Welcome to Day 28 of Verselove. If you have written with us before, welcome back. If you are joining us for the first time, you are in the kind, capable hands of today’s host, so just read the prompt below and then, when you are ready, write in the comment section below. We do ask that if you write a poem today, in the spirit of reciprocity, you respond to three or more writers. For all the prompts and to learn more about Verselove, click here.

Our Host

Glenda retired from full-time teaching in 2019 after a 38 year career and is now substitute teaching in her district. In addition to being a dog and cat mom, Glenda loves to travel and is a doting grandmother to Ezra, who at 22 months loves board books and is learning numbers, colors, and ABCs with Mom. Glenda was recently invited to be on the NCTE Children’s Poetry Awards Committee and is serving a three-year term. Glenda is participating in the Stafford Poetry Challenge to write a poem a day for a year. Glenda blogs at Swirl & Swing: www.glendafunk.wordpress.com

Inspiration

A few weeks ago author David Lubar shared a poem Alison Lubar, his daughter, wrote. “Rice for Quapas” appeared in Honey Literary, a publication that describes itself as “a BIPOC-focused literary journal.” The poem illuminates heritage through commentary on a recipe and through strikethroughs of typical recipe directions. As readers we understand cooking as tradition, love, and nourishment of body and soul through Alison’s strikethroughs and revisions. For example, consider this brief excerpt from the poem:

  1. Rinse the rice. Save the water to wash your hair. Add a tablespoon of the elderly dog’s otherwise dry kibble.You are a mutt….

You can read the entire poem online here.

Process

How fun would it be to create a STRIKETHROUGH poem, I thought, so today I invite you to compose or reimagine a Strikethrough poem. Here is a short video on how to strikethrough a text in the comment section below: https://www.loom.com/share/83ca8062de1b402ca4e7526e6362a008?sid=a81cb374-08ac-4c39-935f-d41b6522987f

For my poems I did the following:

I reimagined a poem I wrote after meeting a new doctor in my specialist’s practice. I wrote the first poem in December 2022.

The second poem is a response to my last wellness exam, the summation of which includes some egregious errors. At that appointment I saw a PA. I have frustrations, which show in this poem.

Glenda’s Poems

65 Is the New 45 Still 65

my new doctoranother medical provider i must educate
parent to children older now
2, 5, & 10— said he wants to understand aging but can’t, won’t until old age bites his ass
“don’t you know
65 is the new 45?” 65, you’re government old
when I observed, complained in longform:
“I’m getting old.
my aching hips
laughed as my
gray hair blinked
as my cataracted
eyes stared quizzically
into receding memories. lord, let me die before i’m dementiafied
spanning 64 past years.
he folded the list
chronicling current
medical maladies i’d hoped he’d take seriously
I’d prepared prior
to my wellness check,
slipped it into a folder & so he didn’t have to think about it
checked my heartbeat. and left me to contemplate end times.

—Glenda Funk
December 1, 2022
March 3, 2024 Strikethrough

Your Turn

  1. Take a favorite recipe such as Alison does in her poem and create a Strikethrough version.
  2. Compose a new poem or take one you’ve written and reimagine it as a Strikethrough version.
  3. Find inspiration in another text.
  4. As always, write as your muse leads you.

Now, scroll to the comment section below to write your own poem. (This is a public space, so you may use only your first name or initials depending on your privacy preferences.) Not ready? That’s okay. Read the poems already posted for more inspiration. Ponder your own throughout the day. Return later. And, if the prompt does not work for you, that is fine. All writing is welcome. Just write something. Also, please be sure to respond to at least three writers. Oh, and a note about drafting: Since we are writing in short bursts, we all understand (and even welcome) the typos and partial poems that remind us we are human and that writing is always becoming. If you’d like to invite other teachers to write with us, tell them to subscribe.

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Nathan Chase

I’ve been obsessed with this quote from Warframe.

It was not their force of will
not their void devilry
not their alien darkness
it was something else
It was that somehow, within the derelict horror, they had learnt to see within an ugly broken thing, and take away it’s pain

I am touched by the concept
That empathy makes an enemy scarier

Glenda Funk

Nathan,
That is a thought-provoking quote. I see why it has captured your attention. I’m a fan of litote and love how saying what something g isn’t forces my mind to work. You chose well in terms of what you crossed out. What’s left is a paradox as much as the last two lines. I really like what you’ve created.

Andrew H.

I absolutely love it when someone mentiones video game quotes! There are actually so many profound statements or phrases mentioned in games that most educators or academics miss due to their views on games. Your use of strikethrough in this quote was really good, making a new message based on the words of the original. Fantastic!

Saba T.

Hey Glenda. Sorry for posting late. I loved the prompt & your poem.

Using a quote by Clarissa Pinkola Esté from her book Women Who Run With the Wolves.

I’ve seen women insist on cleaning everything in the house taking care of everyone
before they could sit down to write… even begin to think about themselves.
and you know it’s a funny thing about housecleaning… being a woman
The drudgery it never comes to an end.
Perfect way to stop a woman.
A woman must be careful to not allow
over-responsibility (or over-respectabilty)
to steal her necessary creative rests, riffs, and raptures. her breath, her soul, her purpose.
She simply must put her foot down feet up whenever she fancies
and say no to half everyone & anyone
of what she believes who tries to dictate what she “should” be doing.
Art Life is not meant to be created lived in stolen moments only.

Rachel S

I never made it to this prompt, so just coming back to read through what others wrote! I love this SO much. And I feel so empowered now to “say no to everyone & anyone / who tries to dictate” what I “should” be doing! No dinner tonight, kids! Haha. That last line is fire.

weverard1

I
am
thrilled
to be back
at work today
after being on Spring Break.

Nathan Chase

I absolutely love this. The sarcastic take on the prompt has made my day.

Glenda Funk

🤣🤣🤣

Andrew H.

I actually laughed out loud after reading your poem. So many of us probably feel the same sentiment, and you using strikethrough to show that your being sarcastic just made it even funnier. Absolutely fantastic!

Mak

College, they say is the easiest time of your life
A ceaseless parade of friends and frivolous nights.
Just study a bit, and your set to succeed.
Your future secured , with the utmost ease.

Books left untouched, as parties call,
Sleeping past the alarm. Lectures unattended
Deadlines are a suggestion, not a guide to your life.
Pressure mounts, with nowhere to hide.

Social life, a balancing act, so tense.
Friendships strain, under academic suspense.
Mental health often takes the rear seat,
In a race for a diploma, a bittersweet feat.

Andrew H.

Loved your poem! I really resonated with your poem because college was pretty rough for me, and it does feel like nothing went to show for it after getting my degree (since I’m going back to grad school to get a different one). I’m just happy that I don’t need to experience the other things you mentioned anymore.

Glenda Funk

Mak,
Apologies for my delayed response. I didn’t see this when I checked the morning of April 29. Anyway, you’ve offered a perfect distillation of the mythology of college life and the reality. Are you at Oklahoma State? My brother? sister-in-law, and niece are all OSU grads. My brother has some good form life stories of his *Aloha Suite* and his time as the dorm social director.

Hope G

I realize the irony of being an adult posting this, and that not all adults are entitled and feel extra privileged, but this is for the ones who can’t act like actual adults around those of us that are young adults. I have unfortunately had this experience too many times.

Working with Adults

Are you entering a workplace where there are people adults?
Do you need help on how to deal with them from day to day?
We’ve got just the tips for you!

How to Work with Adults 101

The tips list for Teens and Young Adults Entering the Workforce

  1. They can sense fear. Remain calm.
  2. Remember that they are humans, too.
  3. Bring lots of snacks. 
  4. Goldfish, dried fruit, juice boxes
  5. COFFEE and PASTRIES
  6. Pastries can range from bagels to sweeter delights.
  7. Talk clearly. Enunciation is key!
  8. Talk loudly loud enough that they can hear you, but not so loud they think you’re teasing about them being too old to hear properly.
  9. Refrain from rolling your eyes when they ask you to repeat yourself because they didn’t hear you the first time.
  10. Also, refrain from big sighs or long pauses to stop your reactions.
  11. Remember that they’re your elder. older than you, but still need to treat you with respect.
  12. Civility and politeness are not the same as respect. You should always strive to be polite and civil, but respect is earned not freely given.
  13. They are not always right. Just because they are older have more life experience does not mean they know everything. 
  14. Breathe. Their actions are reflections of themselves. You are not intimidating, they are intimidated by you. Do not feel make yourself any less than who you are.
Glenda Funk

Dear Poets,

Thank you for being here today. Thank you for the many kind comments in support of my prompt and poems. I enjoyed reading your poems and will pop back in Monday to catch those who arrive after the bewitching hour.

Cheers,
Glenda

Mick

Title: F*** the Spectrum

I wish I could communicate with people. No, I don’t struggle with social interaction.  
Not just through texts,  
or letters, 
or hastily devised emails, 
but face to face. People find me easy to talk to.  
I want to admire their irises I can make eye contact just fine, 
as we hold a conversation. 
I want to talk like real people do. people often tell me 
What a wonderful conversationalist I am.  

Glenda Funk

Mick,
This is a fantastic strikethrough poem, one I know expresses the reality and desires of others on the spectrum. I love your title and think it would be dandy to use *fuck* if you’re so inclined. My favorite grad school English professor often talked about that word as being like all other words, a word w/ meaning derived through cultural constructs. Of course, you can’t use it w/ students, but here is fine. I taught speech as well as English during my long career, and I know exactly what you mean about eye contact. It’s not always easy for me because I have strabismus and have had several eye surgeries to correct it. Lastly, your poem really embodies the spirit of the prompt. Thank you.

Mick

Glenda,
Thank you so much for your reply! Your response inspired me to change my title from “F*** the Spectrum” to “F*** Fuck the Spectrum”.

