarah

Donnetta,
Such wisdom in these metaphors. I keep holding onto “the faith beyond what is seen” — we have to imagine it, to believe it is there if we have any chance at all!
Sarah

Angie Braaten

The first two lines are BRILLIANT. I’m not as much of a music person as many people but this would resonate with so so many <3

Susie Morice

Yes, Donnetta — The “faith beyond what is seen” … love that. Susie

Stacey Joy

Donnetta,
Love it! I have always loved: “Faith is the evidence of things hoped for, the evidence of things not seen.” One of my favorite scriptures! Your poem brings all that to my heart and soul.
Beautiful!

Noah Estes

Hi Donnetta. This is beautiful. This is something I have tried to demonstrate to all of my music lessons that I teach. Music is hope. Music is life.

Padma T Venkatraman

So beautiful. Reminds me of a quote from Rev. Dr. MLK Jr. “Faith is taking the first step even when you cannot see the staircase.”

Heather Morris

Like yesterday and like Britt, I thought about my classroom.

Hope walks across the classroom
to the loner in the corner
to inquire, “May I work with you?”
and suddenly hearts are warmer.

Tammi Belko

Yes! Kindness can truly make “hearts warmer”. I can just imagine how that moment changed the students whole day.

Angie Braaten

This is one of the most hopeful scenes ever! Love how you personified hope.

Barb Edler

Heather, absolutely love this snapshot of Hope! Spot-on! Gorgeous! I felt my heart sing with warmth after reading this!

Stacey Joy

What a beautiful image. I hope for a day when I can do this again, work with a student in close proximity, not 6 feet away. ?

Noah Estes

This has a similar theme to my poem. Seeing students who open up their hearts to others is something that always fills me with immense hope and joy.

Padma T Venkatraman

Love how your love of being a teacher shines through. Such elegant simplicity. Beautiful.

Barb Edler

Thank you, Dr. Padma Venkatraman, for sharing your process and your time today. I worked on creating a quatrain which is a struggle for me. I had the idea of hate compared to hope in my head all day so I got a bit off the track of today’s prompt.

Hate, an inescapable abyss, drowns
souls in an insidious poisonous pit
Hope, a harmonious echo, soulfully resounds
When fierce hands, tightly linked, commit to heal and uplift

Tammi Belko

Barb — I love the image of fierce hands, tightly linked. You and I were on similar wavelengths with hope and hands.

Susie Morice

Barb — I really love the sense of solidarity in the hope…”fierce hand, tightly linked…” And hate as an abyss and a pit… indeed! RIGHT ON! Susie

Denise Krebs

You have spoken truth to the hope of a reboot in America. Your hate stanza is true and I feel the drowning in it. That last quatrain about hope gives me hope, for sure. Some of my favorite images:

drowns / souls
hope, a harmonious echo
soulfully resounds
fierce hands, tightly linked

I could keep going, basically all of your poem!

Glenda Funk

Barb,
I love thinking about hope an an echo, something that returns to us when we send it into the world. Gorgeous poem.

Padma T Venkatraman

Thank you so much. I love the idea of hope as an echo and hope as harmony. And I feel a sort of biblical resonance of the first two lines.

Sarah J. Donovan, PhD (s/her)

Hope is exhaling feather studded nails
and poofs of puff wished from doubt tails.

Barb Edler

Sarah, wow, what a beautiful metaphor. I sense strength from the “studded nails” that contrasts nicely with the “poofs of puff” and “feathers”. Loved “doubt tails”. Brilliant!

Erica J

I love the juxtaposition between the softness I associate with feathers and the sharp, hardness of nails! What a great and stark contrast.

Amanda Potts

Wow. I really like the way these metaphors mix softness and hardness. Hope is not easy in this couplet.

Tammi Belko

Sarah,
Very cool pairing. I see the image of the “puff wished from doubt tails.”

Susie Morice

Oooo. that’s dandy! I love this. “doubt tails”… how’d you think of that!?! Wowza words! Susie

Linda S.

Sarah, “exhaling feather studded nails” such a sharp contrast, amazing image of hope. I can feel the inhale.

Padma T Venkatraman

Beautiful. Such a joy to be on your website. What a beautiful thing you’ve created in the poem and this blog.

Susan O

Awaken with Hope

Wake up each morn with hope in the heart
Hope, starts a glowing yellow day
without a murder to tear us apart.
No venom or hate, I pray.

Birds rise up over fields, sounding
cries of hope over brightened flowers.
Hope gives my heart action surrounding
those intruding, hateful powers.

Hateful fingers pointing out differences.
Hold them back, give hope teaching love.
Hope utters truth and overcomes distances
shortened by peace from the dove.

Barb Edler

Susan, I love the bird and spring images here. I loved how hope is rises, banishing the hateful and uttering truth. Gorgeous poem!

Tammi Belko

Susan — This line “give hope teaching love”! So much truth here. If there was just more love in this world we could overcome.

Susie Morice

Susan — I reckon we #verselove[rs] ought rule the world. You said it all. I love the “birds ris[ing] over fields.” Thank you! Susie

Padma T Venkatraman

Such a joyful image of birds. And I love how it comes through in the last line as well.

Maureen Young Ingram

It is a gift to focus on hope today; thank you for this! I also appreciate your detailing of the process, how you developed your poem – very insightful!

I walked some popular gardens today with my granddaughter, and watched for moments of hope. Writing the poem, I decided to attempt the “Duplex structure” created by Jericho Brown, which I first learned about here, in this past May’s OpenWrite.

