This is the Open Write, a place for educators to nurture their writing lives and to advocate for writing poetry in community. We gather every month and daily in April — no sign-ups, no fees, no commitments. Come and go as you please. All that we ask is that if you write, you respond to others to mirror to them your readerly experiences — beautiful lines, phrases that resonate, ideas stirred. Enjoy. (Learn more here.)
Our Co-Hosts

Jennifer Guyor Jowett once was a child who explored the woods and fields within the twenty acres of her home, which was surrounded by farmland, a river, and towering oaks, and knowing them well enough to recognize they were never hers. She is the author of Into the Shadows and co-authored the poetry book Words That Mend. Jennifer is the creator of the DogEaredBookAwards, a student-led award given to middle grade and young adult novels each year.

Deborah Wiles is a Southerner with roots in Mississippi who grew up around the world in an Air Force family. She is the author of the beloved Love, Ruby Lavender and Freedom Summer, as well as the National Book Awards finalists Each Little Bird That Sings and Revolution. She is the pioneer of the documentary novel, in a trilogy about the 1960s. Her picture books We Are All Under One Wide Sky and Simple Thanks are poems for readers of all ages. Deborah lives in Georgia where she grows the world’s most beautiful zinnias, climbs Stone Mountain, and avoids the Atlanta traffic.
Inspiration
Deborah Wiles has launched the StoryBelly Lab, a “warm-hearted community of writers, readers & makers… where she shares her stories and ways you can find your own.” I have long admired her writing and the generosity with which she shares the means of storytelling. She recently posted an exercise inspired from a writing mentor, Nancy Johnson. We’re borrowing and sharing the prompt here today.
Process
- Write a list of places you have stayed in but not lived in.
- Write a list of trips you have taken.
- Write a list of people you once knew but no longer know.
Write a poem by picking a trip from list 2, along with a character from list 3 and incorporate a place from list 1.
Jennifer’s Poem
Once I Knew by Jennifer Guyor Jowett
I once knew myself
or at least I thought I did
I once stayed in nature
dwelling inside the words
the wind whispered
and evaporating into petal-scents
carried away on updrafts.
I wandered the woods
and pondered what the birds sang
to one another.
I watched sticks float along ravines
dipping and diving through rapids
and against rocky embankments
as they made their way to the river.
I walked the paths of ancestors,
following star-embroidered skies
into milk-laden nights.
I lay amongst the clouds
while tethered to the earth,
the grass my place of rest
once I knew myself.
Your Turn
Now, scroll to the comment section below to write your own poem. (This is a public space, so you may choose to use only your first name or initials depending on your privacy preferences.) Not ready? That’s okay. Read the poems already posted for more inspiration. Ponder your own throughout the day. Return later. And, if the prompt does not work for you, that is fine. All writing is welcome. Just write something. Oh, and a note about drafting: Since we are writing in short bursts, we all understand (and even welcome) the typos and partial poems that remind us we are human and that writing is always becoming. If you’d like to invite other teachers to write with us, tell them to subscribe. Also, please be sure to respond to at least three writers.
Stalagmites and stalactites
dead man’s curve
underground lakes
gollum’s in my mind
Penny Hardaway Orlando Magic jersey
matching shorts
Josh in Charlotte Hornets
Van Halen cassette
1995
the motels either had a 6 or an 8
caverns
Kentucky
lookout mountain
Chattanooga
Georgia
on my mind
35mm Fujifilm
came back to Indiana
exploring through the creek
to scared to eat wild mushrooms
my friend’s family has a nicer car than mine
and much better toys
but this trailer park…
well I guess they choose to spend their money on toys and not a house?
Caverns
now mental not physical
dark reaches
unknown corners
more to explore
then and now
is Jason still alive?
is Josh still wearing a Starter Jacket?
Charlotte Hornets?
oh yeah, I forgot I saw him, 1999
but did he remember like I did?
where are his parents?
do you think they would take me on their family vacation again?
I think this one needs a bot of editing!
Minnesota Whirlybird
By Mo Daley 7/20/25
In the summer of 1974, I turned 10. My mom,
older sister, and I drove with our neighbor to
Brainard, Minnesota from Midlothian, Illinois.
It was a long, hot, and sometimes tense nine-hour drive.
We traveled to visit my oldest brother
who was teaching adults with intellectual disabilities.
While he worked, we made our way to Paul Bunyan Land,
a real amusement park based on a fictional character,
but I guess all of them are, aren’t they?
This one was special, though, since the 26-foot-tall behemoth
and his trusty ox Babe welcomed me into my very first amusement park.
I loved all of it. Everything. Every spin, ascent, drop, and twirl.
I was in my glory.
Then I saw the helicopter rides, I’m talking real, live, working helicopters
that would lift and dip you all over northern Minnesota.
We were poor. Really poor. And I knew this.
But that didn’t stop me from begging my mom to let me take the risky joyride.
After what I can only assume was hours of me begging and whining, she caved.
I could go on the ride, but she had to accompany me. Cool. Let’s go.
Shortly before takeoff, I looked at her and saw the terror in her eyes.
She was afraid of heights! I had no idea. Yet she insisted she sit
on the outside, since the chopper lacked real doors.
We hovered. We glided. We flew.
We sipped. We dipped. We darted.
All the while mom tried to smile, but couldn’t keep her left hand
from drifting onto my right knee. I recognized her panic as her nails dug into
the soft flesh above my knee, leaving slight bruises, but I was in heaven.
And she knew it. And she rode the helicopter.