Denise Krebs

Mick, this is such a great poem. I love the multiple ways you have communicated through this piece. I don’t know about the spectrum, but I do know about being an introvert and having a difficult time wanting to converse with people. Right now I’m reading Quiet: The Power of Introverts in a World That Can’t Stop Talking by Susan Cain; I find it to be empowering, like the second poem you write above. And that last crossed out line–so powerful and wrong–I’m glad is struck out “I want to talk like real people do” Wow!

Nathan Chase

This take on communication with neurodivergences was so relatable. Especially the line about the irises when you’re speaking to people.

Andrew H.

Walking

walking through life,
never knowing where you’re going,
or how long it will take to get there.

Finding new people to walk alongside,
on the short long journey of life.
Having people companions friends
walk with you makes it more fun.

You try you’re best,
at finding yourself and what you enjoy,
Its impossible difficult to do so,
but after many mistakes trials
You can find exactly who you are
And what your want to do.

Glenda Funk

Andrew,
Life really is a journey, and having someone to take those steps w/ us makes all the difference in each step we take along the way. Your poem has me reflecting on the many paths in my own journey and those who have traversed the various paths with me. It’s a lovely way to end this day of poetry.

Denise Krebs

Andrew, I like the choices of words that you replace in your poem. From the superlatives like never and impossible to the possible adds hope.

Mak

Andrew, I really like how you placed your strikethrough words. It took meaning in the sentence, but with it crossed out, our eyes skim pass it. I could not agree with you more about “Walking through life” it really is not easy in society today. I use to think I was the only one that suffered, but at times everyone does.

Marisa Rico

Thanks for the prompt! This has been one of my favorites so far!

“Hey, how’s everything going?”
Everything is going terribly great!
I’m having such a horrible wonderful day!
Nothing Everything is going my way!
I’m so tired happy I could cry sing!

“Are you sure you’re okay?”
Yes, I’m not okay!
Something Everything has gone wrong right!
I’m just tired dandy!
Everything Nothing is wrong!

“It’s okay to ask for help.”
But I’m not doing alright!
Everything is not fine!
Please, there is a need no need to worry!
Thanks, but I do don’t need any help!

Glenda Funk

Marisa,
I‘m thrilled you like the prompt. Your poem(s) are necessary reminded to listen to the *not said* in conversations w/ friends. So much changes when we change o e word. Well done!

Mick

Marisa,
I love your strikethrough poem. I understand feeling like you have to pretend everything is okay, even when you feel like you’re drowning. Great work!

Leilya Pitre

Marisa, your poem reflects the lives of so many. I know most of my students feel that way, and I, too, often hide my inner stress and anxiety behind the smiles, so “I am not okay” is often a ready response. This is a true strikethrough poem. Hope you feel a little better today.

Mak

Marisa, wow what a beautiful structured poem. I really like how you mask that everything is wrong but in this poem nothing is wrong. I feel like it really advocates for people that have to mask feelings.

Jeania White

From gray clouds come blue skies
From rain showers come green grass
From heartache and difficulty
Come resiliance

From the seed, the flower
From the flower, the fruit
From the fruit, the seed

As surely as the sun follows the storm
As the fruit follows flower
Joy follows pain
The hard will come and pass
Sorrow may come for in the night
But the gold will shimmer in morning’s light.

Thank you Glenda, for the prompt and for hosting today. I know, it’s late, and I’m sorry. I am using the April showers/May flowers poem from the other day. I think it works better as a minimal poem than it did before the strikeouts. I have known for a long time that you have a wit with words that is hard to beat. I was not aware of the depth and beauty of your work. THank you for allowing me on this journey with you, and with all of these amazing writers. This month has been a blessing in many ways for me. I think I’ve found a voice that I was pretty convinced no one cared to hear.

Glenda Funk

Jeania,
You know I like to surprise folks who think they know me. 😉 I’m so happy you’ve found your voice and promise it will get stronger the more you use it. It has been a joy having you here this month. I like the strikeouts you made but also like the original poem. I also like the way reading the pain part creates a duality of meaning depending on where one pauses.

Leilya Pitre

Jeania, both the original and the strikethrough poems are wonderfully crafted. As I read the first one, I find myself slowing down because the prepositions, verbs, and transitional conjunctions reflect the process. The second poem seems to be more dynamic and somewhat snappy, creating a different rhythm. Well done!

Donnetta D Norris

I sure am tired over this crap!
I need to plan writing start thinking about me.
I was am always trying to have it done early. take care of everyone else.
People are depending A lot is falling on me.
It’s not fair.
Were we talking What about my life?
What does that it all mean?
I sure am tired!

Glenda Funk

Donnetta,
I feel this tiredness in your poem, but I also see that focus on others. I know the women in this community feel that w/ you. I keep thinking about T.S. Eliot’s words: “April is the cruelest month.” It will be over soon, as will the school year. Hang in there.

Jeania White

Donnetta,
YES MA’AM!!! Every word!! The 3rd line has been my hallmark as well, and I think I’m over it!

Marisa Rico

Donnetta, I can feel how torn you are in this poem. You have to focus on others, but you want to focus on yourself. You can see and feel the struggle in your poem. You’re not alone, and I hope you can get through everything okay. You did a wonderful job with your poem!

Joanne Emery

I’m back with this poem/letter. I went for a lighter note.

Dear Mrs. Smith, Most Boring Teacher of the Year
 
I am writing this letter to apologize
for my recent behavior in your class.  because my parents made me.
I understand that my actions were
inappropriate and disrespectful,          really funny and made the class laugh.
and I take full responsibility for my behavior.
I want to express my sincere apologies
and assure you that it will not happen again.      how happy I am to be  class clown!
I realize that my actions were a violation
of the classroom rules and expectations.    much more exciting than your lessons.
I understand the seriousness of my actions          silliness
and the impact they have had on my classmates.
I am committed to making sure
 that it does not happen(s) again (and again) in the future.
I will work hard to regain your trust.
Please accept my apologies once again… but you are STILL the Most Boring Teacher of the Year!

Sincerely,
Your student

Glenda Funk

Joanne,
OMG! You have me in stitches. My husband enjoyed this, too. Of course I had to read it to him. I’ve seen his Shakespeare work. LOL! Writing from the point of view of the student is genius. Those fake apologies are such a waste of a teacher’s time. I prefer the authentic student voice, which you have captured beautifully. Of course Class Clown will make
sure
 that it does not happen(s) again (and again) in the future.”
Still laughing after multiple readings. Do read Staci’s and Stefani’s poems. Y’all have created a new genre!

Marisa Rico

Joanne, your piece is hilarious! Your brutal honesty makes your piece humorous. It is also relatable to students (troublemakers or not) who wish they could say the truth to their teachers. You did a great job!

Denise Krebs

Joanne, what a wonderful strikethrough poem. This was so fun to read both ways. Haha! “Dear Most Boring Teacher of the Year” just cracked me up, and it continued throughout. Well done!

Leilya Pitre

Joanne, I like how you reimagined this poem adding what the student’s sincere words might be. So true! In this context, “I take full responsibility for my behavior” sounds like slap in the face. As funny as the poem reads, I just want to hug all teachers at this point of the year. Thank you for this gem!

Joanne Emery

Glenda – Your prompt is so unique and creative. Your poem made me say, “Ouch,” and nod my head in agreement. I’ve been there, but also with female doctors. I’m not sure it’s as much a male thing as a doctor with no bedside manner/empathy thing. I’m sorry you had that experience. I’ve been away today, but will ponder this prompt and hopefully come up with a poem!

Jennifer Guyor-Jowett

Glenda, your poems are amazing! I loved the first one (all the snark) and the second one had me laughing aloud. So, so true. My computer battery died and I was hoping to be able to get back to this later today because trying strikethrough on the phone seemed undoable. Alas, it was not meant to be, but I’m aiming to have a go at this later when I’m back up and running. Thank you for sharing your writing and prompt today!

Mo Daley

Glenda, This is a great prompt. I don’t have the mental capacity to work on it tonight, though. I will definitely come back to it. Thanks for bringing it to my attention.

Friendship Etheree
By Mo Daley 4/28/24

I
Feel so
Lucky to
Have friends who have
Loved me for forty-
Some years and can still find
Interesting things to talk
About, stories to reminisce
About ss we enter our golden
Years, all together, kicking and screaming

Glenda Funk

Mo,
I know this prompt is a heavy lift. Imagine how my students fared year after year. LOL! Anyway, you know where to find me when you get a chance to give the prompt a test run. That said, I do like your etheree and wish I could see those friends more often and wish so many had not already cast off their earthly coil.

Anna J. Small ROSEBORO

Mo, this works this week with all the prompts we’ve had to reflect on the past. So, top of the week with an Etheree about friends.
My favorite line
“Years, all together, kicking and screaming.”

I could used this poem at the birthday party for my brother yesterday. 🙂 I’d only have had to strike out two words. The relationship word and the number of years word. I won’t put the second one here, ’cause then folks will guess how old I MAY be. 🙂

Thanks for sharing this poem, today.

Denise Krebs

Mo, you must have had a great day or weekend with these gemlike friends. Lovely. It is fun to have old stories with old friends. What is fun here, though, is the surprise at the end that in your golden years you’ll be “all together, kicking and screaming” That makes me smile.

Maureen Y Ingram

Thank you, Glenda! My ‘muse’ was messing with me today; trying to process some terrible news about a loved one.

Maybe It’s An Irish Catholic Thing

It is so wonderful to hear
he is doing so
very well
(I’m not supposed to know how hard things are; I have
to pretend I don’t know about his addiction issues)
I carry a smile on my face though 
my heart is heavy
generations of secrets
people living while dying
If only we were walking together
opening up to one another 
there’d be no need for eggshells

Wait, is that a cracking sound?

