October’s writing inspirations come from Andy Schoenborn. Andy is a teacher at Mt. Pleasant High School in Mt. Pleasant, Michigan.  As a past president of the MCTE and an NWP teacher consultant for the Chippewa River Writing Project, he has over 90 professional development contact hours and continues to facilitate learning locally and nationally. Subscribe to Andy’s newsletter and follow him on Twitter@aschoenborn.

Inspiration

Life comes at us fast. Without a doubt there are hills, valleys, and plateaus. On occasion these moments make for a memorable (if not defining) experience – one that is remembered throughout a person’s life. For many, the senior year of high school is ripe for remembering and celebrating. Let’s choose a moment or series of moments from your senior year of high school that captures your fondest memories.

Process

  • Take a few minutes and write down a series of memories from your senior year of high school.
  • Start with the year you graduated to give the poem context.
  • Don’t worry about rhyme or chronological order, just weave in the highlights of the memories you will always carry with you.
  • End the poem by sharing what you thought your future would hold during that time.

Sample poem: “Exit 131” – Andy Schoenborn

Nineteen-ninety four was many things for me.

Lollapalooza with the Beasties 
who were Smashing Pumpkins with George Clinton, 
and A certain Tribe Called Quest.

Nineteen-ninety four was a mosh pit memory 
and a black eye I wore like a badge of honor - forever on display 
hanging on National Honor Society walls of Ithaca High School.

Nineteen-ninety four brought my very first [real] love - 
an auburn haired alternateen beauty 
whose love for the Beatles was equal to her love of Barenaked Ladies.  

In those days it felt like we were ‘Born on a Pirate Ship’ 
as we sang along to “If I had a Million Dollars” - 
where we’d be rich and still eat Kraft Dinner.  

We were pushed and pulled 
by waves of alternative fuzz
crackling through blown out speakers.

We smoked cigarettes and laughed in our resale shop flannel.  

In nineteen-ninety four we wore the tires of a broken down Festiva 
thin riding the black ribbon of M-57 east 
as though we were on a tightrope daring life to pull us down. 

We sought the shelter of 
St. Andrew’s, 
Meadowbrook, 
the Pine Knob, and 
the Palace 
as they pulled us 
through the fading moments 
of our adolescent lives.

In a fading Detroit 
the sun 
cast shadows of steel 
longer than our dreams.  

We always left in darkness - eyes heavy with sleep, 
exhausted 
from using up the remnants 
of our naive irresponsibility.

In the quiet of the night, 
While friends slept, I drove 
North on I-75 there was one sign 
that comforted me as I traveled 
from the known world into the unknown. 

Hands loosely on the wheel I waited 
for the melancholic face of Jesus 
on a billboard yellowed with age 
whom eternally asked, “ARE YOU ON THE RIGHT ROAD?”

“Man, I don’t know, Jesus, but I sure am enjoying the ride.”

White stripes on the highway blur on my left 
and disappear into the darkness - I don't look back.

My vision reached only 
as far as dim headlights 
could lift the night.

In nineteen-ninety four 
I took Exit 131 in the last moments of my youth and 
headed west. 

A beat up white Festiva cradled friends 
as we sped toward adulthood 
in the dead of night - no 
clear vision 
of the 
future. 

Your Turn

Scroll down to the comment section and write your poem. It need not be long nor follow the prompt but give it a try if you wish. Just write whatever is in your heart or on your mind in any form it takes. Then (or before), respond to at least three other writers using any of the sentence-stems offered below. Check back throughout the day to read the response to your writing (and smile).

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Kindra Petersen

Two-thousand fifteen

Four and a half years ago
yet a lifetime chasm between then and now

It began with a sunrise on the football field
Music, laughter, hugs, and dancing
Starbucks coffee and donuts
Notes to self
So young, so alive

Friday night football lights
Tie blankets
Milky hot cocoa
Marshmallows
Keeping the crisp wind at bay
Themes:
White out
Pink out
Muskie spirit
Neon
etc.
The brisk wind cooling my hands as I tie balloons and streamers
To the football stadium on the Friday of homecoming week.