That day, floating above Brainard, Minnesota, I learned
the true heights of a mother’s love.
Phew, Mo! I would love to say I’d do anything for my kids but I’m not sure I could do that. Just reading this made my palms sweaty. But that connection between mother and daughter (I had a similar experience as the daughter who wanted to back out of the ride up the ski jump at Lake Placid. It was my mom who got me through it) is so powerful. What an adventure!
Oh, Mo, what a great story! A Paul Bunyan epic narrative. I was so happy when I got to “but I was in heaven” Those last two lines are precious. Clever use of “heights of a mother’s love.”
Oh, Mo. A beautiful narrative poem of love heights. This noticing of a relationship then and now offers such insight in the clauses and Ands along the way.
Jennifer and Deborah,
Thanks for hosting and prompting.
Jennifer, I like how in your poem the narrator comes to know herself through nature. I also like how “I once knew myself”” and its inverted twin “Once I knew myself” bookends your poem.
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Sunday Afternoon
after Wong Kar-wai’s In the Mood for Love
Riding along the hike and bike trail
I listened to my tires crunch and scrape
along the crushed granite
I thought of our shoulders
pressing together in the theater
I pictured the flowers on Mrs. Chan’s dresses
the thinness of Mr. Cho’s tie
I breathed out gratitude for the shade
I re-watched Mrs. Chan and Mr. Cho
standing in the Hong Kong rain
I reached my hand out to greet raindrops
I only imagined
I felt the stutter of my bike shifting gears
echoing Wong Kar-wai’s freeze frames
I clocked the black and white tail feathers
of a mockingbird
I thought of Mrs. Chan and Mr. Cho rehearsing
the beginning of their spouses’ unfaithfulness
I let my eyes slide over the greens of the trees
I recalled the saturated reds of the credits
the curtains surrounding Mr. Cho and Mrs. Chan
as they wrote martial arts serials
the wallpaper in the room where Mrs. Chan
sat alone in Singapore
I said hi to a small boy riding a small bicycle
and smiled when he said hi as he pedaled by
without training wheels
I slowed my breathing
as Mr. Cho whispered his secret
into a hole in the ruins
of Angor What
I took the long way home
I kissed you hello
Whoa, Sharon! I thought I knew where this was going and then I totally didn’t. And I’m so good with that since it has me puzzling in such good ways. I love the soothing sounds of the bike ride at the intro, followed by the interruptions to that narrative with Mrs. Chan and Mr. Cho. And I most especially loved how you interacted with the raindrops that ended up only imagined (and what that tells us about all of the rest!).
What a story you tell. I am left wondering what’s next with your last line; there is more story to come! Nicely done
Sharon, I am happy to know you are healed and riding your bike again. Thank you for taking us along this trail ride. The line I fell in love with is “I reached my hand out to greet raindrops.”
I love how you notice all the little things on your way, but that little boy without training wheels brought me smiles.
Sharon, this is quite a story. I want to read and reread it because of your beautiful imagery.
Y’all are such wonderful, brave poets and writers. Thank you for the warm welcome today. I have loved every minute of being with you. Thank you, Jennifer, for the opportunity! I am heading to a family gathering now — I will take all your poems (pieces of your hearts!) along in my pocket. Such richness. xoxox Debbie Wiles
Thank you, Debbie, for joining us. Enjoy your gathering!
Jennifer and Deborah, thank you for hosting today. Jennifer, your poem is so peaceful and lovely. It makes me stop and breathe in the nature. So many lovely images of sky, water, and land. The exercise of writing the three lists was very interesting. I see this poem could have gone in a million different directions.
MAGA Sister
You were a stand-in mother to me
when ours was sometimes too busy.
You were all but grown up when
our dad packed us all into the station wagon
for our first and only family vacation
Destination: Grand Canyon.
In the hotel, you held onto my chin and brushed
my hair while I nimbly toe-grabbed the dropped
amethyst stone I had just got at the gift shop.
Then we went out for dinner that night
(Surely, the only time we ever did that)
As I grew, you were always there for me,
painting my nails, reading me books,
going to my ball games, making me
an aunt again and letting me babysit.
When I married and had kids of my own,
you were the one in our will who would raise
our children if we would have died early.
And yet here we are so many decades later,
and I no longer know you.
I can follow the story and distance and hurt so vividly in this poem. Unfortunately relatable for many people who have seen the other sides of people in the past years. Thank you for sharing this piece
Denise, your title hinted at what was going to come. I kept waiting, yet hoping. The closeness you shared only makes that divide so much more vast. What an unfortunate place this country has found itself in. Hugs, my friend.
Moments like this are unforgettable in a child’s life. I didn’t know other girls toe-grabbed stuff they dropped like I did! Funny!
I feel the sorrow of the shift in who “sister” became. Such an awful transformation.
Denise,
This is heartbreaking. I know this feeling of not being able to recognize someone who has fallen into the maga hole. Ugh. Couplets are a perfect way to show what was. The parenthetical idea is very effective. I just have no words that suffice for this horrifying moment in time.
Denise, your poem today is sad. I keep thinking about how close people become so distant. I lost a few friends because of their position on russia in this war, so I hear you, and I am sorry.
That title. I knew exactly where you were going, yet all those details leading there hurt my heart even more than expected. I have a MAGA sister, too. It’s heartbreaking to feel like strangers.
This was a tough one to read Denise. I have a couple of friends who could stand in for your sister. It’s so hard because I don’t know what to do about it. I really love the tenderness in your poem.