Glenda Funk

Maureen,
Im so sorry to hear you’re burdened by family news. I’m holding you in my thoughts. You’ve done a spectacular job imagining a strikethrough poem. Your two poems are so different from one another. Is that a cross before “carry”? It looks as though it might be upside down. It really is difficult to know how to be around those w/ addictions, especially those we love. Hugs to you, my friend.

Mo Daley

Wow, Maureen. You’ve tackled such difficult topic so beautifully. I feel your pain in your writing today. I’m sorry this is such a difficult time for you. Hugs.

Stacey L. Joy

Maureen,
My heart aches as this one hits close to home. My son is celebrating 3 3/4 years of sobriety and is a sponsor for some who are going through the process of becoming clean. He talks about how secrets are so much a part of the addiction. Your poem with and without the strikethroughs carry the weight you’re feeling and I wish I could take some of it off your shoulders.

I love that you recognize that carrying secrets while walking on eggshells is hard. Eventually, they’ll break and the truth will set the person free.

Hugs.🤗

Ashley

I am using one of my favorite gritty poems from last year’s Verse Love–a poker camp with death.

Death sits across from me

Death sits across from me far away from me
My strong hands Gritty bones holding cards
Staring across Elbows resting on the table
As I lay down my chips
Time to ante up
What risk will this be? A cocky smirk emerges on my face
A friend to my left
Folded. Grinning
Out Even though they’re out of the game.

Ashley

*a poker game–forgive my typo!

Seana Hurd Wright

Ashley, I enjoyed your poem. I did think, “she might be discussing a card game…” Your words perfectly described a low-key stress situation. I love ” A cocky smirk emerges on my face” and your title is perfect! thanks

Glenda Funk

Ashley,
I remember this poem! It is gritty, and those final lines are bone chilling!
A friend to my left
Folded. Grinning
Out Even though they’re out of the game.”
We’re all in this game until we fold. I enjoyed this poetic memory and your reimagining of a poem from last year. Thank you.

Maureen Y Ingram

“Gritty bones” gives a gritty chill!

Susan

Glenda,
Your experience with the medical world is maddening and you document it so well through your writing! This strikethrough poem was a real challenge for me. I’m looking forward to reading the others!

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Em

I thought your poem was really funny, especially all the Rob Lowe parts. It captures that ongoing to-do list that we tend to keep in our minds throughout the day. Great job!

Dave Wooley

Susan, this is great! I completely relate (well, maybe not exactly the Rob Lowe parts, but 100% to the piles of laundry on the bed and the sit down to write a poem part). The recurring phrases and slight alterations to the phrases that anchor your poem are funny and remind me of a blues poem in the way they pace and ground the poem.

Glenda Funk

Susan,
Does Rob Lowe know? Does your husband know? I might have to read that book if it’s that much of an escape from cooking and laundry! I do love the way this poem isn’t about RL or the book! LOL. The physical appearance of it is a perfect visual stretching of the imagination. Fin poem, Thank you,

Denise Krebs

Susan, haha! So fun! I think a to do list-strikeout poem is perfect. I love how we get to see the details of your day, especially with all the fun Rob Lowe items! This was a challenge, but I like how yours turned out.

Maureen Y Ingram

I am smiling about your day musing about Rob Lowe. Now, he’s on my mind, too!

Stacey L. Joy

Susan,
What a clever approach! I love this so much because I feel validated when I had all these ideas about how today would go and then it didn’t quite happen. I think writing about the day I thought I would have would be a fun option I would want to try at a later time.

I’m glad you enjoyed your day and created an even better strikethrough poem!

Em

For old times’ sake, we say as we yearn for the time, the place, the person we used to know or used to be.

We eat the food they used to make that makes us remember the times we had.
We play the games they used to play to feel the joy we used to feel.
We watch the movies they used to watch that comforted the child we used to be that used to sit on th

But now it’s just a movie to laugh at and mock and think “how silly,” while inside a piece of you mourns and cries remembering

For old times’ sake,
We repeat stories of the good times that, when they happened were just ‘times,’
We talk about the people who are now gone and wonder what ever happened to them and whether we would like the person they are now

For old times’ sake,
We listen to the music we used to play every day during that specific time at that specific time at that specific place,
But now it’s just music that makes us cringe at the people we used to know
The places we used to live and play and work
And the person that lived the life
That is now only referred to in conversations
Started with the phrase

For old times’ sake.

Sarah J. Donovan, PhD (s/her)

Em,
I read it once without the strikes and once with, and find such beautiful stories in the tense. From used to make to that makes. From used to play into feel the joy. The mourning is in thee tense so softly.

Sarah

Glenda Funk

Em,
Im drawn to the magical way your poem moves from the past into the present through strikethroughs. Theres such a loving re
nostalgic tone until near the end when you say, “But now…” and following. This reminds me of Nick in the Great Gatsby saying the people who once fascinated him no longer have that effect. Experience changes the way we see the world, especially the past. Great strikethrough poem.

Maureen Y Ingram

I am drawn to “the movies that comforted the child” and “while inside a piece of you mourns and cries remembering” I find this so beautiful!

Sharon Roy

Glenda,

Thanks for hosting, prompting and for your clever poem. I hope you found some catharsis in writing it and that you find a more caring doctor.

Allergies: No known allergies The patriarchy,

mansplainers,

men who think they’re the plan

Hear! Hear!

Looking forward to trying this prompt out again another time, revising a poem of my own or modifying someone else’s. Grateful that the prompt helped me revise my thinking today.

Practice

After Jenn’s yoga class

Strikethrough the frustration of expectations 
Strikethrough the intellectualisation of your experience
Sink into your body on a cellular level

Glenda Funk

Sharon,
Your poem certainly captures the spirit of the prompt and of a yoga *practice* even w/out the literal strikethroughs. We all know the tendency to compare ourselves to the yogi who can twist their body into every pose.

Maureen Y Ingram

Sink into your body on a cellular level – love that!

Mo Daley

Sharon, it’s like you read my mind tonight. This is the poem I wanted to write. Love it!

Seana Hurd Wright

Goodfellas Spaghetti and Meatballs-recipe by Iron Chef Alex Guarnaschelli
I love this dish so I fix it about every 3 weeks.

Goodfellas sauce
2 T of extra virgin olive oil
2 medium yellow onions, halved and sliced
5 garlic cloves
kosher salt
1 tsp. sugar
1 tsp. dried oregano
1 28 oz can of peeled whole tomatoes, with their juices
1/2 cup of fresh basil leaves
Make the sauce

Goodfellas meatballs
1 lb. of ground beef
1/2 cup of panko breadcrumbs, toasted
1/2 finely grated Parmesan cheese
1/2 cup chopped fresh parsley
kosher salt
1/4 tsp red pepper flakes
1 large egg lightly beaten
1/2 cup olive oil
Make the meatballs and cook them in separately in a skillet until brown on the outside but pink in the middle.
Later put the meatballs into the sauce and cook until finished.

To finish
kosher salt
12 oz. spaghetti noodles
1/2 cup finely grated Parmesan cheese
Cook the noodles in hot boiling water.

Fix this dish on a weekend, when you have 2 hours, a glass of something to drink, and your favorite music playing.

If you’re cooking this after teaching all day, try this:

Goodfellas sauce
2 T of extra virgin olive oil
2 medium yellow onions, halved and sliced buy them already cut up
5 garlic cloves they sell garlic in a jar already diced
kosher salt
1 tsp. sugar
1 tsp. dried oregano
1 28 oz can of peeled whole tomatoes, with their juices buy a jar of spaghetti sauce
1/2 cup of fresh basil leaves
Throw everything into a pot and turn the fire up to medium.

Goodfellas meatballs
1 lb. of ground beef
1/2 cup of panko breadcrumbs, toasted
1/2 finely grated Parmesan cheese
1/2 cup chopped fresh parsley
kosher salt
1/4 tsp red pepper flakes
1 large egg lightly beaten
1/2 cup olive oil
Buy fresh frozen meatballs already made and cooked. They usually have beef
or ground turkey ones available.

Throw everything into a big pot and let it cook on low while you relax, grade a FEW papers, exercise, check in with your family, or just listen to the silence.

By Seana Hurd Wright

Stacey L. Joy

Ha ha ha!!! Clever, chef Seana! If I were a meatballs fan, I would definitely go with your recipe!

💜

Glenda Funk

Seana,
Okay, I love this recipe revision and the way it tells the world how the lives of busy teachers are. I know how to cook and do a pretty good job of it, but for me it’s a utilitarian activity, one I perform because I love to eat. That recipe sounds so good, however, that I think I need to try it.

Denise Krebs

Seana, I love your version! It sounds as delicious as the other recipe, but much more appropriate for a busy teacher. I love the “grade a FEW papers” and all the other busy and peaceful time fillers while it cooks.

Ashley

Seana,

I love how clever your approach is, and I wish I could have thought of something like this!

Maureen Y Ingram

Your shortcuts make me smile – especially, “Buy fresh frozen meatballs already made and cooked.” I bet the dinner was quite yum, nevertheless!!

Joanne Emery

Seana – this is how I make spaghetti! How did you know? Busy teachers – quick cooks! A delightful read! Thank you!

Sarah

Left-over Pizza

It is rare.
Heated or cold
I don’t care.

But he insists
The toaster over
Is the only way
That to ignore
This mandate
Insults his craft

But when he is
Not home, I take
a cold bite and
nuke the rest
while I chew.

I don’t have
time for ovens.

Stacey L. Joy

I can’t imagine spending time with a toaster oven to reheat pizza! I’m with you!

Glenda Funk

Sarah,
This is delightful and insightful, one of those marital moments that confounds since both hot and cold pizza are a matter of taste. Does a microwave count as an acceptable way to reheat pizza?