Student council volunteering
Planning a food drive
Collecting cans and raising funds

A trip to New York City with Model UN
to see the United Nations headquarters
hundreds of students waiting in line
waiting for security
waiting
waiting
cold toes
cold fingers
cold nose

A prom dress with silver sequins
Royal blue
Fake pearls on a headband
Laughter. Incredible laughter
and sweaty bodies
heads tossed back in mirth
standing in a circle singing
“Good Riddance (Time of Your Life)” by Greenday

It is filled with aimless wandering in JCPenny as I search for the perfect yellow
graduation dress
To pair with my purple necklace and earrings
And robe
I remember my heart thudding in my chest
My palms coated with a thin sheet of sweat as I open the commencement ceremony
with a
poem.
My poem.
A poem I wrote to describe the collective fear and excitement
of tossing our graduation caps

The ending – a sunset
On a football field
On the edge of twilight
As the sky turns from
Transluscent
to
Opaque.
The beginning and end
on a football field.
The continuation of our lives
on a football field.

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Allison Berryhill

Grrr…I wrote this last night and SWEAR I posted it. This morning, checking in for comments, I didn’t find it, so I’m posting again.

1978
smells like Marlboro Lights
Diana’s Monte Carlo
warm Budweiser
musk perfume

1978
tastes like two all beef patties
special sauce lettuce cheese pickles
onions on a sesame seed bun and
syrupy sloe gin fizz.

1978
feels like the
soft blue sweater Mitch
gave me, but my mother
insisted I give it back: no boy
should give a girl a sweater.

1978
sounds like
slamming doors
and cussing and
Bob Seger pounding on the eight track
drowning the last of my childhood.

Susie Morice

Allison — I’m sorry to respond so late to this one. Somehow, i totally missed it. So glad I went back to read again. Well, 1978 played out with the senses is a great idea, and each one takes me right to your life that year. Lots of playful stuff in ’78, you devil you! What strikes me right off is how universal that senior year is, almost regardless of the actual date. It’s Americana on a sesame seed bun! LOL! Cars, experimenting/sowing those wild oats, the parental admonitions and sass, music, and in the end that realization that time slaps you in the behind and parks you in adulthood. You played out pieces that unveiled you so clearly: wanting Mitch’s sweater but then there was mom; “Seger pounding…”; knowing the words (even still) to that McD’s jingle (I know a very long joke, still, from that era wherein that jingle is the punchline…great joke…when I get back to western Iowa, remind me to tell it to you!); “musk perfume” and warm beer. Grant Wood knew how to render an American image on canvas, and here you’ve rendered 1978 as American as a Midwest sassy teenager. Now, coming back to this poem and having the picture of your hubby on the silo ladder with all that cobalt blue sky, this is even more Allison-esque. Very cool! I really love these chances to see each other’s lives through this creative community. Susie

Shaun

Nineteen Eighty-Seven

During my senior year of high school, I don’t remember sleeping.
So many nights drinking coffee with friends
at the local roasting house.
Chain-smoking Camels and speeding through the city
in my mud brown ten-year-old Chevy Concours.
Eight cylinders of pure energy.

We tried to spend every free moment together,
before the mass exodus: Stanford, NYU, BYU, MIT, Yale…
Those of us staying behind wanted to keep the band together.
Camping under the stars, bonfires sending orange-yellow embers into the sky.
Breakfast for dinner at twenty-four hour cafes. Bottomless pitchers of coffee.
Freakishly orange pancakes at Bill and Nada’s.
Keg parties in the mountains wishing it would last forever.

The transition was strange. There were old people all over campus.
I didn’t understand the allure of fraternities and sororities.
I had friends, they just didn’t live here anymore.
I stopped bringing my skateboard to class.
I stopped counting how many times Dr. Sullivan said f#@! during lectures.
I stopped trying to relive those carefree days
and started thinking about the future.

Allison Berryhill

1978 smelled like Marlboro Lights
Diana’s Monte Carlo
warm Budweiser
musk perfume.

1978 tasted like two all-beef patties
special sauce lettuce cheese pickles onions
on a sesame seed bun
and syrupy sloe gin fizz.