Denise, your story of loss and loss is heartbreaking. There are no other words. I am so very sorry for you as well as for her.
🥺🥺 goodness, what an odd climate to be living in. Thank you for this offering. The details of your sisterhood makes the ending all the more heartbreakingly tender.
Jennifer,
Thank you for this prompt and your mentor poem. I couldn’t get the title “Once I Knew” out of my head. And I love the images, especially
Deborah, I love your trilogy about the 60s!!
i didn’t totally follow instructions.
a light extinguished
the blond feathered hair
the pink oxford
the madras shorts
the tan topsiders …
he looked like he came
straight out of an 80s movie
the preppy soccer star character
and I was smitten
from across the IU auditorium
during college orientation.
love—or at least infatuation—
at first sight.
a school of 40,000
and two months later
there he was in my first class:
Psych 101.
a complete romantic
at heart,
I just knew it was destiny.
his smile lit up
the huge lecture hall.
I was certain it was intended
for me.
a golden light
encompassed him.
as fate would have it,
we were paired up
randomly
for an experiment.
dorm phone numbers
exchanged.
meet-ups, once at
the Union,
once in his dorm lobby.
interactions easy
mainly doing the task at hand
with small talk scattered in
about where we were from
what we did in high school
how we felt about IU so far.
he was perfect …
engaging
funny
smart
kind
the semester wrapped up.
no cell phones,
no social media,
so I didn’t see him or
keep up over the holidays.
in late January,
I ran into his fraternity brother
at Brad’s Bagels and Deli.
casual convo until I slide in
“How’s JR doing?”
his face dropped.
his eyes meet mine,
hold mine
“You haven’t heard?”
I barely hear the details …
car wreck,
on the way home
from a concert
a curve
died instantly.
his obit read,
“He is best remembered
for the way
he could light up a room
with his smile and
how he made everyone feel
as if they were the most important
person in the room.”
I guess he made everyone feel
the way I felt.
~Susan Ahlbrand
20 July 2025
Oh, Susan. This wasn’t the way I thought this would end. I was seriously hoping for some kind of cute-meet memory. What a special person to have in your life, if only briefly. And in your sharing, we got to know a little of him too. Thank you for giving us this glimpse. (And not following the directions produces the best writing!)
How poignant, Susan… thank you. (And thanks for reading!) I love the echoes here, JR’s smile lighting up the room, the golden light, how you write in a circle and leave us with that final thought, so simple, and yet so final. I love the description of JR you open with as well. It’s specific to him, and to the time period. The shock of loss, and the realization that it’s everyone’s loss… you handle it all so deftly. xoxo
Oh, Susan,
I should have been warned with “a light extinguished”, but I was still sadly shocked about JR’s death. Your poem is a lovely tribute to a beautiful person.
Susan, thank you for crafting this lovely tribute to JR and for sharing him with us. I can see him perfectly with the lines, “he looked like he came / straight out of an 80s movie / the preppy soccer star character.” (And I love the craft move of the disjointed retelling of the accident, “car wreck, / on the way home / from a concert / a curve / died instantly.” Such a terrible event, but such a lovely poem.)
Oh my gosh, I got chills at the obit lines. This is a beautiful tragedy and you share it with such tenderness. I am moved. Thank you Susan for writing this brave piece.
That one packs a punch – – a gut punch. I was seeing him in his preppy dress and the golden light emanating, this handsome fellow…..I wasn’t expecting the ending. My heart goes out to you still, getting the news that way and grieving the loss of your friend. I like the way your poems tell the stories of your life and experiences.
Susan, your first line, “a light extinguished” should have had me prepared, but it seemed to become lost in the brightness of his light up the room smile. This is a brave memory you have shared, and one of a loss that I am sure has stayed with you.
Wow! Thank you for this gift today.. cheers to infatuation and times before instant access and coincidences. Here’s to JRs memory. 🤎
Thanks, Jennifer and Debra. This prompt got me thinking of what I thought about when I traveled and when I taught. For those not yet familiar, the gorgeous cathedral in Barcelona is known as “Basílica i Temple Expiatori de la Sagrada Família.” Thanks to AI, I could generate a graphic to accompany this poem. What a great idea for classroom teachers to consider. Oh, that’s why we’re here. 🙂
Physical, Mental, and Emotional Traveling
Traveling to the Equator in East Africa,
I wondered if my ancestors had lived there.
Swagging down the streets of Barcelona
Delighted to be someplace I’d only read about.
Anxious about military tanks in Marquette
When the citizens were planning a protest.
I wondered if students in my classes
Had ever faced situations like this
Before they came to the United States
Or since they’ve migrated here..
I cried when asked what it was like in Mombasa,
Thinking of ancestors stolen from their homeland.
I cringed when I recalled apprehension in France
Why should I be afraid? I wasn’t protesting.
Should I have joined them?
Then smile with glee that I,
A tourist, wasn’t arrested by guards
At the La Sagrada Família in Barcelona
When I touched the art on exhibit there.
I know I am a member of God’s family,
So why shouldn’t I touch what’s in my home?
Is this pushing it a little? Oh well.
Wow, Anna! That’s quite a push at the end! Choosing La Sagrada Familia works so beautifully for a story about journeys–isn’t that the church that is continually under construction? It’s on a journey of its own, traveling over generations. (BTW, the French are always protesting something).