Hope

renewal and innocence in the garden
water reflects trees, shimmering rainbow koi

rainbow koi shimmer a tree’s soft reflection
young children alongside loving caregivers

loving caregivers alongside young children
courage is her hand curled around my thumb

she holds courage in the curl of her hand
question, wonder, imagine, all are hope

hope questions, wonders, imagines more
roots work invisibly before blooming

blooms need the invisible work of roots
the joy within a single fallen petal

joy at holding a single fallen petal
this renewal and innocence is hope

Barb Edler

Maureen, this is such a beautiful poem. The duplex structure works well. Loved

rainbow koi shimmer a tree’s soft reflection

and

she holds courage in the curl of her hand

. So many tender, precious images. Innocence and renewal are strongly linked throughout this. Loved it!

Stacey Joy

Ohh how I love this!

blooms need the invisible work of roots
the joy within a single fallen petal

joy at holding a single fallen petal
this renewal and innocence is hope

The invisible work of roots intrigues me.

Tammi Belko

Maureen,
I love this lines “courage is her hand curled around my thumb” & “she holds courage in the curl of her hand
question, wonder, imagine, all are hope”
If only the world could retain the innocence and hope of children.

Susie Morice

Beautiful images here, Maureen. This one is my fave:

roots work invisibly before blooming

Clearly, you were moved by the hope of that granddaughter today! 🙂 Thank you. Susie

Denise Krebs

Wow, Maureen, this is making me think of those duplexes we wrote last year and realizing how beautiful they can become. Such a truth here about hope–

question, wonder, imagine, all are hope
hope questions, wonders, imagines more

I sense the life cycle at the end of your poem and that renewal and innocence of life new and becoming old, and joy at every step. What a beautiful hope-filled poem.

Glenda Funk

Maureen,
The duplex is perfect for expressing hope given the why language “duplicates” in each couplet. I love the way your po moves into a celebration of and honoring of young children and all the hope their lives represent.

Padma T Venkatraman

I love the form of this poem and how much thought you have given to shaping each line. Lovely.

Glenda Funk

I’m turning to nature and the most awe-inspiring sunrise I’ve ever seen for inspiration today. As they say, the stars aligned to make this experience possible. Haleakala National Park is on Maui, for those who need a reference. It’s elevation is almost 10,000 feet above sea level.

Catching Light

As Sun emerges over Haleakala Crater
erasing inky nightshade’s embrace,
hope threads silky rays through days,
wrapping each in luminous light.
—Glenda Funk

Mo Daley

This is beautiful, Glenda. I love “inky nightshade’s embrace.” When we went to Haleakala, we were cursed with a cloudy day, so your poem really makes me smile. We did go back the next day and were rewarded with sun.

Maureen Young Ingram

Oh my – are you lucky enough to be in Hawaii right now? Or just having a beautiful memory of this once in a lifetime moment? This is a breathtaking line, “hope threads silky rays through days.” Gorgeous poem, Glenda?

Jennifer Jowett

Glenda, your imagery allows me to picture this without needing to google the park (though I’m going to anyway as I need a bit of nature right now). I love the use of inky here, as well as the silky rays of hope, and the word luminous – the luxury of these words heightens the feeling of hope.

Susan O

Oh, Glenda, I can picture this and wish I was there. Love standing to see the sun emerging and the hope it threads each day. I do think each morning brings a new start and hope. Beautiful!

Barb Edler

Glenda, your word choice creates such a beautiful, ethereal moment. Loved “inky nightshade’s embrace” “silky rays” and “wrapping each in luminous light.” Your poem’s title is perfect. Love this gorgeous poem! Thank you!

Stacey Joy

GLORIOUS!! I’m so mad that I never did the sunrise hike at Haleakala. I think whenever I return to Maui, I will do it no matter what.
“hope threads silky rays through days,
wrapping each in luminous light.”
Can’t get any better than that!

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Heather Morris

You have created a beautiful picture with your words. My favorite line is “hope threads silky rays through days.”

Tammi Belko

Glenda — this is so beautiful! My favorite lines: ” inky nightshade’s embrace”

Susie Morice

Ooo, Glenda — So seeeensssoooorrry! I Love the “nightshade’s embrace” and “…threads silky rays.” Perfect title! Hugs, Susie

Denise Krebs

I love how you extended hope by threading the silky light throughout the days. This is so beautiful and an image needed for today. Thank you.

Padma T Venkatraman

Sounds like a divine place. Love the title of this poem. Beautiful imagery.

Britt

Today I’m thinking about how much hate has been spewed toward teenagers and educators over the last year, yet how much joy and beauty I see every day in the classroom.

Hate is the finger-pointer
who cries ‘learning loss’
to agitate and berate
clueless and ignorant and oblivious.

Hope is the teenager
who shows up to the page
to liberate and be liberated
honest and raw and vulnerable.

Ann M.

Britt, this is awesome! I love the honestly in it. I also love the repetition of having the three adjectives in your final line. My favorite line was “honest and raw and vulnerable.”

Mo Daley

I swear, Britt, if I hear about “learning loss” one more time! Your finger pointer image really drew me in. The verbs in your first stanza are so powerful. I really like this!

Maureen Young Ingram

Thank you, Britt! Yes, “Hope is the teenager.” I adore this! This is all we need to remember, I think – hope lies with our young.

Barb Edler

Britt, the contrast here is perfect. Loved “clueless and ignorant and oblivious”. The teenager vulnerable but liberated is truly beautiful! Amazing poem!