1978 felt like that soft blue sweater
from Mitch.
My mother said I couldn’t keep it;
no boy should give a girl a sweater.

1978 sounded like slamming doors
and cussing and
Bob Seger pounding on the 8-track
drowning the last of
my childhood.

Mo Daley

What a great prompt, Andy. This is going to require a little more thought than I can generate right now. Hopefully soon!

Allison Berryhill

I hereby give you permission to write a 20-minute poem. Set your timer. Write. Post. Don’t beat yourself up.

Amber

2002
You came to the table with notepad and pen
Curtly, “What’ll it be, kid?”
It was my turn to order.
Finally.
Yes, I’ll have a year to remember
Side of parties and kissing
Extra helping of friends and freedom
And a plate of endless laughter for the table.

Naive and small
I yearned to grow up
all in that year
Taste what I imagined it meant
to be a Senior.

You pointed to the buffet

That’s not the order I placed

It’s all you can eat

Fine.

I piled on AP and captain
part-time job and clubs
I went back for seconds of leadership
Made room for new loves and lifelong friends

Ah, I’m full.

gayle

Love the joy and excitement and youth here! A buffet—that is as it should be!

Shaun

I like the extended metaphor of all the choices. The desire to be involved during that last year.
Great idea!

Stacey Joy

It was 1981
The climax of my terrible twos
Eight times over
I was the difficult one
Trouble and mischief intrigued me
Forged report cards
But honor rolled honestly

Smoked cigarettes because
I was cool like that
Wanted to look classy
Like the thugs I rode to school with
Smoked some weed
Drank California Coolers
And had too much bad sex

Then I received an unexpected prom gift
In the sticky squeaky backseat
Of my date’s raggedy rented car
It was yellow
Like old mayonnaise
We created a little being
That would never ever actually BE
Inside my tender teenaged uterus
Where an abortion
Eventually destroyed the life I never knew

Regret and repentance didn’t coexist
On my emotional checklist
My mom and I never discussed “it” again
Because I had college to prepare for 
UCLA, just like my parents

Summer quickly came and went
College life promised freedom
Although I already had my fair share
I prayed that my future would be better
Than my present
And kinder than my past
God gave me more than
I could ever ask or imagine.

Allison Berryhill

“terrible twos eight times over” <3 <3!
"too much bad sex" me too!
"regret and repentance didn't co-exist on my emotional checklist" OHHHHHHH, I feel this.

Stacey Jo,
I always look forward to your poems. You use such a powerful mix of honesty and language dexterity–a playfulness, even as you go right for the gut.

Thank you.

Susie Morice

Holy smokes, Stacey, this is so moving. The strength in your voice is outstanding! Sometimes when the story is so raw, it is all that much more in print. You’ve slammed some fine wordplay and sensory images here! Some particularly rich ones include “honor rolled honestly” and “I was cool like that” and “too much bad sex” and “yellow like old mayonnaise” and “sticky squeaky backseat” and “my emotional checklist” and the last hope that future/present/past would reconcile. This was no easy poem to write, Stacey, as you’ve faced down some very rough choices and experiences…and they have left you with an incredible voice. Not an easy road but you’ve made it a strong one. I so appreciate the personal honesty of your poem. Thank you heaps. Susie

Allison Berryhill

I would like to nominate Susie Morice for the “Responder Extraordinaire” award. Susie, time and again I have “watched” you give incredibly honest and supportive feedback to writers in this community. Please know I NOTiCE!

gayle

1971

Riichard Nixon. Vietnam
What’s your number?
Will you go? Will you die?
Graduation carried risk.

It’s Too Late Baby
How Can You Mend a Broken Heart
You’ve Got a Friend and Riders on the Storm.
Background music for my days.

Mini skirts and bell bottoms
Macrame and tie dye
Long hair and tube tops.
Liberation hinting.

One life closing
Another not yet begun.

Small town smothering
Tired of mothering
Moving on is hard.
But not as hard as staying.

Sleep, school, work, study
Sleep, study, school, repeat
Not enough time to make memories.
Barely enough time to have hope.
Not even sure what to hope for.

Wasn’t high school supposed to be fun?