Leilya Pitre

I am with him today, Sarah )) I do understand there is no time to spend on reheating a slice of left-over pizza. The words you stroke through “But when he is not home” sound a bit mischievous and remind me of some things I would do as a child when parents weren’t at home.

Denise Krebs

Sarah, perfect! I’m with you–Pizza, hot cold nuked or oven–it’s all the best! My mouth is watering while I read your poem.

Ashley

Sarah,

This made me giggle. I am someone who always preheats the oven to bring my pizza back to life while my partner happily munches on cold pizza straight from the box much to my dismay.

Maureen Y Ingram

Ha! I love “I take/a cold bite” – he doesn’t need to know.

Joanne Emery

I’m with you too – cold pizza over reheated. Nuke – NO! Too chewy for me!

Angie

Omg does everyone say nuke? I thought it was just my mom. Cool! It’s either cold or oven (air fryer) for me. No microwaving allowed LOL!! Fun poem.

Anna J. Small ROSEBORO

Thanks, Glenda, for another way to honor my upbringing in a fresh, new way. My strikethroughs are what the speaker may be thinking, words she knows she must not verbalize.

Why Do You Care?

You better just sit down and shut up
Who you telling to be quiet?
You. You talk before you think.
I think you’re off there.
Anyway, why do you care?

You know what I mean
Don’t be making a scene.
This your family you’re making look bad
You want Grammamma to be happy not sad.

Okay, Okay, I’ll do what you say
And not because you say it that way
Grammamma says we must be good
Doing what we know we should

So, let’s do what we would if she were here
Okay, I will, but don’t you cheer
It’s Grammamma’s disappointment I fear
I know you’re being sincere

Her teachings linger on
Don’t you hear them in that song?

GRAMMA SAYS.jpg
Glenda Funk

Anna,
Okay, Okay, I’ll do what you say
And not because you say it that way”
channels what most grandchildren think at one time or another, I think. You have me thinking about some long ago conversations w/ my grandma. Thanks for sparking memories.

Sarah J. Donovan, PhD (s/her)

Anna, this is so great with all the punctuation and strikes. These struck phrases echo truths, explicitly, direct, not entirely unkind in the “look bad” and “making a scene.” There is perspective there we cannot see that she’s not there to say…yes, wisdom can linger if we listen.

Sarah

Jeania White

Anna,
Everything about this screams the conversations that I may (or may not) have had in my own mind growing up. The line “Grandmamma says we must be good” resonates with me today. My mom was and still is my internal guide.

Denise Krebs

Oh, Glenda,
Thank you for hosting us today, and for your gentle and careful care you always take of us as writers. There is an infinite amount of source material to write poems like this with, and you gave two good examples with your own poem and the doctor’s notes. Those were great, as was the recipe example of Alison Lubar. The changes you made to your poem were great. How you listed the body parts, hips, hair, eyes matter-of-factly. And this: “into receding memories. lord, let me die before i’m dementiafied” So powerful! I agree with that prayer.

This was a fun puzzler for me this morning. I took a poem I wrote last week with Stacey’s prompt. It includes a shout out to Jennifer because I added to my poem today a line from her comment last week.

For Grandma  Mom
I’ve been writing this since
I was six years old born and we
young ones had to climb
and you had to handle into the brokenness of life
with really without a partner window
to unlock the door to get all
into the house where the birds
had taken up residence
then after Dad died you
became the go-to giver,
of all things for Grandma,
one being to restore
the bird and rodent infested
old homestead
for her.
 
I’ve been writing this since
that house homestead Grandpa
built in the 40s became your home
after Grandma died in the 80s
and that kitchen where she used to cook
became where you cooked,
we watched you make
popovers being just one of your masterpieces–
you gently beating the eggs and milk
and stirring in the flour
until just moistened.
 
I’ve been writing this since
your index finger spatula-ed
out every last bit of the batter
you poured the popover batter
into the mismatched custard cups
not caring about wasting that last bit
(a clapback at the not-so-great Depression
of your childhood, perhaps)
and baked them for what seemed
(to my children) like hours
at two different temperatures
 
I’ve been writing this since
those popovers, with their custardy
interiors and crispy toasted outsides,
came out of the oven
into the history of a new generation
who broke them open and enjoyed
and added
honey
or boysenberry jam
or syrup
the steam rising as honey drizzled
and boysenberry jam glopped
thank you, Jennifer
and We ate our fill
on those slow moving much faster
deserty mornings
at Grandma’s house then your house
 
I’ve been writing this since
I found those old custard cups
high on a shelf in Lori’s laundry room
and she welcomed me to take
them home, and now I’m
I became the grandma who bakes popovers
in the desert. And you would be glad
wouldn’t care at all to hear
that I’ve got your
Grandma’s magic spatula
finger so I don’t waste a drop

Glenda Funk

Denise,
Isn’t it amazing what strikeouts bring into relief? In your new poem I noticed the centering of your grandmother, but in the original poem I noticed the speaker as observer. I love the comparison. There’s still that full circle nostalgia, but this shift in focus is so illuminating. And thank you for those kind comments. All the poems are enriching my Sunday. I do hope you’ll write another strikeout poem using the popover recipe. I think that would be fun to read.

Mo Daley

Full circle, indeed. This is so lovely, Denise. Is it wrong I want a popover now?

Joanne Emery

Oh Denise – I loved the original poem, the imagery and the story. The strikethrough puts all the most important things in the limelight. Now – I think I’ll go back and strike through some of my poems!

Stacey L. Joy

Denise, amaaaazing! I am in awe at how well it worked this time around and took on a different perspective and vibe! The ending is priceless!

that I’ve got your

Grandma’s magic spatula

finger so I don’t waste a drop

Leilya Pitre

I remember your last week’s poem, Denise! I loved it then, and I love what you did with a strikethrough. Beautiful! I also looked at mine for this purpose and did it for myself, but couldn’t post. It made me too sad.

Stacey L. Joy

Glenda, thank you for the opportunity to respond to a parent the way I wish I could have last week. I love this idea. It wasn’t as easy as my mind expected but I think I made my poem make sense. This was fun! I feel relieved. LOL!

Your poem regarding your doctor’s appointment hits home. I am frustrated with my doctor as well and I’m starting to wonder if I need to look for additional health care outside of my provider’s network. Thank you, again!

Teacher-Tired Letter to a Parent

Good evening, Mr. and Mrs. PainInMyAss
I received your response
Regarding LittlePain’s, your son’s, behavior
I’m not sure if you realize
My watching him and redirecting him
Are examples of a teacher who cares
You said he feels targeted
And that his classmates see him as a loser
I am not responsible for 
How he feels about his classmates
I am responsible for helping him
Develop organizational skills 
Like not storing trash in his backpack
So that you will be able to read
The school and classroom flyers and 
Order 5th grade promotion pictures
And respond to the graded papers
I’ve taken hours to prepare for you.

You have opted to send LittePain, your son
To a very prestigious and expensive
Private French school for next year
Good luck! Bonne chance!
Do you think the teachers 
Will understand why he just sits 
And doesn’t respond to directions
Know that you will appreciate me
And all I tried to teach him next year.
It won’t be a surprise to you, them, or me.

©Stacey L. Joy, April 28, 2024

Glenda Funk

Stacey,
LOL! I love your original poem to LittlePain’s parents who are clearly in the *not my child* cult. I read both your poems to Ken and he howled. I think derp in his could he once thought I was the only teacher who rants about kids and parents like Mr. & Mrs. Pain. I’m so thrilled you wrote this and that you found catharsis in writing it. Love it!

brcrandall

Brilliantly crafted, Stacey….loving the crossing out of “Little Pain”, as you deliver an absolute treasure to us today!

Sharon Roy

This is brilliant, Stacey. Looking forward to writing one of my own next time I’m faced with a similar situation. I might have to go back and rewrite some of the emails I’ve had to write to one parent this spring just to have some catharsis and find the humor in the situation.

You have opted to send LittePain, your son

To a very prestigious and expensive

Private French school for next year

Good luck! Bonne chance!

I share your delight in expressing the truths you’ve been holding back and then the shifting to the restraint of professionalism.

Thanks for sharing and inspiring.

Dave Wooley

Stacey, you had me at Mr and Mrs PainInMyAss, lmao!!! And it got better from there. “Good luck! Bonne Chance!” made me lauh out loud, and the ending was great!

Denise Krebs

Oh, my, Stacey. That’s so awesome. I cracked up at all the strikethroughs. We have to do some of that strikethrough in our writing and speaking, don’t we? “Good luck! Bonne chance!” Yes, they will learn and appreciate your efforts.

Sarah J. Donovan, PhD (s/her)

So much truth here in what is expressed with and without strikes. Teachers must navigate the parent terrain so carefully and yet what might happen if we could say it straight. How liberating for us all.

Susan

Oh, Stacey! There is so much both said and “unsaid” in this letter/poem. I wish we could be that upfront and transparent with parents.

Joanne Emery

Enjoyed this so much! I took the tack of the student writing “an apology” to the teacher. I think our poems go so well together!

Dave Wooley

Glenda, this is a great prompt! I’ve never seen this form before. Your poems–the original and the new poem are brilliant and necessary.

I took a hack at a poem from earlier this month and, well, the results were maybe a little too harsh, lol, so I went back into the archives and grabbed this one about writing poems to reflect on writing songs and how that process fits in my life (or sort of squeezes in).

When I poem get a beat

When I poem get a beat
it sits in my inbox and festers

I force myself to
swallow delay and delay over
the fear of the
blank page–you can’t do this.
you’re too old. you have nothing to
say.

The cursor blinking When I finally
open the attachment and listen,
the beat pulses
faker faker faker faker…
when I poem get a beat
I chase the
ghosts of writing workshops my childhood
where I showed up as never fit in,
the dude white boy who wrote raps
and didn’t know what
enjambment appropriation
meant.