Erica J

Britt I love how you played with words and contrast in this! The fact that the lines match up so well — BErate and BE liberated are so subtle too. Thanks for addressing this concern in your poem.

Heather Morris

The joy and beauty in the classroom must be celebrated. I see it every day in my kiddos. Thank you for celebrating the hope.

Tammi Belko

Britt — Wow! That last stanza is so powerful. It takes so much courage for teens “show up to the page” and be “raw and vulnerable.”

Allison Berryhill

Britt, I agree with both stanzas! Indeed, spending days with teenagers demands an attitude of hope. I like the sounds in your poem: agitate and berate…to liberate and be liberated…

Padma T Venkatraman

Such a great way to personify hope. We do indeed need faith and hope and trust in teenagers and youth. Love how your love for young people comes through in this poem.

DeAnna C.

Padma, Thank you for today’s writing prompt. 🙂
My process was to start with hope, as I want there to be more hope in the world than hate. It seemed easier to me to rhyme my hope poem. The hate poem did not want to rhyme. I tried a few times to “force” it into rhyming, but it was not coming out how I wanted it to. Once I gave up on trying to rhyme my hate poem “wrote” itself.

Hate are the words degrading and cruel
Biting, cutting, and knocking ‘em down
Hate is a the rope wound to a noose
Wrapped ‘round the neck of man

Hope is the sun rising each day
Rays shining down to brighten the way
Hope is the birds songs that ring out
Short strong notes that they shout

Padma T Venkatraman

I love that you didn’t force the hate portion to rhyme. In such an organic way, it mirrors how hate has nothing beautiful about it – and I love the sharp contrast with the rhyming quatrain below. Contrast is such a powerful poetic tool, and I love when two parts of a poems have this kind of tension – the similarity in line length and number of lines, yet that striking difference.
Also, rhyme should never feel forced – so another excellent reason to ignore rhyme if it doesn’t flow.
I have been in a yard in which a noose was hung – so your powerful image spoke to me in a very personal way.

Denise Krebs

Nice, DeAnna, I like reading about your battle with the rhymes in the hate stanza–such powerful images of hatred. Painful. I like that you end with hope and especially the “short strong notes” shouted!

Jennifer Jowett

DeAnna, sometimes we have to let the words do what the words want to do! And in your case, letting them take the lead made the piece that much more impactful. The lack of rhythm/rhyme mimics what hate does – fights against itself, wanders, struggles against confinement and order. This contrasts well with the flow, tidiness, and beauty of the hope stanza!

Maureen Young Ingram

DeAnna, such an inspiration to not have hate rhyme – there should be no joy or gift in this! I love all your hope, especially “Hope is the birds songs that ring out.”

Cara

I, too, like the contrast between the non-rhyming hate and the more playful rhyming hope. It really is important to let the words tell you where they want to go. In a challenging year, these are the words that spoke to me:

Hope is the sun rising each day
Rays shining down to brighten the way

Rachelle

DeAnna, I love that you shared your process for writing (you know I am a sucker for that!!) Your imagery is vivid, shocking and then suddenly calming and relaxing. You engaged all my senses in this poem — you are a great poet.

Susan O

Oh boy, what a strong description of hate you have written with the words
“a noose wrapped ’round the next of man.” So happy you have brought hope out of this into the rising day and birds songs. Thank you.

Denise Krebs

Dr. Venkatraman,
Thank you for your beautiful prompt and showing us the process and several takes on your product. I love how later drafts made hope stronger. I love the warm and bright fire that came from the flicker and the thin shoot that grows, finally in the light and with water. Beautiful images. I couldn’t write a quatrain today because there were too many people on my mind, and my poem isn’t very hopeful, but I did end with hope because it will eventually outshine hate here.

Hate is the country with such a long scar
We dole out death sentences far
From courts of law
White power our flaw
–Street-selling loose cigarettes, death
–Holding a sandwich taken as a threat, death
–Not signaling when moving to the right, death
–Using a bad twenty or having lofty height, death
–Going to the car wash with your new ride, death
–Eating ice cream where you abide, death
–Even sleeping in your own abode, death

Remember them and the code
Eric Garner
Casey Goodson
Sandra Bland
George Floyd
Daunte Wright
Botham John
Breonna Taylor

The code: White supremacy
The hope: Dismantle the enemy

My inspiration came from this Instagram post I saw this morning: https://www.instagram.com/p/CNpxs6JDuls/

Padma T Venkatraman

I understand how you feel – so much hatred. Sometime I am also so depressed.
Tina Boyer Brown’s poem in the March 2021 issue of poetry, entitled Respectability, speaks to this issue and is a powerful #ownvoices poem.
poetry can be a powerful expression of protest and a need for change, and/or a way to work through our distress, as yours is. thank you for being true to your emotion and writing from that space today.

Maureen Young Ingram

Those italicized lines that end with death are piercing and raw. I think there is tremendous hope in how many of us are now speaking their names, over and over and over. Yes, it’s not enough by any shape or form, but I believe there is true change coming. I hope.

Amanda Potts

Denise, we were definitely thinking along the same lines today. The repetition of the word “death” at the end of those italicized lines is powerful. I also appreciate the enjambment between lines two and three of the quatrain:

We dole out death sentences far
From courts of law

Thanks for writing this today.

Glenda Funk

Denise,
WOW! This is so powerful. I love the way you first define and explicate hate snd then give evidence to support the argument in the first four lines.