ANNA JAMAR ROSEBORO

Gayle, your poem reminds us classroom teachers of the myriad issues that can get in the way of learning if we don’t figure out ways to incorporate/integrate current events and student experiences (that they are willing to share) into whatever we teach.

Susie Morice

Gayle – This was the year I graduated from college, and so many of your memories parallel my own. I had almost forgotten about the macrame and the tube tops. Ha! More importantly, though, you brought back the tough grind that was also part of my last year at the U. Working nonstop and studying like mad—I really appreciate your struggle. And the infernal lottery that was scaring all of us to death while a con artist was manipulating in the White House. It was a very disillusioning year in some ways. The year before with Kent State’s horrible act of violence ripped a good deal of hope right out of me. You had s heck of a senior year. Thanks for sharing this very real part of your life. Susie

Allison Berryhill

Gayle, I was in Mr. Carr’s civics class in junior high watching Watergate unfold and idolizing those high school girls in tie-dye shirts and bell bottoms. I sewed “elephant leg” pants for my seventh-grade home-ed project. You took me right back.

I especially liked “liberation hinting.”

Rita DiCarne

1976

The patriot – the bicentennial
the US celebrates
especially living in Philadelphia,
the City of Brotherly Love,
the birthplace of democracy.

The musician – All-City Orchestra
playing on Broad Street
on stage at the Academy of Music.
String bass section leader
in St. Hubert’s orchestra
Choosing to study Music Ed. in college.

The athlete – (the term used loosely)
Philadelphia Canoe Club
Whitewater slalom racing
Long-distance canoe racing
Whitewater rafting
on the Youghiogheny River
Ohiopyle, PA.

The future bride – I was sure
and ready to get out from under
my father’s strict (only for the girls) rules.
We had to wait until I finished college
Three years down – seven to go
but the plans we were making together
kept me going through the tough times –
I married my high-school sweetheart.

ANNA JAMAR ROSEBORO

Rita, your poem reminds many of us of those decades when either women were expected to get engaged at senior prom and married within the year. If we went to college, it was unusual or forced.
Thankfully, you high school sweetheart was willing to wait!

Debra Thoreson

1999

Y2K on the horizon, I glibly went about my day
With concurrent math and English classes, trying to grab
College credit while it was cheap and easy,
Since I was taking those classes anyway.

Competing in DECA at Nationals for the third year straight
And volunteering everywhere possible to gain experience
And experience all a poor girl could never afford,
Meant hours of studying, late nights, and friendships solidified.

Not a jock, not a nerd, not a druggie, not a thespian,
But always in between, with friends from every genre
High School was a dream – a time of being known and knowing
A time on top of the world.

I was Most Likely to Succeed in Math and Science
Yet now I teach English to high school
Organic Chemistry got the best of me
But I am fulfilled because of it.

ANNA JAMAR ROSEBORO

Debra, your poem reminds us that is important to allow students to choose their own path….even if it means changing the routes to reaching the goals they thought they had. Equally important for your students is the fact that you, an English teacher, understand those other content areas, and still chose to teach! You can be an inspiration to them.

Purviben K. Tricedi-Ziemba

Senior year of high school

Was it when my beloved uncle died?
Going on trip, never coming back?
Leaving the grieving family behind?

Senior year of the high school

Staying Away from home
Reading fiction books
Leaving study behind?

Senior year of my high school

Naive, alone, shy
Living in a dorm
And longing for home?

Senior year of high school

kim johnson

Purviben, your years show a great shift in the desire to stay away and the desire to be home. It’s one of those life twists where we can’t figure out how important something is until we don’t have it, and this feeling goes back to your first verse with your uncle. We grieve when something or someone important is outside of our reach. Nice reminder to remember what is important! Thank you for sharing.

Jennifer Jowett

Andy, thank you for dropping me into 1994 with you. So many powerful lines here (riding the black ribbon of M-57, vision reached only as far as the dim headlights), but it’s the final lines that pack the power (sped toward adulthood… no clear vision of the future).

Andy Schoenborn

Thank you, Jennifer. It was a joy to play with the pop culture references.