Anna, wow, what a fertile mind and what material… thoughts from peace (swagging! so great) to anxiety in the same stanza, thoughts of ancestors and migration, crying, cringing, smiling with glee — you portray the way the mind — and heart — tries to take it all in and make sense of what it’s experiencing. Then, that last line. I love it. A question, and then Oh well. It’s almost a dare! So much contained in this poem… it feels like it wants to burst out of its confines and run!
Anna, what an amazing poem. I love how it goes from place-to-place in each line. I especially appreciate the lines about considering your ancestors stolen from their homeland. And the illustration is perfect! Did you create that? So interesting!
Yes, Denise. I used chatGPT. I’ve added that step to lessons this Sommer on the podcast series Keeping Them On S.T.R.E.A.M” (See YouTube) where I invite students to use AI to generate a graphic for a poem they write. We’ll see.
the final stanza was lovely, I can picture you touching the art to make a connection. A story across travels. Thank you for sharing
Anna, thank you for your story of this powerful story as well as your clear use of this (for us) teachable moment! I just tried to create and AI image, based on your poem and ideas and it really did work! Thank you for taking me along and pushing me ahead!
Jennifer, thank you for another invitation to write and for the inclusion of Deborah Wiles today. I love how you took me on this journey with your self you thought you knew. These closing lines are perfect:
I Once Knew
I once knew strength
It stayed in my body
Almost like it lived in every muscle
I could lift boxes without worry
Push the couch to vacuum underneath
And carry my son and daughter on each hip
I once knew strength
It kept me going from sunup to midnight
Almost like it lived in my brain
I could lesson plan, shop, and go to the movies
Have late dinners with cocktails and games
And dance until my toes ached
I once knew strength
It held me together for 29 years
Almost like it knew one day I would be free
I could argue and cry in pain all night
Show up for work with a plastic grin
And wonder when it will ever end
I once knew strength
© Stacey L. Joy, 7-20-25
Oh, Stacey. I feel this poem on so many levels. The allusion to a loss of physical strength over time – alas – and then the ability to endure great emotional pain and carry on “with a plastic grin.” We do not know, sometimes, what other people are enduring, how heavy their load really is. The repetition of “I once knew strength” is hauntingly effective…and yet, paradoxically, so strong.
The plastic grin just about broke me reading this. So powerful. And unfortunately so relatable by so many of us. The repetition is strong here, which is a contrast on what the repeating line says. Thank you for sharing.
Stacey, your poem could be a theme song for many of us, but few are a brave as you to admit that with age comes decreasing strength. I wonder if this the real reason for menapause. We couldn’t “mommy” at this age anyway. Thanks, I think, for the memories.
Stacey, this is hauntingly beautiful; however, your ending. and the reality of chronic pain, is what I will long remember from your poem. I suspect you are pretty strong to put on that plastic grin and show up. I wish you continued strength and hope.
What everyone else is saying, Stacey! I would echo that, and say it’s a visceral feeling to recognize this truth in someone else’s voice, someone who is brave enough to name the thing we might be hiding from, or might not want to admit. That plastic smile did me in, too. I also loved the image of you pushing the couch to vacuum underneath. Such a good detail for the strength you want to convey in that stanza. xo
Stacey! I feel you on this one! (I feel it in every ounce of my body). “I once knew strength” could be my words on any given day. Aging requires so much courage. And in embracing it and naming it, you show that courage.
Stacey,
Your poem is a timely gut punch for me. I recognize myself in each line and recall what we said when I taught in Arizona: If you want to party with the turkeys, you’d better be ready to soar w/ the eagles. Now, despite working out every damn day, I am physically weak and weak in terms of stamina. How did we do so much in the same amount of time? Say it again: “I once knew strength.” I also carried two babies on my hips. 😔
Wow, Stacey, so many kinds of strength here. Your poem is layered. It seems to go from simple physical strength, to the mental strength teachers have to juggle so many responsibilities, to that last sad stanza of a kind of strength that I wish we didn’t have to carry. Beautiful poem.
Jennifer & Deborah, thank you for this poetry prompt that had me meandering in surprising ways…
once i knew
dumpy little motels
temporary housing
seven of us in a stuffy one room
hold
too many kids in one tousled bed
or, worse yet, simple blankets tossed
onto the floor as sleep rolls
Dad’s ubiquitous cigar butts
smoldering in an ashtray
we kids and our idle searches
for something, anything,
to watch on the television
an endless daze of quick tempers
married with boredom
and me, too young to hop out
and away like our clothes
in the stuck open suitcases
no one living, just waiting
Navy quarters to be assigned soon
in the midst of these memories
is that time I was jostled awake
in the middle of the night
by some loud noise
the door to our room wide open
only to see and hear
in the motor lodge’s dinky pool
(the one squeezed into the parking lot
just outside our door)
Mom and Dad, the two of them,
their raucous laughter, and
so much chaotic splashing
shining a proverbial light:
find joy
always
Maureen, so lovely! There is such a *release* at the end of this poem — how fabulous! All that cramped existence, waiting for housing, “no one living” (also fabulous), and yet you show us everything we need to know about this family with that ending, as well as the gentle “jostled awake” — this is a child who is safe, even in the midst of the waiting. So nice. Thanks! xo
Maureen,
I can’t imagine how bad those motels must have been given how bad base housing can be. Your description reminds me of places we stayed in college when traveling for debate, but knowing what I do about your mom, I was surprised to find a moment of joy at the end. Yes to the “find joy always” mantra.
Maureen, your series of snippits pulled together so cleverly shows us the power of poetry and the truth of life. No matter how tough the times, tiny tidbits pulled together make for a beautiful mosaic, even if it’s tiny.