Amanda Potts

So… this prompt sent me down a rabbit hole of my own making. Though Padma didn’t specify this, my mind went immediately to recent examples of anti-Black racism. I was particularly aware of the phrase “the brutality of hate” and wondered what sort of hope I could find. Suddenly, I felt deeply uncomfortable as a white person trying to offer hope in the face of systemic racism and the brutality of that. This morning, I learned that George Floyd’s girlfriend had been Duante Wright’s teacher. As a teacher and a partner, I tried to imagine her trauma. It overwhelmed me and the truth about the way the murder of young black people affects a community was all too clear again. So I decided to look for her words. What I found, instead, were the words of person after person who has survived the murder of their black child. Soon, I was finding quatrains in the tragic angry beauty of their words. I know there are more to write (I’ve left my notes to myself at the top of the piece – or pieces?), but my heart could only take so much today. I *think* there is some hope in here – and I know that I need to work in some call to action. Ok, enough. Here it is. Deep breath.

TRIGGER WARNING: repeated reference to the murder of Black people.

Found poems on Hate and Hope and anti-black violence – voices of the survivors
“A system cannot fail those who it was never meant to protect.”
-WEB Dubois

(to add – Philando Castile, Ahmad Aubrey, Michael Brown, Tamir Rice)
(another idea: Use one side for the voice of hate, the white voice – use Jim Crow laws, trial transcripts, Fox news, etc.) Could the sides cross over at some point?

Duante
From Naisha Wright, Duante Wright’s aunt

He was loved.
He was ours.
He came from us.
His blood is on y’all’s hands.

*****
Now
From Philonise Floyd, George Floyd’s brother

The world is traumatized.
We are being murdered.
There is a time for change and
That time is now.

****
Breonna
From Tamika Palmer, Breonna Taylor’s mother, interviewed by Ta-Nehisi Coates for Vanity Fair

You asked me whether
I know someone who
wanted to hurt my daughter.
But you did it.

I don’t want y’all to tear up
the city. We still got to live
here. And I still I understand
the anger. Breonna was everybody’s
sister and daughter.

People want to say
they’re sorry. They want to apologize for
not listening. I can’t believe it.
People are begging for
forgiveness., “I’m sorry,
We weren’t listening.”
I just can’t believe it.

And how do I feel then?
Like, my God, somebody heard me.
Like I finally caught
my breath. That’s how I feel.
Like I finally caught my breath.

*****
It could have been me
From Barack Obama, President of the United States

This could have been
my son. Trayvon Martin
could have been
Me.

******
Worry
From Sybrina Fulton, Trayvon Martin’s mother, in Vanity Fair

Worrying has been amplified by our children
being shot and killed, and nobody is being held
accountable. People are going home and
sleeping in their beds as if [our children’s] life didn’t matter.

*****
More than a story
From Tracy Martin, Trayvon Martin’s father, in Vanity Fair

This is more than just a story
to us. This is our son.
This is our life.
This is who we live for.

What happened to Trayvon
continues to happen
to our young black and brown boys,
and nobody is being held accountable.

The justice system sent an awful
message to our young people,
and that’s what makes them so
afraid

to just walk home
from the store
in their own community
because they don’t feel safe.

When I was young we played
at the park, we played in the street, we
went from house to house,
there was no fear about getting shot.

But now, our young people are afraid
to be shot,
to be shot by the police,
they’re afraid of so many things.
*****

On displaying his body
From Mamie Till Mobley, Emmett Till’s mother

When people saw what happened
to my son, men stood up
who had never stood up before.
People became vocal.

Everybody needed to know
what happened to Emmett Till
Lord, take my soul. I have not spent
one minute hating.

*****
Vengeance and Justice
From Simeon Wright, Emmett Till’s uncle

The evidence speaks for itself.
Hey, we tried. We tried
to get some justice and
We failed.

You don’t seek vengeance
now. You just seek justice.
I’m going to leave vengeance
to Almighty God and justice
to the government.

Denise Krebs

Amanda, what powerful images you found in their words today. Oh, my…I was on a similar thought pattern. I wonder about the lack of hope today in our poems, but there is hope. The voices you have shared here have hope. I loved this from Breonna’s mom:

Breonna was everybody’s
sister and daughter.

And I’ll never forget Obama’s words about Trayvon.

I love your idea about having the voices of hate, the killing words beside the quatrains you have written.

Padma T Venkatraman

Just a quick clarification – I am sure that I have NO right to offer hope in the face of systemic racism, either. I wasn’t thinking of that as a prompt – and I deeply respect the #ownvoices movement – if anything I wrote was liable to being interpreted the wrong way, I must apologize. I do feel, however, that in a safe space we can each explore through poetry and sometimes poetry can allow us to engage with emotions in an introspective way.
Also, I did not mean for my prompt to raise the issue of systemic racism, yet I understand how it is on everyone’s mind and in our hearts with the trial ongoing.
I was merely thinking that each of us have experienced hate in some form, but also hope in some form – and we can surely speak to our personal experience of hate and hope in an abstract sense; when I wrote my prompt I was thinking of “Hope is the thing with feathers” and of metaphors capturing hope.
Your long poem clearly comes from deep introspection and I think poetry can be a journey, sometimes, and a form of engaging with aspects of our ownselves.
Thank you for your thoughtfulness and sensitivity and your respectful statemen with which I fully agree – we cannot “offer” hope in the face of anti-Black hate.

Amanda Potts

Oh! I didn’t think you were speaking for others or asking us all to address systemic racism- that’s just where my thoughts tended. I’ll go back and make that more clear!