Jennifer Jowett

1985

Crisp air with a last breath of warmth.
Metal bleachers, pompoms blue and white
“Cheer, cheer for old Holy Cross.”
Dusk coming early,
shrouding teenagers swarming the
homecoming bonfire,
a beacon call,
a funeral pyre of lasts.
Last games
Last days
Last year
Last togetherness.
We sensed it from day one
and celebrated as the days dissipated,
one into the next.
Not recognizing the passage of time
Until it was gone
And a melancholy overcame us.
We recognized the irretrievability too late.
But what did it matter?
We were young
And had years,
days,
minutes,
seconds,
ahead.
Who counted them then?

Andy Schoenborn

Jennifer,

I ADORE the line “a funeral pyre of lasts” ? followed by a list of “lasts.” Brilliant! Also your choice to play with time and the lack of counting it. Your piece captures those last days as they
tick
on
by.

Nice!

kim johnson

I like the line “we recognized the irretrievability too late.” I particularly like that it follows that you didn’t recognize the passage of time. Something recognizable and something not recognizable – it’s a creative expression of awareness, especially at that age.

Susie Morice

Jennifer — You captured some universals that thread through my own HS moments. We were blue and white as well… and I loved celebrating the “funeral pyre of lasts…” and the list of lasts. And “not recognizing the …time till it was gone.” The bittersweet of that is very real. It’s fascinating to me with each of these poems how much even geography and decades of difference can ring as true as if we were all floating through this American moment hand in hand. Thanks for sharing your year! Susie

gayle

“ a funeral pyre of lasts”. I wish I’d written that! And didn’t we all recognize the irretrievability too late? Let’s go back and try again,,,

ANNA JAMAR ROSEBORO

I concur with other respondents whose favorite line is “a funeral pyre of lasts”. How often do we try to convince teens that graduating from high is the beginning of something great, when they probably are feeling what you expressed so poignantly in that powerful image.

Glenda M. Funk

My senior year was tough. I spent it living w/ my stepmother rather than my mother after my father died during my junior year, so I don’t really look back on that time in life nostalgically.

1977

If you find yourself not wanting to look
Back to high school,
Afraid like Lot’s Wife
You’ll turn into a pillar of salt
As you long for Springsteen’s Glory Days
That have passed you by;

When you RSVP,
“I’ll have none of that nostalgia BS”
From the high school never ends sixty-something
Cheering section basking in the glow of
Friday night lights decades after hanging up the cleats,
Passing on the pompoms and spirit stick;

After you’ve departed hometown Hillbillyville,
Packed the ‘75 Pinto, hauled your assets to college alone, and moved through your adult years and
Realized you never really belonged in this
Smallsville ghetto, remember:

Each graduating class of eighteen year old teens has a few who are
Looking forward to getting out
Getting away
Moving on

Like George in Winesburg, Ohio.
I too longed to leave my small world
After all the memories that
Lightened (and darkened) the corners of my mind.
High school isn’t only a
Precious and few prom dance.
And not even a Fall Festival Queen candidate
Compares to homecoming royalty.

Andy Schoenborn

Glenda,

Believe or not, but my high school experience wasn’t something I look back fondly upon. I was severely bullied from 9th-11th grade. I appreciate your approach here, more than you know. What stands out to me is your voice! I love your advice about leaving “Hillbillyville” and “Smallville” because I completely relate with wanting to leaf.

Thank you for sharing your beautiful words!
Andy

kim johnson

Glenda, I, too, was one of those who couldn’t wait for the next chapter to begin. My graduating year should have been 1984 but I was so anxious to get on with life that I went to summer school so I could have two extra credits to allow me to graduate a year earlier and get on with life outside the walls of the preacher’s house. I was a bug under a microscope. My favorite line – hands down – is “hauled your assets to college alone.” Great play on words, and perfect imagery for the transition.

Debra Thoreson

Glenda,
I think a lot of people do not look back at high school with a positive lens. I attended my 20th reunion this summer and found that those who showed up were mostly the ones who got tutors, could afford the luxuries of the 90s, and did not suffer much trauma. A lot of the people I was most excited to catch up with were too busy with real life to relive a time they’d rather forget. Thank you for sharing about the darker side of high school and how it could be for some people.

gayle

Glenda—you have written the poem I’m struggling to work through. So many of your words—and experiences—echo mine. I may just let yours cover for mine!