When I poem write to the beat i’m not grading
and i hate grading yet the guilt of
ungraded assignments follows like a shadow
and I should be grading think grades are
a poor substitute for conversations
butso I’d rather
poem. I write these songs instead.

cuz Sharing a poem song with
a student class is so much better
than sharing a grade strange
which doesn’t mean
anything anyway and does it mean
anything anyway? as they listen quietly
and I stain the armpits of my
shirt with anxious perspiration
(and they never rarely read the make comments
that take forever…)
but they I will listen to the poem when they do,
hoping my vulnerability was a teachable moment.

Leilya Pitre

Dave, so many are with you this morning as you declare: “and i hate grading yet the guilt of
ungraded assignments follows like a shadow.” This is our sad reality, and the administration wants these grades to be in regularly. I also wish we could assess the individual student’s growth instead of assuming the entire class is at the same level in the beginning of the course. I like the poem you chose to revise The ending lines show that in the moments your studnets listen to your song, you exchange places, it makes you vulnerable. I experience the same when sharing my writing with my college studnets, some of them are creative writers, and it’s a bit intimidating, to say the least. Thank you!

Glenda Funk

Dave,
I don’t k ow what you abandoned, obviously, but I love what you e offered here. I see several new poems that could be stand alone verses, but the words that really speak to me are
you can’t do this.
you’re too old. you have nothing to 
say.”

As one who began writing g poetry in 2018, these words have rattled around my head the past six years. Also, I’m sure you know about Sarah’s YA project. She requests poems around 20 lines, so if you’re inclined to edit this further, consider sending it to her.

Stacey Joy

Absolutely love the messages here. Vulnerability in the classroom is courageous! And don’t you hate grading and being haunted but ungraded assignments?

When I poem write to the beat i’m not grading

and i hate grading yet the guilt of

ungraded assignments follows like a shadow

and I should be grading think grades are 

a poor substitute for conversations

butso I’d rather

poem. I write these songs instead.

Sharon Roy

Dave,

Absolutely love your ending and the parallels differences between grading conversing and sharing poetry.

as they listen quietly

and I stain the armpits of my

shirt with anxious perspiration

(and they never rarely read the make comments

that take forever…)

but they will listen to the poem when they do,

hoping my vulnerability was a teachable moment.

I’ve also felt the “anxious perspiration” of sharing writing with students. It absolutely is a teachable moment—for both teacher and students.

Leilya Pitre

Glenda, your prompt is a fun way to revisit some poems. I like how realistic you are “65 Is the New 45 Still 65.” I feel that with every passing year the age is catching up with my unsettled nature. I used to think that I’d never be older than 25.
This “lord,
let me die before i’m dementiafied” is my prayer as well. Both of my parents had signs during
their final weeks, and it was so painful to see them deteriorate so quickly.
“MyChart Patient Update” with your
interpretation, especially the note of the 21st century life support, channel
your frustrations.
 
I will try to do a more thoughtful one later today if I have any juice left. I am revising a chapter for a book, and in it I used two simple poems to introduce poetry to my eighth-graders about 15 years ago. So I thought I’d strike through some words in those poems to give it a start. It could also be a good exercise for students to notice what words belong,
don’t belong, or could be replaced.I added a couple new words in italics in parenthesis.

I Feel Sad
 
I see your picture on my desk,
Taking me to fond memories
We shared together.
 
I know your presence in my life
Was a generous gift
Anyone would be happy to have.
 
I remember your smile,
And the way your mouth curled upward
When you brought me (better than) flowers.
 
I read the words of comfort
That are meant to heal me,
But they make me cry.
 
I feel sad.
 
 
I Am Anxious (but Hopeful)
 
I am anxious:
      Worries swirling in my mind,
      Clinging to me like a heavy cloak after the storm.
 
I am anxious:
    The world’s unrest, injustice, and hatred
    Pull me to a breaking point.
 
I am anxious:
    My heart aches for those
    Who suffer(s) and cry(ies).
 
I am anxious,
   But I push forward and face (through) reality
   I will (to) see a new day and a new hope.

Glenda Funk

Leilya,
Your note touches on an exercise I’ve used w/ students: having them delete all unnecessary words. This is an excellent way to teach concision in writing. I love both your poems, but the first is my favorite. The last verse is something g I think about often:
I read the words of comfort
That are meant to heal me,
But they make me cry.”

So often we try to fix grief others experience when the best course of action is simply being present. Your strikeouts bring this idea into relief.

Sharon Roy

Leilya,

what a beautiful poem of love and grief. Thank you for sharing.

This stanza especially resonated with me:

I read the words of comfort

That are meant to heal me,

But they make me cry.

Kim Johnson

Leilya, the pain of photos and memories is so real, and I feel it in your words. The greatest sources of comfort are, too, the greatest sources of discomfort sometimes. Grief is a deep, dark hole – – and your poem captures the emotions so well. All the best poems, I am convinced, are those that get the emotions stirring, and yours does today.

Jeania White

Leilya,
These are both haunting and beautifully done. How much you say in so few words is inspiring!

Denise Krebs

Oh, I like this Leilya. Such a good idea. Taking out all the words that can go without being said. In the second poem, I like the theme of anxious but hopeful. It is a good place to be during stressful times.

Scott M

I’m not sure what I stumbled upon but I’m getting some serious
Film Noir vibes here, with its cynical characters, its stark lighting effects, 
frequent use of flashbacks, and underlying Existentialist philosophy

or to go back, I wanted to write a poem based on the back copy of Kellogg’s 
new cereal Extra, I thought I could strike out certain words and phrases
(but not very many, mind you) to change it into some Sapphic or Catullian
Love Poem, I mean, come on, with words like
“Extra indulgent”
“Extra dreamy”
“Extra luscious”
(who describes a cereal as “Luscious”? Kellogg’s, that’s who)
and let’s not forget this last bit of text: “Experience an extra delicious moment of pure
delight from the first bite to the last.”

This research led me to a boycott of Kellogg’s  – not because of their salacious
ad copy – but because their new ad claims that you should be able to eat cereal 
all the time at any time of day

those monsters, amirite? kidding

what’s the BFD over breakfast for dinner
don’t people do that all the time
is this invented outrage? aren’t there real, legit outrageous things
happening in this world of ours – this fetid petri dish of a world of ours
you know, things to actually be outraged about

but then I read some of the reviews on their site and my mind was blown

now, I’m not a conspiracy nut, not a follower of QAnon or the Illuminati or
the Nasdaq, but I think there is something real, something insidious,
something real insidious happening here

Look, I think Raymond Chandler said it best, “Dead men are heavier than broken hearts.”
but that doesn’t have anything to do with this so I’ll just let that go

for now

(See? ominous)

Let me just say, 
I’m clack clacking away
at this keyboard looking
for answers trying to
understand this mug
of a life, like a prize fighter
who just went seven rounds
with himself and kept punching
and spitting out teeth
because he likes the clink
the enamel makes on
the hardwood floors,
oh, yes, these woods are
hard and wood, and
the sun is low, it’s dark in
here and all the shadows
are as sharp as knives,
no, all the shadows have
knives, they’re as sharp
as knives and they’re
wielding knives

Maybe I could just turn on the lights,

Ah, that’s better. 

Where was I? Incentivized reviews, oh right, the femme fatales of the cereal world,
How can they be trusted (and why do these people keep taking pictures of the box 
and their bowls of cereal)

this is big business, I realize now, exposing this seedy underbelly of crispy almondy goodness

what follows are actual reviews posted to the site, and I think you’ll see what I see when you look through your eyes at the cold hard screen of your computer monitor, the flicker rate so calming, so calming that you are pulled toward the big sleep

Oh, brother, just take a look

“2 months ago
I really like this cereal. It was crunchy, had big clusters and was delicious! Before I could snap a picture, my boys ate it all. Now I need to go out and buy more. I recommend trying this yummy cereal.”

Does this cereal somehow tap into addiction (or aggression?) for the male of the species?

“2 months ago
He loved it. I wasn’t able to get a picture of the box because my brother got the the box before I did. He raved about it. He said it has lots of oats and honey goodness. The chunks were a great size. The cereal did not get soggy. 10 out of 10. Recommended”

Who is the “he”?  Is it the “brother”?  I do not know, yet I am intrigued.  He “raved about it” and “said it has lots of oats and honey goodness.”  This is hearsay and wouldn’t stand up in any court of law.  Why didn’t the “brother” write the review?  Perhaps there is no “brother.” 

“3 months ago
As soon as the box arrived, it was gone. We fought for the box, lol. It was great with milk, warmed up like oatmeal and my favorite with yogurt. It’s already on my list I just hope it comes in a much larger box!”

Definitely causes aggression in test subjects and apparently a voracious all-consuming appetite. 

“2 months ago
Kellogg’s Almond Granola Cereal is well-loved for its tasty blend of flavors. The crunch and sweetness from the almonds make it a delightful choice for breakfast. Its versatility allows it to be enjoyed with yogurt or milk.”

And there’s your ChatGPT review.  I think Chandler said it best, I believe this ad as much as I believe bullets fall like rain in a swimming pool on a hot summer day

and believe you me
I’d like to end this
poem pastiche
this mixed-up
Mash-up of crime
noir and research
field guide
right here and now
but i’m afraid of turning
down the computer
afraid of those shadows
the ones that are as
sharp as knives
while also holding
knives and it looks
like those knives
have knives

If you get my point? 

Oh, right, yeah,
I already established 
that the light was on.

Sorry.

I guess I can just
end this thing
now

__________________________________________

Glenda, please accept my apologies, lol, I don’t know what happened.  I had every intention of doing an honest-to-goodness strikethrough poem, but things turned dicey fast and got derailed, like a freight train speeding through this labyrinth of a city that never sleeps barreling headlong, hell-bent….see? See what I mean?  (And if you’re interested in visiting this darker side of the web and picking up the trail of these weird cereal consumer reviews, you can find them here at the Kellogg’s site.)