Erica J

Thank you so much for sharing your beautiful words and the process you went through to craft it. I was inspired by your view of hope and couldn’t wait to share with my own students! I took to my notebook to craft my own version which I also plan on sharing with them as well. I haven’t come up with a title yet though — much like yours it’s in progress.

Hate is the spittled, splintered words
cast from careless, callused lips.
Hate is the bellowed, bulging herds
flocked into frenzy by lashing whips.

Hope is the subtle shimmer of prismatic hues
tilting your head just so to fade or to flare.
Hope is the trace of golden light diffused
through the ceramic shattered from hate — repaired.

Amanda Potts

I really appreciate the sounds in the first stanza, the way I can hear the hatred spewing from people’s lips even as you describe actions. I also like the way you juxtapose hate and hope, and how hope comes through the cracks the hate created. Thoughtful and thought-provoking.

DeAnna C.

Erica,
I too agree hate is words. I love the alliterations here:

spittled, splintered words
cast from careless, callused lips

Denise Krebs

Wow, Erica, yes, like Amanda said. That first stanza is amazingly hateful-sounding–full of sp’s and /k/’s and then my favorite line, the first line of hope, sounds the opposite…

Hope is the subtle shimmer of prismatic hues

Such beautiful imagery and beautiful sounding words.
I love that hope stays diffusing the light, and the last word–repaired gives so much hope.

Padma T Venkatraman

I love the images you evoke in the 4 lines on hope. THey fill my vision with light. Beautiful.

Mo Daley

This is the most hopeful blackjack I could muster today!

Hope
by Mo Daley 4-14-21

With desperate hope I pray
The zipper will go all the
Way up today- I still hope

Amanda Potts

This is *exactly* the humour I needed. Thank you. And, truth? My shipment of new leggings arrived this morning – thank goodness!

DeAnna C.

Mo,
I am so there with you. Too many snack and boredom eating choices at home. Back in building I need to were real pants, not just my VERY comfortable leggings, with their every forgiving stretch.

Denise Krebs

Hope! Funny and sweet, Mo. (I never noticed this form–7-7-7 blackjack! I learned something new. Hang in there and lay down while you pull it up.

Padma T Venkatraman

I am so glad that some of you have brought humor to this prompt. Poetry can indeed be lighthearted and humor is so important to me in my life and in my work. Thanks for making me smile.

Barb Edler

Mo, this is hysterical. I can’t help but think of blue jeans here…..I avoid them as often as possible! Love this!

Heather Morris

Sometimes, I pick the pants with no zipper because I can’t face the struggle. Thanks for the chuckle.

Susie Morice

Mo — Priceless — I love it when I laugh out loud with the delight of your poem! Hugs, Susie

Allison Berryhill

I’m grinning! Thank you for this delight. I like how your rhyme pray/way/today is sprinkled throughout the poem rather than lined up at the ends of lines. This felt playful and a little chaotic, which fit the tone of your humor! Hugs!

Chloe, Student of Mrs. Simon( Margaret Simon)

Hope is space between the clouds
the light shining through
the sun’s smiling face
who knew

Amanda Potts

Chloe, what a wonderful metaphor! The space between the clouds is, indeed, hopeful and I appreciate the way each line of your poem gets shorter. Who knew is a fantastic ending, too, because it challenges me to remember that sometimes hope shows up when I don’t know things. Thank you for sharing this publicly.

Padma T Venkatraman

Beautiful. As I read the words smile, I smiled. A joy. Thank you.

Barb Edler

Chloe, I love the personification here. I can see this smiling sun face. Beautiful poem. Thanks for sharing your talent!

It certainly is, Chloe. “Hope is the space between clouds.”

Marilyn G. Miner

I will remember your poem when I look at the sky, Chloe. I like how the sun seems wise.

Ann M.

Padma, I love the prompt and your beautiful poem! I decided to address hatred and hope individually and then together at the end.

Hatred is a heavy burden
Carried not by those who hate
Rather, those who feels its sting
Are the ones who bear its weight

Hope lifts up the heavy heart
Lifts the gaze from floor to sun
It is felt by those with much
It is felt by those with none

Ageless conflict ever present
Permeates our planet’s soul
Until hope earns victory
We shall witness hatred’s toll.

Padma T Venkatraman

Love the classic feel of addressing each topic separately and then bringing them together at the end. Thank you! Shoulder issus so please forgive brevity.

Barb Edler

Ann, what a marvelous poem. Hate is so heavy, and I love how your rhyme scheme carries the weight of it so effectively. Your last stanza says it all! Gorgeous poem!

Scott M

Padma, thank you for this prompt and for giving us a snapshot of your “process”!
_________________________

Hope, aside from being covered in feathers
or springing eternally, seems to me
to be the blood in the messy engine
that is the heart of humanity.

Ann M.

Scott, I love the gritty yet beautiful mental image this provides! The idea of a collective engine heart running on hope is breathtaking.

Amanda Potts

I love the contrast here – the way you subvert the traditional hopeful images with something shocking, bloody, messy and completely necessary and life-giving. Something in the last two lines feels profoundly true to me. Wow.

Denise Krebs

Hope as “the blood in the messy engine / that is the heart of humanity” is one of the best things I’ve read this week. It is so interesting and has so much truth. I’m going to go think about that for a while!

Padma T Venkatraman

Love it! Love the way you move from the feathers to your image, too!

Barb Edler

Scott, wow, this is incredible! Love how you begin with a nod to Dickinson’s metaphor and move to the bloody, messy engine heart! Sheer genius!

Erica J

The contrast between the more beautiful aspect of hope (feathers, spring) with that of the grimy and messy bits is wonderful. I love that hope can be so visceral!