Maureen, you capture the mess of temporary housing so well, but then you end the piece with such a shining light of your parents reminding us ALL to find joy, always. THIS is storytelling of memories at its finest.
Maureen, the movement from crowded and cramped with the descriptions (stuffy, tousled, smoldered) switches with the stuck open suitcase and leads us to the raucous chaos of a middle night escape. What a joyful place to land. I can feel the energy release here, see you peering out, finding that light. Thank you for this moment.
Maureen,
I found myself holding my breath and grateful for the joyful ending. I also felt relieved to know that your parents had some time to really have fun. This was a treat to read.
Maureen,
Your poem captures so many emotions, The ones that resonated the most–and whose phrasing I most admired:
and your beautiful ending:
Thanks for bringing us right into the room.
I fell in love by the end. The trials and hardships seen made better with perspective. Thank you for sharing this honest memoir. I really connected to “no one living, waiting”
Ah, Maureen, I did not expect that sweet joy-filled ending. What a lovely spin on the dreary setting, springing to life with powerful lines like “an endless daze of quick tempers
married with boredom”
Maureen,
I am so grateful for this poetic glimpse into your life and the ways your parents carved joy within, as, because of uncertainty. Lovely line breaks.
I could say,
there was
a streetlamp
softly covered
in snow where
I spent a great
many days in
my youth or
maybe mention
a courtroom
in Maycomb
County while I
passed the time
as a sophomore
in room A-220,
(the very same
room where
I teach now),
I could also
mention
a college trip
to Canterbury
where I listened
to a number of
(bawdy) tales,
one being from
a cook who
flavored his
meals with puss,
(yikes!)
or, in more
recent years,
the time I’ve spent
with ergodic literature,
searching the streets
(and “unspaces”)
of the United
Kingdom pursued
by a “conceptual
shark” (named
a Ludovician)
or wandering
around the
labyrinth of
a house that
was much bigger
on the inside than
the outside,
no, now, it seems
I get my fiction from
the news and every
day seems more and
more fantastical
(read: batshit crazy)
than the last
and none of it
is at all
comforting
____________________________________________
Thank you Jennifer and Deborah for your engaging prompt today! Not a big traveler myself, I started thinking about places I’ve visited in literature, which started to be a fun road trip, but then, as these “things” seem to happen more and more these days, the poem shifted toward…[“gestures broadly at everything”]…lol. Sorry.
“Much bigger on the inside than on the outside” made me connect to this poem. And truly, the mystical fiction you gesture toward isn’t as lovely and comforting as what we should be reading living enjoying. Thank you for sharing this piece, I appreciate your take.
That magical streetlamp covered in snow holds a place in my classroom (in a scene above the book closet my students wanted me to design into a wardrobe to Narnia!). I so prefer the fiction of the past to that of the present news, in all of its batshit crazy forms. Even if that means meals flavored with puss from a fellow Canterburian (just making up words here). Thanks for this trip, Scott!
“I get my fiction from the news” – oh how I love this line, Scott! If only we could close the book. I’m also deeply loving the idea of searching “unspaces” . Fun journey of a poem!
How I love this, Scott! Every line holds a surprise… I have to pay attention (because I am rapt), and I am rewarded along the way. I laughed out loud at the line Maureen mentions, I get my fiction from the news, and then chortled at its ending, … more and more fantastical (read: batshit crazy). This poem is grounded in your truth and… maybe a bit of frustration? There’s emotion, that’s for sure, and that’s great. xo
Scott, I am always out of words after I read one of your clever and commanding poems. This one takes me through pleasant memories and gets more creepy as it goes along. Snow, streetlamp, courtroom, bawdy tales of puss to a house full of mystery and craziness. Wow!
Scott, your travels through literature have certainly taken you many, many places and provided you with incite into people and places! Yet, your powerful (and real and true) line at the end, “I get my fiction from the news and every day seems more and more fantastical,” is the most real line I have read today! All the news coming from Washington and around the country about incarcerating people for no reason and building alligator infested prisons makes Nixon sound like a saint!
Scott,
Your allusions to Narnia, Chaucer and TKAM made me smile. I also thought of writing about the places I’d visited in books and ending up writing about a movie instead.
How cool is this!:
I
passed the time
as a sophomore
in room A-220,
(the very same
room where
I teach now)
Safe travels in the lands of literature!
Solei
I thought I knew Solei
blonde, bright and beautiful
as her name inplies.
But she was not
aglow as the sun,
her hair beached and her face a frown.
As we travelled to Cancun
she strayed away from us,
didn’t respect the culture,
slept, instead of meeting with us,
was always late and complaining.
When I stayed on the beach in Hawaii,
Solei came strolling along
holding hands with a new friend.
I wondered.
Has she changed?
Is she smiling and happy
or will this be a short lived friendship?
The connections to this persons name and images about them are really lovely, despite maybe a grouchy subject. Thank you bff or sharing, and we can see the different POV at the end. Great work
Susan, I am struck by the intro to this poem and the contrast between Solei’s name and how she is described, which sets the tone for her actions later. Traveling to sunny places (Cancun and Hawaii) helps to build that contrast too.
Isn’t it marvelous to go back in time and remember these fleeting personalities? I love your poetic reasoning about her name/the mismatch –
A classic “unity of opposites” here with that name and her actions — well done, Susan. I always like openings like this one: I thought I knew… because they set up the reader for something to happen right away, something to be learned, and something, sometimes, juicy. :> xo
Susan, you have so perfectly capture the “oppositional” perspective often seen in teens who just really do not want to be seen with or near their families whether it is when traveling or going anywhere!