Rita DiCarne

Glenda,
I could really relate to the line “hauled your assets to college alone.” I didn’t live at college; I commuted because that’s all we could afford. My parents weren’t part of the college search. My older brother took me to visit one college and audition at another. Parents weren’t as involved in the process back then – not sure if that was good or bad. I went to my five-year reunion and never went back.

Shaun

I love the image of the packed Pinto and that desire to get out!
It reminds me of the Pintos we drove in Driver’s Ed – and how I hoped I’d never see one again!

Linda Mitchell

Andy, such a rich poem! The musical references ground it in a very specific time. I had a boyfriend with a bright green Festiva….that brought back some memories. ha! I love your drive off by yourself, talk with Jesus….and then speeding toward adulthood with friends. Wonderful prompt. Thanks.

Andy Schoenborn

Better watch out for those Festivas! Ha!

ANNA JAMAR ROSEBORO

Andy, your challenges are making me reflect on the special people in my life who helped me along the way. Here’s one I thought about today when you asked about our senior year in high school.

THREE CHEERS

Vera Weems, I thank you for being such a nudge
Without your inspiration, I would not even budge.
Back then, that year of sixty-three, when I was seventeen
You told me I should try what no girls in our family had been
At least none I’d known or had ever seen.
No girls in my family had gone to college,
Though they clearly had the knowledge.

“Should I try?”
“Yes, you should, and I’ll be your mentor, my dear.”
Because of you, Miss Vera Weems
I made it through that high school year!

Not only did I get into college,
I graduated at the head of my class, you see
No, not ‘cause of my GPA,
But because I was class VP.

Because I was vice president that year,
I was invited to be on TV.
When I spoke I guess, I shed a tear
When they asked me to speak of my dream
To teach English and to coach a speech team.

They finally got me admit on that show
What I did not want everyone to know.
My bank account balance was just too low
And so to college I could not go.

Then, you, Ms Weems, and my counselor
Helped me fill out those applications.
By the time I walked across that stage
I had a job earning minimum wage
And two scholarships, to boot.!

With the money I saved and that extra loot
I started college and persisted, just as you insisted.
Instead of dropping out not once, but twice!
I followed your sage advice
And finished in just three years!
So, Ms. Vera Weems, I honor you in this poem.
Consider this my three cheers!

Debra Thoreson

Anna, I love that you use this to tell who inspired you to attend college. As another first generation college student, I understand how hard it can be to make that choice.

Rita DiCarne

Anna, what a lovely homage to your mentor. My dad wanted me to go to college so I “would never have to depend on a man.” He went to night school – not sure if he ever finished. My mom didn’t think my family could afford to send the girls to college. I wanted to go. Although I had a complicated relationship with my dad, I am glad he was in my corner. Thanks for making me think about that again.

Susie Morice

SENIOR YEAR 1967 – MOVIE LOVE

My unparalleled
intense love affairs with the silver screen
still make my eyes roll back,
a silent swooning scream
five decades later:
Connery’s Bonding experience, only living twice;
Audrey Hepburn waits blindly in the dark;
Newman’s cool hand and blue eyes convey his “failure to communicate”;
Kate Hepburn sets Spencer straight about who’s coming to dinner;
Sidney Poitier, transcendent teacher, Sir, “fighting for what one believes”;
Elizabeth Taylor’s shrew that Burton never really tames;
Dustin graduates to “sewing a few wild oats”;
Julie Andrews being thoroughly modern;
Redford’s barefoot epiphany in the park;
Richard Harris reminding us that ’67
was that “one brief shining moment
that was known as Camelot.”

by Susie Morice

Stacey Joy

Susie, you clearly should have been a movie star or something related to film because you have a profound recollection of all that glittered on the big screen. I love the flow and the connection you made to each movie, meaning, and performer. I would love to have such keen memories of movies I’ve seen.