Susie Morice

Scott — The “blood in the messy engine” — INDEED! But I love those feathers! 🙂 Susie

Rachel S

I couldn’t think about hope without hearing the words from Rob Gardner’s “Here is Hope” – so my poem follows that vein of thought.

Hate is a crown of thorns
piercing innocent flesh,
a face desecrated
by blood and spit.

Hope is a man
meekly submitting
before the bar of justice
for all humankind.

Britt

Yes and amen. I love how you’ve captured this incomprehensible grace and mercy.

Denise Krebs

Rachel, what a perfect subject for the hate and hope of your quatrains today. What gets me is this image you captured here:

a face desecrated
by blood and spit.

Padma T Venkatraman

To me, this is another poem that reflects, perhaps, your inner sense of the scripture…? The man here, to me, that you are seeing – or whom i see in your words, is none other than Jesus Christ… and I thank you for opening this deepest part of yourself to us with your poem.

Linda S.

With Hope

Without hope, a wave of darkness encapsulates,
drowning without the air to breathe.
Without hope, a soul’s entombment is
shielded from the luminous healing.
Without hope, we can’t step forward
against the unseen force.
Without hope embedded for our seeds,
where will the hereafter lead?

E. Essick

I love it Linda. Such beautiful imagery…nicely done

Without hope, a soul’s entombment is
shielded from the luminous healing

Padma T Venkatraman

Luminous healing. Yes. I hope for that for our country -and in a most personal way for me. Sorry for the brevity. Great poem. Especially the old feel to the first two lines – great opening.

Anna J. Small ROSEBORO

What’s in the Center?

Hate and hope
Two four letters words
That begin and end the same.
So, my friends, what can we do that’s not absurd
To help make this world dope?

What’s at the center is what to consider
As we try to bring about change.
Hate ate him up. Hope opens up.
So, now ……. let’s rearrange.

As we feed ourselves on love,
Sharing what comes from above,
Avoiding what feeds the hate
Then on hope we won’t have to wait.

Be the light and hate will fade.
Together, we all can make the grade.

Padma T Venkatraman

Love the rhythm and vivaciousness and vitality here, Anna! To me this has a sense of spoken word poetry.
It also makes me think – Musicality of language is so important, especially for poets and poetry.
And speaking of making the language sing, I am sure you are aware of and love Kwame’s work? And the work of Jason Reynolds – how the two of them make language sing — wow – i am in awe of that ability they have ?

Rachel S

Love it! Such a creative take on these two words. My favorite line is: “Hate ate him up. Hope opens up.”

Padma T Venkatraman

So great to reconnect with you on twitter, Bryan. Thank you for your kind words. I responded to your beautiful poem on twitter.

Angie Braaten

i love
to believe
in hope

I am drawn to the simplicity here.

Margaret Simon

I really enjoyed watching the process of your poem, Padma. Reading your thought process helped me to find my own.

When George Floyd was killed, a FB friend of mine called for people to make origami cranes to hang in a park. Each person was asked to make a string of 40 cranes, a senbazuru, so that the display would feature 1000 paper cranes. I organized a similar gathering in our town. My image of hope went back to the paper cranes.

Draft 1

Hope is an origami crane
hanging in a tree
twisting with the wind
longing to be free.

Angie Braaten

Such a beautiful poem to express such a beautiful activity. There is beauty but also struggle with “hanging”, “twisting”, “longing”. Much truth here.

Jennifer Jowett

Margaret, the delicacy of the paper cranes, symbolic, wind-twisted, longing evokes hope in such a gentle way. I’ve seen the installations along church ceilings for covid victims, and we purchased one from the 9/11 Museum in NYC. I love the idea of a senbazuru, a new word for me.

Rachel S

When I was a teenager, my sisters and I made a thousand paper cranes for my cousin who was diagnosed with cancer… I think of that time and the hope we felt, that our efforts could help heal her. (And she did recover!) I love your words: “twisting with the wind / longing to be free.” Thank you for this poem!!

Padma T Venkatraman

Such a beautiful image! And thank you for your kind words. Also, have you read Aida Salazar’s LAND OF CRANES? IT is a beautiful verse novel…

DeAnna C.

Margaret,
Such a wonderful idea to help hang 1000 paper cranes. Your poem works beautifully to articulate that image.

twisting with the wind

Britt

Hope in the form of origami cranes – I would love to see a picture 🙂 This is beautifully crafted!

E. Essick

Padma, beautiful imagery you have given us. Here are a couple drafts of some vastly different poems I am working on.

Hate
This man, martyred for hate
This hate still perverts society
Hate drove (forced!) out his breath
Hate is nine minutes under a knee

Hope
Hope is seeing a sunbathed morning sky
from the sliver in the curtain
Hope is the hand on my shoulder
Reminding me of now

Angie Braaten

“HATE IS NINE MINUTES UNDER A KNEE” – correct. Sorry for the caps, but it enrages me.

I really like seeing hope through a “sliver in a curtain”

Jennifer Jowett

I really appreciate that you took such an intense image of hatred (nine minutes under a knee) and bathed us in words of hope. The gentle hand upon the shoulder (contrasting with what could have been for George Floyd) and the reminder of now evokes both a physical image and reaction.

Padma T Venkatraman

With the trial still ongoing, it is too hard for me to speak about the first part. So I will respond to the second.
I love the beauitful imagery of the distant sun, and how it is juxtaposed with the intimacy of a loved one’s hand, the faraway presence of nature and the proximity of a human being who understands – both bring hope.