Deborah,
Good to see you here. Thank you for sharing the prompt w/ Jennifer and for your many contributions to KidLit. I love the Countdown & Revolution series. I used them as examples for multigenre projects w/ seniors.
Jennifer,
I share the ideas in your reflective poem. Lately I often think about the woods, swim g from vines, leaves crunching under my feet. There’s a subtext about knowing both oneself and place in your poem, and these days it feels shattered.
Someone Else’s Home
“Travel is fatal to prejudice, bigotry, and narrow mindedness.” —Mark Twain
Once I knew this truth &
wear it on t-shirts to disclose
my inner nomad, my place in the
places I’ve been social media
zeitgeist. I believed my time in
Paradise offered insight into
the ways of wherever I go.
Once I watched House Hunters
International & imagined my-
self escaping this dystopia for—
pardon the cliche—greener
pastures: Costa Rica, perhaps,
grateful for the Pura Vida life:
simplicity, positivity shaping identity.
Once I met guides & fellow
travelers escaping far-flung
normalities, searching a new
side of Paradise. I planned to
remember them & their names, but
WhatsApp settings change & in
time only anonymous photos remain.
Each journey to Paradise leads
to someone else’s home.
Glenda Funk
July 20, 2025
I love these lines: “Each journey to Paradise leads to someone else’s home” for its truth and the memories it brings to mind for me too. Opening with Twain’s quote helps set the tone and fully captures all of what I know about you–your love of travel, your concern for others, your sense of justice… There are so many great takeaways from this poem. I especially love how “my place in the places I’ve been” feels in my mind and mouth as I imagine saying these words. It would make a great book title! Thanks for sharing.
Love the quote and how you use that sentiment in your own travels. So true about fellow travelers, with good intentions but then distant memories. Love the references to modern times but also a nostalgic flare. Thank you for sharing
What a phenomenal closing stanza – love the idea of “Paradise leading to someone else’s home”…I hear in these words the mutual concept of being a welcomed visitor, truly excited to be there in this “new home.” Travel lets this happen, to see and know “different” others and feel at home in this new way.
Hi, Glenda, and thank you for the kind words about Countdown and Revolution. Thanks, too, for your poem. I especially like the opening line: Once I knew this truth… it sets up a question and a mystery and can then go in so many ways, riffing off the Twain quote. I like so many phrases in this poem, such as “escaping the dystopia” followed by “pardon the cliche” which is, in itself, a cliche, and therefore works so well here (it also gives a tone of lightness/humor which is welcome. I also like the poem’s “everyday-ness” — the use of the everyday words, whatsapp and social media, etc — it’s a grounded poem in the everyday, but it has deeper meanings, too. well done! xo
Glenda, how enjoyable this was to read and imagine. I think you would be the perfect person to write a book of travel poetry!
😍
Glenda, there are so many layers of wonderful here starting with the Twain quote and ending with, “Each journey to Paradise leads to someone else’s home.” You magically capture the in-the-moment-excitement of a new “paradise” even if in reality, it is someone’s home. Lovely and deep!
Glenda, thank you for reminding us that when we go places, we come to someone’s home. Your final lines speak that truth, and I am going to hold onto them. I like the background image. It fits with an image of Paradise.
“Someone Else’s Home” is such a great title. Your poem is thought provoking. The beginning of each stanza is powerful–Once I knew, Once I watched, Once I met. A wise poem from a world traveler.
Glenda,
I am so grateful for your poem today, a season of my life that benefits from your wisdom captured beautiful in this poetic form as if you wrote it for me. And isn’t that just the beauty of great poets, the ones who make you feel seen. Thank you. I am grateful to be in this home and for all it is teaching us about being.
Peace,
Sarah
Here is something from me:
The judge was justice of the peace in Livingston,
the first town big enough to boast a courthouse
as we crossed over into Alabama
from the Mississippi state line.
My father had called ahead.
It was a Saturday.
The judge was watching college football on his television
but he met us at the courthouse and
unlocked the door,
led us to his chambers,
said he’d like to say a few words,
and did.
Remember, he said to me,
don’t start in with your problems
as soon as your new husband
comes home from work at the end of a hard day,
and – he looked at both of us –
never go to bed angry with one another.
Steve handed him the license and
the required blood test results.
Mississippi would not marry us for three days,
the standard waiting period,
but Alabama would marry us the next day,
and my parents had come all this way
to take care of this problem.
They had a long trip back to their home,
let’s get this over with.
My mother and father stood behind us,
my mother silently wept.
She had asked me the day before,
did you have your clothes on?
Code for did he force you?
but I wouldn’t understand that,
not for decades.
Decades that I was filled with bitter rage at
being forced,
at end of my father’s proverbial shotgun,
to marry a boy I did not know,
to end my new life of freedom from their grip
– anyone’s grip –
before it had begun.
When it was over, the first thing I did was
turn around and hug my father for dear life.
I sobbed into his hard, mean, unmoving chest
because I had no power.
And because I knew:
This changed everything.
Debbie, what an incredibly powerful poem capturing a moment in life that so monumentally must have affected everything thereafter. The first hint of something amiss was your parents coming to take care of the problem, though the judge’s words certainly begin to show the power men had (have?) over women in controlling their behavior. I’m struck by the first thing done after it was over–turning to the father, and what that says about the relationship. Thank you for such an honest poem today. Hugs.
xoxo thank you, friend.