Susie Morice

They were iconic times, Stacey…plus I was utterly in love with all those stars. LOL! “I coulda been a contenda!” LOL! Not so much! When I was in college, I actually went to see MASH 7 times— talk about binging! Plus, I had to work extra hours at the DMV (99 cents/hr.) to pay admission 7 times. Thanks for your feedback. Susie

Jennifer Jowett

I love all the subtle connections between the actors and the films (the cool hands of Newman’s Luke), references to their titles without naming them (Connery only living twice). What a fun way to remember so many great movies.

kim johnson

Susie, you had me at Hepburn, but Newman’s blue eyes…….what a heartthrob! You certainly had a memorable time for movies your senior year. They just don’t make ’em like they used to……. I love this snapshot of the silver screen!

ANNA JAMAR ROSEBORO

What a nostalgic look back, with allusions to movie actors and plays on words with movie titles. Clever lady. This really works, poetically, to capture in a few words with images that paint a picture in the mind of the reader.

Susie Morice

Sarah — I’m feeling some of these same feelings… the “more away from/than towards” is definitely a real sensation. Heading off to those miserable jobs, “counting nickels and dimes” is way real. It hits really hard with your terrific juxtapositions of “Friday night lights” and the “ATM” and the “rockin’ bell-bottoms” with all that sass yielding to “pockets were wanting.” I love the story in your poem… the line up of sibs in your life and the tough realities of never having enough to make it easy. But like so much of these “character building” experiences, we come away with very real stories and a strength that you still have “to imagine peace.” And thank heavens! I, too, really do love that these writing challenges are building a keen sense of connection among us. Brilliant. I love the family that we’ve become. Thank you! Susie

Stacey Joy

But I had a car and cash
to drive to Cali, and enough
cents-sense to imagine
peace.

That part! Omg. Sarah it’s the peace that your fellow classmates thought they had when they got kissed! You knew the real peace that we all seek. I love this poem for its purity and truth.

Jennifer Jowett

I feel like there’s so much of Sadie from Alone Together in here. Every one of your poems is a snapshot of your life drawing us into your memories. Despite the confinement of the jobs and the empty pockets, you celebrate with freedom with the car, cash, and Cali.

kim johnson

Sarah, I can so relate to the empty pockets for beginnings. Like Jennifer, I sense Alone Together here. You have a magical way of taking the truth of the moment and putting it in words that are reassuring that I’m not the only one who came upon moments in my life when I was painfully aware that those around me had far more – – fuller pockets, newer clothes, bigger celebrations. It’s clear, though – -the lack of resources seems to be a jumpstart truth for many of us who realize at an early age that success demands hard work and isn’t handed out or purchased. I just love your way of being so real.

ANNA JAMAR ROSEBORO

Sarah, is impressive the way you wrote about clothes to show a specific time period. That’s been fun about this community you helped to establish. Each one uses imagery in different ways and we learn both about one another and also about ways to use language to recreate real and imagined experiences. Thanks.

Kim

1984

A year away from Big Brother
How little we knew Orwell had it so right
And Asimov In The Fun They Had before him.

Beowulf in yellow and black for Ernestine Jones’ Senior English class
Yearbook editor with dreams of teaching just like Mrs. Jones, only nicer.

I thought The Road held a more direct path, but Robert, like George and Isaac, had it right.

Susie Morice

Kim — How fitting that you resurrect Orwell! I love each of these literary pieces — so on target. The Road… what a dark path, indeed. I love the “dreams of teaching just like Mrs. Jones, only nicer.” Ha! Let’s hope the literature and your good teaching can guide us through the horrors of our stunningly messed up world. I truly believe that teachers have an extraordinary moment before them in which young readers and thinkers can write a better story for this world. Your students are lucky. You are better than Mrs. Jones, I feel sure. And nicer! LOL! Thank you for the work you do! Susie

Jennifer Jowett

I was the year of Big Brother – required reading for everyone graduating that year and perhaps my first glimpse that Sci-fi could predict the future. Love your nods, especially in the last line for Robert’s path.

gayle

The year of teaching….only nicer. Love it!

Shaun

Nice allusions to all the different literary experiences and the nod to the teacher who inspired you.

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