DeAnna C.

Wow, what a powerful and sad image.

Hate drove (forced!) out his breath
Hate is nine minutes under a knee

I try to be hopeful that some day we can truly weed out race based hatred.

Barb Edler

Eric, your poem is riveting! I so enjoyed how you captured the harsh reality of hate and contrasted it with the soft beauty of a sunbathed morning. I really wanted to capture that today, too, as I loved this morning’s glorious sky. The hand on your shoulder adds such a sweet depth to your poem. Awesome!

Fran Haley

Padma, thank you so much for this vision of hope overcoming hate, and for the warmth and desperate longing (‘thirst’) captured in your verse. Thank you also for the hope you offer in the poetry-writing process! Hope is vital to our existence as humans and while this is something I strive to impart in my own writing (for the world already has far too much anger and hatred), and even though I enjoy composing rhyme – I struggled with this quatrain today! I finally settled on a sunflower metaphor. I feel it is too big for all I would say here. I will have to play with it further. Part of my inspiration comes from sunflowers being planted to absorb radiation from the Fukushima Daiichi nuclear disaster after the 2011 earthquake and tsunami.

Hope Perpetuates

Hope turns its face to the sun
Warming its myriad seeds
Hope’s roots absorb toxins
Cleansing each soul that it feeds.

Angie Braaten

Hope’s roots absorb toxins
Cleansing each soul that it feeds.

Ahh the word choice of “absorb toxins” and “cleansing” makes me feel pure.

Jennifer Jowett

Fran, what always fascinates me is what we learn from the depth of knowledge we all have. Thank you for sharing about the Fukushima Daiichi sunflowers. It has me thinking this morning. I love that you pulled that idea into Hope’s roots and expanding that to cleanse each soul. Powerful. Beautiful. Hopeful.

Padma T Venkatraman

What a wonderful and powerful image. I love that link with history. I wrote a poem about just that, after hearing about it years ago – but mine had nothing to do with hope! Your poem lifted my spirits – despite my shoulder pain and wooziness from vaccination. Thank you.

Marilyn G. Miner

I love the idea of hope as a cleansing agent. That metaphor really works for me. I also like the active verb – hope turns.

Jennifer A Jowett

Padma, I experience your writing process with every piece. Thank you for sharing that – it’s important for writers, especially students, to see how something begins and transforms. I love the warmth of the “flickering flame” sparking a fire and the strength of the shoot. These words reminded of a discussion in our religion class – great things happen in silence (seeds grow, ideas begin…). So I attempted to capture that.

Take Root

Nestled deep in dark and dirt
A single seed awakes, alert
Hope is grown from just one word
Arise, go forth, be seen, be heard

Angie Braaten

“Hope is grown from just one word” – love this line – will remember forever. Hope as something both powerful and simple.

Kim Johnson

Jennifer, you show how one tiny action or word fosters more and more! Those imperatives of your last line are so prescriptive in nurturing a more peaceful world. You show us how to be the change!

Margaret Simon

I love the line “Hope is grown from just one word” alongside the admonition to make it heard.

Stefani B

Jennifer, I am in agreeance with others, your third line is fantastic and could be alone on its own–a single line of hope. Thank you for sharing today.

Fran Haley

Jennifer, how your poem speaks to the power of words. They are rooted in thoughts and tied to motives…they have the power to heal and to destroy. That image of a seed waking deep in the dirt, “alert” – just so true and speaks volumes in its brevity. Bravo!

Amy

Connecting the word hope with idea of going forth and being heard spoke to me. My biggest fear right now is that many Americans aren’t being heard and never will be again.

Padma T Venkatraman

Lovely. Sometime alliteration enhances the quality of sound in poem, as it does here (sometimes it just sounds corny and unmusical – it’s not a good thing to overuse it but you have done it so well). I sense the depth of religious purpose in the final line, the resonance of Biblical verse.

DeAnna C.

Beautiful. Hope is a seed indeed.

Susie Morice

Jennifer — i really love this. I want to embroider this and hang it on the wall. 🙂 BE HEARD! Yes! Susie

Allison Berryhill

I love this. I want to put it to memory and recite it to my students at the end of class as a parting command! “Hope is grown from just one word; arise, go forth, be seen, be heard.”

Glenda Funk

Jennifer,
This is gorgeous. I love the rhyme and the way it instructs through rhythm and diction.

Stefani B

Padma, Thank you for your inspiration today. I appreciate your process and drafting process; this is a great model for writers of any age. I especially like how your last line “after thirsting for days without water or light” ended up. My words guided me toward a more light-hearted interpretation of your prompt today.

Gameday- Take 1
(read it with a sports commentator voice)

Hope sneaks up behind hate to box out, rebound
Going toward the end zone, hate is tackled at the 10 yard
Hope bicycle kicks the winning goal, hate is defeated
Going with the odds, hope is favored to win: 5-4-3-2-1 GAME OVER
…and the crowd goes wild!

Angie Braaten

AWESOME poem. Creative, playful, celebratory! I love the blend of sports. Miss sports 🙁

Jennifer A Jowett

Stefani, I love your interpretation! And the advice to read with the commentator’s voice had me doing just that. You give such strength to hope as it boxes out, tackles, bicycle kicks hate.

Kim Johnson

Stefani, the voice adds so much to the message of your poem – the bicycle kick and the crowd going wild at the countdown timer is an enthusiastic way to celebrate the winning of Hope and the defeat of hate.