Angie

Omg Scott, I laughed out loud (not lol) at this: “Why didn’t the ‘brother’ write the review? Perhaps there is no ‘brother.’” And my husband looked at me crazy and I attempted to explain but then just settled with looking crazy. Thanks for the laugh, as always.

Leilya Pitre

Scott, this poem could be the researcher notes for Kellogg’s related investigation project. I laughed, I smirked, I was surprised–and it distracted me from my personal concerns at the moment. Great way to begin Sunday with Kellogg’s. Wait, I’m currently on Post’s Honey Bunches of Oats, which actually doesn’t have any Sapphic or Catullian motives, but offers kids some engaging (educational) activities on the back. Anyway, I saw at least three poems within this one, and they all have their distinct features. Thank you for this poem and your support yesterday!

Glenda Funk

Scott,
First, I appreciate your comment below acknowledging the struggles women face when dealing w/ the medical community. The more men know understand, the more likely change will come for young women.

Regarding your *poem*: I know what happened. Let’s face facts: When you’re not feeling the prompt you chase whatever captures your mind in the moment, which is fine and why every host invites folks to write what they want, as you did. Your meanderings remind me of a blog post I’ve had in the wings titled Cereal Killer. I’m not much of a cold cereal fan and think of it as breakfast junk food, an idea you capture in places. I might play around w/ your offering here when time allows and see what a strikeout might produce. Cheers!

Scott M

Glenda, your poems echo the frustrations I’ve heard from my wife and my female colleagues as well about “the care” they’ve received from some male doctors. It’s truly unbelievable. And it makes me wonder if some really think — and I sadly think I know the answer to this — what you so aptly wrote in your second poem that they believe they really do “have more important male patients to attend.”

Stefani B

Dear Student,
In response to your question 
sent one hour before it was due
You can use the search function
On the syllabus, with links to find the directions
See assignment details in the LMS
Look at the example and screencast provided
Ask a peer, Chat, Snap, or Insta
Read previous emails
Revisit your notes from the class
Watch Snoop’s reminder
Start your assignment prior to it’s due date
Don’t expect an immediate response to emails
Maybe Google or ChatGPT can outline the directions 
Here is what is needed to be successful:

  1. Read…
  2. Write…
  3. Submit…

With no facetious intent regards,
Your patient professor

Stefani B

Glenda, thank you for hosting and walking us through this process. Your use of 21st century life support is a great descriptor for prescriptions.

To any of my students participating in #verselove today, don’t read the strikethroughs 🙂

brcrandall

Love it, Stefani B. Fascinating how universal the strikethroughs are in this profession. Wondering if such. poem should not be attached to course syllabi…They’d still find a way to screw around with the course’s intentions.

With no facetious intent regards,

Your patient professor

Brilliant.

Leilya Pitre

Stefani, this is so relatable. I deal with this every single day, especially at the end of the semester. yesterday, two of my studnets claimed the Forums were closed, and they didn’t have a chance to post even after the extension. I patiently emailed back with an explanation and a link. One of them responded with an apology of being inattentive, and I am grateful for that.
The bottom line is: read, write, submit. We don’t ask too much.

Glenda Funk

Stefani,
I love everything about your poem. I read it to my husband, beginning w/ the poem remaining after the strikeouts. He wanted me to tell you how much he loves both poems. You have channeled every teacher’s thoughts, and telling your students not to read the strikeouts is a sure fire way to get them to read them. LOL. Definitely send this to Sarah for her YA project. Thank you. This made my day!

Stacey L. Joy

Stef! OMG, I remember when my daughter went to orientation for college and they told the parents not to try to email professors to ask for grade changes or to make excuses for late work. I laughed because I couldn’t imagine such a thing! This was before technology was a permanent fixture in our children’s lives. Now, I am sure that this is a thing. I hope parents don’t do this but I am eager to know if they do. Students yes, but please tell me parents don’t reach out to you.

I love this whole thing, strikethroughs read and received!

Scott M

Every word, every line, every strikethrough is letter perfect, Stefani! And I love “patient” in your closing! Lol, yep, the ends of semesters will do that. Thanks for this!

Susan

This is gold, Stefani! Sometimes I find myself overexplaining in emails to a kid or a parent when the bottom line is often what is needed and more effective.

Joanne Emery

Stefani – I enjoyed this strikeout poem from the POV of the Professor. I wrote one from the POV of the student. They go so well together!

Barb Edler

Glenda, once again you offer us a magnificent prompt. I love the idea of reviewing my poems to strikeout words. I first chose a document from the New York Times, and I like it, but then I thought to look again and found this poem. I think I would change the title though. Your two poems offer an insightful view of the problems encountered with health care providers and ageism. “My aching hips” and “not dead yet” resonated for me. You have been a generous contributor this month sharing compelling poems and generous comments. (I’ll be traveling and attending family events today so excuse my absence.) I appreciate your efforts, Glenda!

Selfless Love

she longed for loved
a family full of joy
married a wild man

who loved the party more than her
she raised her chicks
who flew the coop too soon

alone, she pampers herself

Barb Edler
28 April 2024

Stefani B

Barb, you’ve created a great dichotomy of this woman depending on how it is read. Enjoy your family events today and thank you for sharing.

Glenda Funk

Barb,
Thank you for your kind words. You are a steadfast source of inspiration, and your amazing poems push me to work on my skills. Once again you’ve offered a brilliant, concise poem that reveals the complications of life: falling in love, raising children, all the emotions that deep into life. Your poem is an echo of Margaret’s. The strikeouts in the opening lines reveal so much:
she longed for loved
a family full of joy
married a wild man”
How much simpler would life be w/out such men, I wonder. I think many of us choose wild men because of those family longings. Wonderful poem.

Leilya Pitre

Barb, enjoy your Sunday with a family! Love the poem you submitted today. Both versions present interesting perspective of “selfless love.” I like the words you left after striking through.

Stacey L. Joy

Barb, so much in so few lines!

A close friend told me her ex-husband left her after 20 years of marriage because he said he wanted to feel like he was walking in the tulips! What on earth?

Your poem is heartbreaking.

Fran Haley

Oh, Barb. What a life story in these few lines…I’ve read the non-strikethroughs several times and want to console this woman. I want to know if she has found peace now after having loved the wild man, or if “alone” is too lonely… your poem stirs many emotions.

Kim Johnson

Barb, the narrative here is painful – the men who leave, who can’t get the wild side tamed. I love the metaphor to chicks and flying the coop. Your poem tells a story of a family that many of us know.

Christine Baldiga

Glenda, from one 65 year old to another – I know this all too well. Ugh – I think this is just the beginning. You so aptly captured my feelings about doctors visits I thought you were writing about me!
i took a verse I penned the other day and created a strike an write poem, changing it from thoughts about the written word to the spoken word. The challenge for me today was finding the right poem.

Careful Words

Why is it
some days
words come tumbling
out of the brain my mouth
onto the page
without any effort at all thought or care,
hurting those I love
the most.
While other days
words bounce and
swirl around
in the brain willy-nilly,
never making any sense certain that I
unable to produce
a cohesive thought?-ful response.

Barb Edler

Christine, ouch! I hate those moments when I say something that I realize wasn’t careful enough. Words “tumbling” “hurting” and “swirl” all provide a wonderful emphasis to the action of words “without thought or care” can hurt the people we love the most. It’s too bad we can’t have an edit mode when speaking. Compelling poem.

Stefani B

Christine, I like your play on words, punctuation, and strikethrough in the last line. Thank you for sharing today.

Glenda Funk

Christine,
Regards feeling as though a poem is about you: Back at you, poet friend. You described me perfectly w/ those first lines:
Why is it
some days
words come tumbling
out of the brain my mouth
onto the page
without any effort at all thought or care,”
All of your poem is one that could be specific to me. Love it!

Leilya Pitre

Christine, the words are so tricky, and your poem makes such a great point. Why don’t we think before words escape our mouths sometimes? That’s why I like to think about writing as clarifying thinking. Unfortunately, we don’t have time to write down everything at all times. You chose just the right poem to revise today. I also like what you did with the last line, as Stefani noticed. Thank you!

brcrandall

Glenda, fun to edit those darlings (but keep them in, anyway). Loving your first line,

my new doctor— another medical provider i must educate

and approaching your prompt as a to do list (and noting the strikethroughs don’t transfer from page to post, so going to strike out in 3…2….). Today’s goals:

Sunday, April 28
b.r.crandall

make the coffee
get caffeinated,
mow the lawn, 
smoke whack those weeds
rake, turn on loudest
buzz machine leaf blower
to compete with the @#$#$ 
neighbor & his 6 a.m. necessity
to wake up the grass.
scan grade those finals
procrastinate revisit
finish begin a handbook 
chapter due this week.
visit #VerseLove
pluck nose hairs 
write a poem

Glenda Funk

Bryan,
pluck nose hairs makes me chuckle. Don’t forget to trim the ears as you would that lawn! Approaching the prompt as a to-do list is fun, especially as it illuminates the mundane necessary tasks that consume hours but that are the stuff of poetry. I noticed you decided to grade rather than scan those late papers, LOL! A popular snark comes to mind: “Sure, Jan.” Fun poem. Thank you. I do know the strikethroughs disappear w/ copy-paste. I offered to change the prompt when I discovered that a week ago when my poem did not transfer correctly. That’s why Sarah made the video and added the link to it.

Dave Wooley

Bryan, this made me laugh-snort this morning–your 4th line avout the weeds and the neighbor’s leaf blower. And of course its not a Crandall poem without body grooming or bodlly functions vivid imagery that engages the audience. Super fun poem!