Deborah,
That shift in tone in which we learn this wedding is not by choice is a gut punch. It gives a sense of irony to the preacher’s admonition, as though only men have problems at the end of a long, hard day. But the real tragedy here is subtext that offers a stark reminder of how we as a society are regressing. “Let’s get this over with” takes in a sense of urgency in our current reality, as does “ This changed everything.”
thank you, Glenda… that’s so interesting to think about, the connection between then and now…
Deborah, This narrative poem drew me into the story uncertain whether to feel joy or sorrow for the narrator. You wrote the first half with ambiguity yet hints that there be a shift. For who is it a “problem” slowly unveiled itself in the italics. I ache for this girl who like spent a lifetime reclaiming power.
It’s a powerful thing, to be seen (for all of us)… thank you, Sarah. xo
Wow. This is a powerful poem that left me with a yearning to find that young woman and comfort her. It is at once a deeply personal narrative and a painful commentary on our society. Your father’s hard, mean unmoving chest broke me. Thanks for your opening your heart.
That girl needed a lot of comfort… among other things. :> Thank you, Ann.
Stunning poem, Deborah. Thank you for sharing. I have played back and forth with that last line, thinking it has at least two meanings – without a doubt, getting married like this “changed everything”/changed the trajectory of your life. But, coupled with that last stanza and the recognition of “I had no power” – that changes everything, too. And feels – somehow – in this current political landscape – like a recognition of how women are forced into a powerless, submissive role by patriarchal systems…. Sorry, I’m getting a bit heavy here.
You’re not heavy at all, Maureen — I appreciate that insight. The ending needs work, for sure… how DID that change everything? What DID that girl know then? Or suspect? Or long for? I would lie to revisit it.
I would “like” to revisit it. Isn’t that slip to “lie” interesting? hmmm…. :>
Wow, Debbie, this hits me hard. I feel the suffering in my bones. I, too, married a boy I did not know and it changed everything.
Solidarity, Stacey. :> xoxo
Deborah – this is a novel condensed in verse. I could see it all (and feel it all) happening, every detail of this vivid, slow build-up and reveal. The forced end of “a new life of freedom” before it had begun, the sobbing in the father’s “hard, mean, unmoving chest” – incredibly powerful. In that moment it surely didn’t seem so, but here, now, in verse – you are mighty, indeed.
That makes me teary. Thank you. xo
Deborah—this amazing poem is a novel in 48 lines. That last stanza hit so hard. Wow.
xoxoxo to you.
Deborah, your poem is incredibly powerful and provides insight into an event that indeed changed everything for you and began a chapter where you were powerless and afraid. I feel pulled into your story and want to know more. I think this is poem, for the cover of your novel.
Thank you, Anita. Your poem about the fork in the road feels akin to mine… that place where you decide to go on, right? Or where going-on is the only choice, perhaps. xo
Often, I make the mistake of assuming the speaker in the poem is the writer even though I continually caution my students against doing that.
Whoever this is about…we must know more. You share so much on so few lines, but I love her so much and want to know more.
The seeds of a novel??
I am moved by this memory that seemed hard to retrieve and perhaps painful to pen. Thank you for bravely sharing this. The italics really shook me. Powerful.
This prompt was tricky for me, but I appreciate the challenge of combining story telling, thank you for inviting us to write in ways that speak to us.
casting call
We all know the trope:
main character moves to new town
has to make new friends
how scary, how brave.
But in my movie, on my set,
how can there possibly be
seventeen main characters?
Yep, read that again: seventeen.
And yet, me myself, and I
stay in the place
others are just passing through.
Where are the movies
about the one who stays?
The one who has hardened.
The one who fakes excitement,
fakes surprise because
these friendships
follow a freaking script.
I didn’t want to be cast for that role.
The person and place who are
remembered but forgotten all at once.
The character with no energy, no spirit
to keep in touch, to stay friends,
trapped in a trope.
Hi, C.O. and thanks for this poem. “Where are the movies about the one who stays?” — what a powerful line! Where indeed! I love the idea of being cast for a role in life, in a play, in the movies, and I love the unity of opposites in “remembered but forgotten all at once.” xox
C.O, I am with Deborah on that line that questions “Where are the movies / about the one who stays?” Your poem makes me think about all of us teachers who stay while students pass from one grade to another (or one course to another, in my case), and we get attached and and keep caring while they move on. Thank you for facing the challenge and sharing your thoughts.
I didn’t even think about it in the school context, but so true about new students passing through each year.
What an interesting outcome you created from this prompt! I love the idea of being cast in a movie, especially in the midst of tropes. Here’s the strength of your poem for me: “I didn’t want to be cast for that role.” We are cheering for you here, the character lacking energy and spirit, trapped. And like the others, I found that question in the middle is so thought-provoking. Where, indeed?
C.O.,
Where indeed are those scripts about the ones who stayed. This is such a clever framing of life and the movies that define our lives. I’m one who moved—several times, but I know where I am is a place where many stayed. That knowledge complicates the plot. Maybe that’s why I eschew Hallmark movies!
C.O., there’s so much to love here: the metafictive play, the humor, the direct address, the serious underlying themes, the self-deprecation. This is right up my alley, lol! (And, hey, “energy” and “spirit” are simply overrated! Besides, keep in mind, maybe, that some Summer Blockbusters simply just … aren’t. Sometimes they tank at the box office. Now, don’t scrutinize this metaphor too much because it would seem that I’m wishing ill — or, at least something “less than stellar” — on some of those “other” main characters in “your movie.” 🙂 )
So compelling, C.O.! First, the alliteration of trapped/trope. It is the perfect backdrop – so to speak – for your story poem. The longing for something real and lasting instead of standardly superficial rings so true…as haunting as this poem is about so many people coming and going (I wrote on that thought also), I applaud the determination of this line, my favorite: “I didn’t want to be cast for that role.” I have a theater background; I absolutely love your theater imagery.