Fran Haley

Stefani, I so enjoyed your creative take on hope – we typically envision is as a living thing like a bird or plant (I myself couldn’t shake that image today) – yet here you capture the energy of it. This to me is an enlightening takeaway from your light-hearted verse!

Padma T Venkatraman

Thanks, dear Stefani for reminding us of the joy that lighthearted poetry can bring! Just yesterday John Schu, Donalyn Miller and I were chatting about Shel Silverstein. I cannot wait to see them both tomorrow on BookJoy Live! What a fun poem, and what a fun interpretation. Hope you have a fun-filled day and week and rest of the school year. Thank you all for all the hard work you are doing during the pandemic.

Margaret Simon

In the spirit of sports and games and all that makes us cheer!

Ann M.

Stefani, I love how playful this is! I can hear an announcer’s voice reading this with so much enthusiasm in my mind!

Angie Braaten

Thank you, Padma, for especially adding your drafts to this prompt. It was helpful in writing my own. The images in your quatrain bring hope to life, with the addition of elements. When writing my own, the first thing I thought of was a bridge then I googled to make sure it wasn’t cliche but it kind of is. However, I still tried to see if I could make it unique because that’s what writers do. I didn’t like it. (I saw that there was a Bridge of Hope in none other than MN, then I was reminded of the trial and Daunte Wright. There is a poem there, somewhere.) Then I started to think of the idea of hope lifting us. And I closed my eyes, like you did, but I tried to see hope. And I ended up with plateau. I added my drafts, open for constructive criticism.

Draft 1:
Hope is a plateau lifted above
lower lands flattened with hatred.
Hope is a higher ground full of love
an elevation wholly sacred.

Draft 2:
Hope is a plateau lifted above
the pressures of hatred and sorrow.
Hope is a higher ground full of love
that carries us into tomorrow.

Draft 3:
Hope is a plateau lifted above
the low lands of hatred and sorrow.
Hope is a higher ground built from love
that carries us into tomorrow.

Stefani B

Angie,
Thank you for also sharing your drafting process. Your metaphor of hope as a plateau and then adding in the image of hate in the low lands if very effective.

Jennifer A Jowett

Angie, I especially love the idea of hope carrying us into tomorrow – what a beautiful way to envision hope. The position of hope as the higher ground against the low lands of hate and sorrow is a powerful visual.

Kim Johnson

Angie, your drafting process shows the building of higher ground from love and that last line is sheer hope fir the promise of a better future. I love this! You make me wish I had shared my drafts too.

Margaret Simon

I love the idea of hope rising above hatred, like a plateau. I wonder if the last line could extend the metaphor of a plateau. Does a plateau carry us or is it something we can see in the distance, something to strive toward? Just asking the questions. I’m not sure of the answer.

Angie Braaten

Lovely question! *that allows us to see tomorrow <3 BOOM.

Margaret Simon

Yes!

Fran Haley

Angie, personally I love all your lines in every one of your drafts; they’re all true and I must say I am especially drawn to “Hope is a higher ground full of love/an elevation wholly sacred.” There is indeed a sacredness in hope, as there is in love. “The low lands of hatred and sorrow” – indeed, indeed.

Padma T Venkatraman

Angie, I enjoyed seeing your drafts, too. Sometimes it is hard to show people the early drafts but I think it’s nice to help students understand that adults, and authors, re-write. I am so glad you retained the idea of hope carrying us into tomorrow. Also thanks for your reflections on cliche. Sometimes people make writing “rules” that should be broken. And yes, cliches can be re-discovered and re-shaped. I love how your idea of a bridge led to your idea of a plateau. A great example of starting with a cliche and then moving onto something entirely fresh and new and original.

Marilyn G. Miner

Lovely truth here.

Ann M.

Angie, I love each of these drafts, but I think you certainly nailed it on the final draft! It flows so gracefully from line to line. I love that you stuck with the image of “low lands” for the final draft.

Kim Johnson

Good morning, Dr. Venkatraman! Thank you for hosting us today and for showing us the recursive writing process of your quatrain! These words spark hope especially:
grows after thirsting for days

It makes me think of the forgiveness and regeneration that we all need in these times. Thank you for inspiring me. I blended hate and hope together.

J.C. Perspective

Hate is the sister who twists the knife
damns her brothers, preaches lies

Hope are her brothers who pray for her life
to experience love through cross-bearing eyes

Angie Braaten

“Hope are her brothers who pray for her life” – so, so powerful of the forgiveness you mention before your poem. It takes strong people filled with hope to do this for that sister.

Stefani B

Good morning Kim,
First off, your title hooked me and then your use of personifying hate/hope had me inspired. You provide such power with such few words. Thank you for sharing.

Jennifer A Jowett

Kim, this pairing is incredibly effective. The action of hate as the twister of the knife gives us a physical sensation as well as a visual one. I admire the personification in that couplet. It’s so strong yet conveyed with just minimum space. .

Fran Haley

Kim, forgiveness is one of my favorite themes, along with redemption; they’re inextricably tied to hope. I am in awe of how you personified hate, the pain it causes, its deliberate acts of destruction. Then hope as brothers… I almost seem them wearing robes, walking a sunlit garden path to the temple to pray; I can hear them chanting… just amazing what you bring into being in these few mighty, magnificent lines!

Padma T Venkatraman

so succinct. forgiveness is such an important theme. and in a sense, to me, this is your way of internalizing the scripture. thank you for sharing that part of your self with us. so powerful.
Father, forgive them…
Luke

Barb Edler

Kim, I really like the actions that show hate and hope here. Your final line resonates with me

to experience love through cross-bearing eyes

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