Barb Edler

Sunday should not be for mowing! I can hear those weed whackers whacking right now! I love your poem, Bryan, but it so resonated with me with these people who want to do yard work at an unholy hour. Love how you end this one. I sure appreciate your tone in this one! Very fun and relatable poem. (Where I live, yard work is like a sacred rite).

Stefani B

Bryan, I like your leaf blower usage, something we can all relate to. My husband likes to just walk around using his leaf blower (at a decent hour) even when there appears to be not one leaf. I find this very confusing;) Enjoy your Sunday.

Leilya Pitre

Bryan, you always have fun or at least make it look so easy. I loved the entire poem, but the ending is everything:
finish begin a handbook 
chapter due this week.
visit #VerseLove
pluck nose hairs 
write a poem”

Thank you for making me smile!

Clayton Moon

make it

No clue,
of what to do,
depressed and blue,
I strike through.

Without a song,
Where I’ve gone,
Struggling on.
I strike through.

Broke and weary,
Anger, don’t get near me,
Help, no one hears me!
I strike through.

Cannot escape,
the more I make,
the more it takes!
I strike through.

Cynical cards dealt,
Beads of rain pelt,
my back with a belt!
I strike through!

Unfortunate Tale,
silences my yell,
I fail to fail!
I strike through!

One man amongst giants,
Creativity defiant,
they not buying it.
I strike through!

For all the downs,
For all the frowns,
For all the clowns,
I STRIKE THROUGH!

Even though I am out,
I continue my bout,
There is no doubt,
I WILL STRIKE THROUGH!

  • Boxer
Glenda Funk

Clayton,
Your first four lines—
No clue,
of what to do,
depressed and blue,”—
express how I felt a week ago when I realized the strikethroughs from my poem did not transfer. Not sure if you experienced the same thing or merely to go w/ the wordplay, which is fantastic. I particularly love the repetition of “I strike through.” Me too. Thank you.

Dave Wooley

Clayton, the way you flipped the “strike through” is so clever! I love how it serves as a rallying cry at the end of the stanzas and the way your poem gains momentum as it moves towards its crescendo.

For all the downs,

For all the frowns,

For all the clowns,

I STRIKE THROUGH!

is a great penultimate stanza!

Margaret Simon

Glenda, I can all too well relate to the medical field. Last summer when I was really sick, I was told multiple times I had a virus. I actually had a raging infection. I have no confidence left in doctors. I love this idea for expressing, not expressing what is real and true.
Yesterday I attended a music festival and had a hard time locating my adult children, who seemed to totally disregard my feelings of loss.

My children are lost to me adults
handling their lives without me.
Their children make a playground of dirt
transporting to an imaginary world without me.
Where do I find myself my children?
Circling the festival without a purpose map.
I will be found.
I repeat to no one listening “Here I am!”

Glenda Funk

Margaret,
Im so sorry you had that awful experience w/ doctors last year. Our system is broken, shattered. Your poem breaks my heart. I have been that lost person looking for others all my life because of my vision problems, so this really hit home for me. The first two lines set the tone and show such vulnerability aging brings.
“My children are lost to me adults
handling their lives without me.”
They will know this feeling one day, too, Hugs to you.

Barb Edler

Margaret, wow, I love your poem. I especially enjoyed the actions with your poem, and your last line is precious. “Their children make a playground of dirt/transporting to an imaginary world” relates perfectly to children play. Your strikeouts work effectively! Super poem!

brcrandall

Margaret, I love the way the strikethroughs bring the identity markers to the forefront, especially with the purpose of each role.

Fran Haley

Margaret, your poem has a haunting tone…layers of potential meaning, even though I understand it’s about literally losing your adult children at the festival and trying to find them. There’s a universality to it that will resonate with many…but I take heart in this sure line: I will be found! The strikethroughs lend tremendous depth to the poem – being at a loss, almost of oneself.

Kim Johnson

Margaret, agreed! Many of us have lost that trust in medical professionals. My sister in law finally jumped ship and started going to a functional medicine doctor instead of a traditional one and has never felt better. I’m so sorry that you had to experience the ongoing infection, but thank goodness you are okay. I feel the sense of bewilderness in your words of your poem today. It’s really disorienting and a bit scary when we lose those we’re with and aren’t sure how to find them.

Fran Haley

Glenda, this was a really invigorating challenge. First: I absolutely love Lubar’s brilliant poem for what she reveals in the italics and strikethroughs. Your poems on aging – and medical care for women – hit home with me. Telling in this way is especially powerful, being able to hear inner thoughts. “Lord let me die before I’m dementiafied” – oh, Lord…me, too. It is the most insidious thing, watching that disease strip one’s ability and dignity away. No one should have to suffer it.

Thank you for all of this today…my mind went first to the true/false poems we wrote earlier in VerseLove, so – why not??

True/False Strikethrough 

1.  I am much older than I appearIt depends. Perception is not everything. Sure, I’ve been mistaken for my sons’ sister. Told that I “don’t look old enough to be a grandmother.” How old does a grandmother have to be? Some women in my family were grandmothers before age 35. I am definitely much older than 35.

2.  Green is the color of ordinary time. True. Ask a priest. Ask a cicada.

3.  Angels can singTrue. False. Is the word in those Bible verses actually “singing?” Is singing unique to humans? If When I meet an angel, I will ask…

4.  Stars can singFalse. True. Job 38:7. Or, ask a NASA scientist. 

5.  Trees can sing. True??? Psalm 96:12. Is that just poetic language? Do some research—see what tech artists and ornithologist have to say about tree songs. 

6.  Just because it’s myth doesn’t mean it isn’t true.
True.

7.  There’s a reason I use seven asterisks for section breaksTrue. A stylistic choice representing my favorite childhood book series, The Chronicles of Narnia=seven books.

8.  A seahorse holds the reins of your memory and emotions. True and false. Technically it’s two seahorses, your hippocampus…

9.  Salt water heals all. Mostly true. What sweat, tears, and the ocean can’t heal, time death will.

10.Blood is thicker than water. True in the strict factual sense; water doesn’t clot. But in the familial figure of speech sense…proven false. 

11. Blood criesTrue. Genesis 4:10. The reference is to murder spilled blood… is God the only one who ever hears it can’t we hear it, if we try? 

12.I will live to see another solar eclipse. Let’s see—that’s in twenty years? I could be a great-grandmother by then Sure. I’ll still be youngish.

Angie

I’m so glad you chose the true/false poem and I’m sure others will too. It’s good to re-see it and also because I love to know answers, now I do! And your answers come from many different places. Love it. 1. I’ve been asked if I am both my mom’s sister and my brother’s mom, so that’s weird. I love your reason for #7!!

Margaret Simon

Fran, I sometimes think you crawl inside my head in the early morning hours across all the miles and become me for a moment in time. The very moment you are writing a poem. “Salt water heals all” is my favorite today (because favorite is ever-changing.”

Glenda Funk

Fran,
Im so glad you like the prompt and embraced its spirit so lovingly. I love that you chose the true/false poem because it’s a cool mentor text high school teachers might include w/ their learners and because your choice is so fitting for a Sunday morning. I love all the biblical references, especially #11 and your inclusion of Genesis 4:10. I also love #1 as it echos my own aging anxiety. I’ve been very stressed about this prompt since realizing strikethroughs don’t copy and paste from the notes app. That happened to one of my poems a week ago. I offered to change the prompt, so whatever happens today, I’m going to focus on your contribution.

Barb Edler

Fran, your poem is compelling considering what choices you make with your strikeouts. I love the idea of playing with a true/false poem to consider what is emphasized. I really enjoyed #12. Fantastic poem!

Susan

This previous poem lent itself very well to this type of poem. Your strikethrough parts in your “answers” really add a lot of voice!

Kim Johnson

Fran, what a clever way to do a strikeout poem by using a true/false poem. This is fun to return to from a previous writing. I love #12 and all the rest, but I also love #7 as much too – – those numbers and facts about you are fun and interesting!

Kim Johnson

Glenda, I love this new form you are introducing today! I am a fan of blackout and found, and this brings many Kate Baer moments to mind from I Hope This Finds You Well. The ability to change or strike words is a game changer for new poetry. Thank you for hosting us today, and for investing in us as writers. You have me in stitches over that MyChart information and the poem. The last line of the poem is one for the books – – contemplating end times is something we all do, all of us, wondering….not wanting to know…..and that chart! You bring the voice of the doctor in with the comment about not changing the chart no matter how many times the patient asks. This is gold, pure gold and fun. Yours is an amazing example of how the fun of poetry and the momentum we need at the end of the marathon month is right here, keeping us enthusiastic as we cross a finish line with worn-thin racing flats. Thank you, friend! I chose option 2.

The Key
Don’t you wish we
could take the key
to the end of 
the island like
we used to do 
when was little 
and you could still
say Latin names
for each shell and bird and tree
your love for them pure
and passionate before
the day it all changed 
for you?

Fran Haley

Such a beautiful, longing-filled tribute to your mom (I’m guessing). The ones we love and lose still live in our best memories…and yes, we still love them. We will always love them.I have every reason to believe they keep on loving us, too.

Angie

This is beautiful, Kim. I love what’s underneath the strikeouts, the reminiscing. And love that you chose to only leave “the key”: the love you have for a person.

Leilya Pitre

Oh, Kim, this gives me chills! So beautiful in its entirety and in that longing “love you.” How I wish we could have one more moment with our loved ones. The good memories help. Hugs!

Glenda Funk

Kim,
Thank you for your beautiful, kind note. I appreciate it and you. I love that strikeout gives us the gift of seeing both your past memory and the new very minimal poem, the essence of what matters most in every relationship: love for one another. We can’t get that w/blackout.

Margaret Simon

My goodness, Kim, you nailed this day’s challenge with the simple embedded line of I love you. I keep hearing that the deepest grief comes from the deepest love. But I resist it. Why?

Barb Edler

Kim, your strikeouts are heavy here, but the three words are the perfect “Key”. What a brilliant way to get to the heart of a poem. Brilliant poem!

Susan

So, this is how this poem form works? 🙂

Linda Mitchell

Good Morning Poets,

I had a tough time thinking of a poem I could use the way Glenda has. I love that voice of snark (the doctor who is young enough to be a child but has thoughts on aging that he cannot understand for a woman that he cannot understand). Oh, it’s so natural to the real me. So, I gave up and found a nursery rhyme to practice on. I kinda like the resulting snarky result.

Hickory dickory dock. Idiot, it was a pier.
      But, pier doesn’t rhyme with idiot now does it?
The mouse louse ran up the clock.
The clock struck one, o u t but stole a base anyway
The mouse and by mouse, I mean my ex ran down
Hickory dickory dock. idiot

Kevin

The voice(s) here, as the text talks back to the text, made me laugh. I could hear different voices in the mix, as the strikeout text feature and then italics did its conversational play.
Kevin

Angie

I normally don’t like the word idiot but it’s funny here. And the tone in “and by mouse, I mean my ex” lmao! Good one.

Kim Johnson

Linda, I’m digging the conversation with the text right in the lines of it. I think my favorite line is the one where you bring your ex into the frame. I have a visual image of this tail slithering around a corner…..off a pier…..into the water……(oops, sorry, ex!). What fun this is! You make me want to open some books of poetry today and talk to the text about the ex…..hey, there’s an ex in text. You’re good, really good!

Fran Haley

This is hysterical, Linda! The snark is priceless.

Leilya Pitre

Linda, you had me chuckle with the first line. You did manage to craft it as a conversation even if it is with your inner self Love it!

Glenda Funk

Linda,
This is pure gold! I love it. I have an idiot ex, too, so I totally understand. I laughed from line one: “idiot, it was a pier.” The direct address to the idiot ex is perfect. Add an eye roll! I also love the “o-u-t” and the baseball allusion. Really fun poem. Thank you!

Margaret Simon

I hear that word idiot in my head all too often.

brcrandall

Linda, this is fun, playful, clever, and stunning. Love it…especially the last line (and word)

Anna J. Roseboro

What a snark! I had a lark reading it.
This would be a fun Model poem for teaching multiple meaning for he same words.
That’s a problem with our living language! As soon as we learn the meaning of a word, a new meaning is born. 🙂

Angie

Glenda, wow, this line is powerful and I agree after seeing my grandmother go through it: “lord, let me die before i’m dementiafied” and it’s really so scary to think of apathetic doctors. Your strikeouts change a lot and adding the marked up chart was so interesting too. I really hope when you said “you’re government old”, that wasn’t something he said. Either way, I hope you can find a better one! Thanks for the prompt. Nod to Billy Collins’ On Turning Ten today.

On Turning 35 36

The whole idea of it makes me feel
scared, sick, old even though I feel 
sometimes younger than 35 36 and
pretty normal and inspired
to soon be able to walk up
a mountain faster
than the elderly couple

Goodbye thick hair 
hello hair that everyone still says is thick
today my hair falls
just the perfect way
to reveal a bald line
that’s never been there before
a river of scalp
an empty road
thats still there
but I can’t see it
and who really who cares?

Goodbye supple skin 
hello skin that protects
my insides pretty well

Goodbye perfect health 
hello health,
it’s my responsibility to take care of you
I’m gonna start doing better
let’s go for a bike ride
in our lovely, hilly island home

Goodbye metabolism 
hello metabolism,
I know there are things
I should do to keep you around
I’m gonna try
let’s drink some water instead of coke.

Goodbye another year of youth 
(you just said you felt younger than 36)
hello knowledge I never knew before
this new perspective
is better than the negative

Linda Mitchell

Good strikethroughs! That real thought behind the words is true but also wry…just the kind of tone I enjoy. But, it’s tough to have this tone with middle schoolers. Unless THEY are using the tone, the meaning is lost on them so I try to avoid it. This kind of poetry lets me “let my hair down.” ha!

Kevin

I appreciated the hello/goodbye format here, the give and take of age.
Kevin

Kim Johnson

Angie, perhaps my favorite living male poet of all time – – it doesn’t get better than Billy Collins for me. He’s got that perspective and view of the world that pulls me in and keeps me seeing things differently….like Whale Day, and Banana School…..those are amazing, and I love that you chose him and turned the tables on the age to make it your own. Most of all I love the line…..and who really cares? I find my aging self saying that more and more the older I get. Thank you for sharing your journey with us!

Leilya Pitre

Angie, I am with Linda and Kevin. Love your strikethrough thoughts. These “goodbyes” show what worries you and “hellos” signal the changes you notice. Your final lines are very relatable:
hello knowledge I never knew before
this new perspective
is better than the negative.”

Margaret Simon

I feel the voice here of goodbye alongside the girl who wants to stay young. I have a 36 year old daughter. Take that! This age thing is a struggle at any age.

Glenda Funk

Angie,
This is wonderful. I love the way your strikethroughs change the tone and in the process emphasize how important being active is. I love your hair references as they speak to the anxieties I e had about hair since finding my first gray one at 23.

Years ago while at NCTE, I met Billy Collins outside one of the convention hotels. He was awaiting a bus, as was I and a friend. A young woman was w/ him. I asked if she was his assistant. He said she’s his wife! OMG! He had to have been at least 30 years older than her. LOL! I guess he was still trying to ride that bike, even as he neared Methuselahs age. Since my birthday last November I’ve been saying I’m officially government old.

brcrandall

I love the way you juxtaposed goodbye/hello. This made for a powerful reading experience, Angie…especially as you contemplate another year (it changes drastically in your 40s…trust me)

Scott M

Angie, I’m with the other folks, too; I love how you crafted the goodbye / hello moments throughout! And I’m with you, too (too?) “this new perspective / is better than the negative.” I agree! Thanks for writing and sharing this! (And a side note: I really enjoyed your poem yesterday, too (too, too–alright, enough of that), but I don’t think I had the time/bandwidth to comment on it. It reminded me of Susan Cain’s book Quiet. The first time I listened to that — because, you know, audiobooks are amazing — I said, yes, yes! this is why group work doesn’t “work” for everybody, this is why I hate many of those “fun” things at some random PDs. Anyways, I thought I’d let you know, lol. 🙂 )

Angie

Thanks Scott 🙂

Fran Haley

Angie, the strikethroughs work perfectly to counteract the idea of growing older (36 is still quite young, to me-!). I love the embracing of life and the renewed responsibility to care for self so much. Perspective makes all the difference!

Kevin

A pencil-top
eraser removes
only the surface
of scribble,

leaving little
nibbles of
where words
were

a poem built
upon a poem
built upon
a poem

of an idea,
layered like
tectonic plates,
just before the shift

Glenda,
The writing platform where I first write my poems doesn’t have a StrikeOut function, so I wrote there, moved here and then started to wonder about what to remove. I’m not all that satisfied with my results, so I might return to it. But it did make me think about how this is different than Blackout Poems, in that the removed words here are still visible, small resonances of what is being taken away from the action of the poem. That visibility gives the form a slant that I find pretty fascinating. One can still read the original poem — or the remixed poem without the stricken words — or the stricken words as its own poem, living like a ghost inside the other. Nifty.
Kevin

Angie

this stanza is so interesting:

leaving little
nibbles of 
where words
were”

both the striked out version and the original. Love both.

also, this needs to be in a poem: “living like a ghost inside the other”!

Kevin

Thanks, Angie.
As it turns out … another daily prompt suggested found poems this morning, so I took my comment here to Glenda and worked with that as my text. Further removal …. more ghosts.
Kevin

Ghosts of a Poem.png
Angie

Omg, love it! Thanks for sharing this as well! Infinite possibilities.

Leilya Pitre

Both of your poems are prominent, Kevin! I like the lines Angie quoted and the ending:
“of an idea,
layered like
tectonic plates,
just before the shift”
The lines you stroke through momentarily created the image of “an idea layered.”

The blackout poem with that final line rocks too. Wonderful!

brcrandall

Agreed 100%, Angie!

Linda Mitchell

ooooh, this is cool. An ars poetica is a great source for strikethrough…now I need to go find one to play with. Thanks!

Kim Johnson

Kevin, I too thought of the blackouts this morning and how strikethroughs are similar but so different. I think it’s a lot like the math teacher: “show me your work.” I like seeing the work of the change and how it twists and bends. Awesome, and what a great choice for this poem.

Margaret Simon

I wrote, like you, without strike outs at first. It has a different feel to it than black out poetry. I like your choices here. You can read with or without the strike outs and it’s still a poem.

Glenda Funk

Kevin,
I saw the blackout poem you posted earlier. Your note illuminates the idea behind a strikethrough that we don’t get w/ blackout poetry. I love these lines:
“a poem built
upon a poem
built upon
a poem”
That idea really is what we do here: We build upon prompts, others poem, our own poems, and even the comments, which I often find illuminating and inspiring and a vital part of conversation and community. Thanks for bringing the epiphany and poetry we can see twice.

Anna J. Roseboro

Kevin, I also like the tone the poem takes on when we can see the strike. It’s sorta like peekaboo, I see you!
This especially interesting for me because responders to my poem think the dialogue is between the grandmother and grandchild. I envisioned two grandchildren speaking, one older and one smart alecky younger one. 🙂
Oh well, folks have been reading INTO poems fr years. I can’t call what they’ve done today a misreading, because there is are no dialogue tag line, to limit interpretation. Oh well.

Scott M

Kevin, these are very cool poems: the original, the strikeout one, and the blackout one. My favorite moment is “a poem built / upon a poem / built upon / a poem.” I just love the sound of those lines. Thanks!

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