CO, your question is really BIG and also an important one! On first read, I imagined a scenario where all of your children, relatives and /or friends moved on – 17 of them – and just you all by yourself, stayed! Yet, I also get the bigger picture of the hero/heroine who is left after the other characters move on…I could talk about this for a while…..
This is fabulous. Brings back memories of when I moved to a new town where everyone knew everyone. Then you take the turn to
C.O., you nailed it and your take on the prompt was brilliant! Loving the connections to theater because it seems life really is a series of acts.
Standing and clapping!!! 🙌🏽
C.O., what a fascinating narrative in such a unique and fun format. I did think you were going to be the main character who moved into a new town. It is so rich to imagine the story from “the one who stays” point of view. “trapped in a trope” is a stellar line. Well done.
CO, this is a thought provoking poem about the essence of roots and staying the course in a place where others come and go. I, too, celebrate the lifelong commitment to place and value the history of friendships that have stood the test of time. Beautiful.
What I didn’t know before (from Ada)
was how climbing hills was not
the same as climbing stairs, not
steps by any means, not a ladder
to boost the body, but a slide hell
bent on keeping you down.The hill
we climbed today led us
nowhere. I called to you to hold onto
the street light, to wait for me. This
is how you loved me. You let me
rest while you found stairs to lift us
home. You standing under an arch
of pink bougainvillea holding a
steel railing. I remember we laughed
suddenly not at all tired, not wanting
any other view but ours.
Sarah, this is so beautiful to say this is how you loved me: you let me rest while you found stairs to lift us home. I am imagining that this is part of the journey of discovery in Barcelona, maybe? I am enjoying living vicariously through your posts – – even in the tough climbs there is so much to learn and I am grateful you shared one such time in your poem today.
Hi, Sarah! I’m with Kim — that was the very line that grabbed me by the heart: this is how you loved me: you let me rest while you found stairs to lift us home. a tiny sob! so, so lovely, and it says so very much… in so few words. Thank you. xo
Sarah, I can only imagine that I am traveling with you (it seems your entire journey thus far has been uphill!). I am struck by how the hill seems unconquerable (stairs always feel worse for me) and then led to nowhere. It calls to mind all those fruitless battles in life. This ending is beautiful–for its image of love, rest, the arch of flowers, and the fruit you found in the view.
Oh, climbing the hills, Sarah! It makes me smile remembering us a few weeks ago. In our case, we switch the roles, and I am the one waiting. What I like is to witness that moment when your are past exhausted, self-content, and happy as you “laughed / suddenly not at all tired, not wanting / any other view but ours.” So heartwarming!
Sarah, the enjambment here is magnificent. The lyrical lines fall just right on the ear. I love the love in this poem – as bright as that bougainvillea itself, overarching all.
Sarah, your poem has “exploring old sections of Europe” all over it! Yes, the hills, ever so long and slow and hard as well as the endless and yet essential steps that were used to traverse those treacherous slopes. I, too, am enjoying your journey, even though I am home writing a syllabus in NJ!
This is how you loved me…
Love is in the actions.
I’m loving following your adventures and I’m thrilled you and Dan are getting this opportunity.
I appreciate the connection to yesterday’s poem you shared; the stairs and hills and support systems. “This is how you loved me” is so tender. The final line, too. Lovely.
Another day with a beautiful poem and an excellent prompt, Jennifer. I like the reflective nature of your poem. I am in love with the final lines:
“I lay amongst the clouds
while tethered to the earth,
the grass my place of rest
once I knew myself.”
Here is my offering for today:
The Places I Once Knew—Now Hers Too
I once knew a girl, not just golden of hair,
but golden of heart—
taunted by an evil stepmother
she swept ashes by day and sang to mice by moonlight.
In the quiet of my childhood home at night,
she tiptoed into dreams with a glass slipper in hand—
kindness and grace can survive cruelty.
I once knew another—
Dorothy Gale, Kansas girl in a gingham dress,
who spoke to scarecrows and believed in lions.
In a summer camp by the Crimean Mountains,
I turned pages by flashlight
and learned what courage sounds like
when spoken by the smallest voice.
And there was Meg—
the girl who crossed galaxies not for glory
but to save her brother.
On a spring break trip to Latvia,
a land of contrasts, where forest meets city,
I thought of how love can bend time
and bring light to the darkest places.
Now, in my granddaughter’s bedroom in Ohio,
we curl up on a futon that smells like tea rose and crayons.
She asks for a story: “One with magic, please.”
I open the book, and together we journey
to the places I once knew—
where kindness, courage, and love
still wait, just beyond the page.
Oh, Leilya! The connectedness of stories, brought to life in your poem, makes my heart happy. We find you, across the world, sharing the same stories we know and love, and they continue on between you and your granddaughter. That’s the magic. Right there. And I just love that they are all 3 strong girls finding their way to courage, who offered it for you and for the next generation while reminding us of strength here in your words.
Hi, Leilya, this is lovely and evocative and full of memory for me, too, as I’ve read the books and adventures you reference, and your last stanza reminds me of my littlest girl and I doing the exact same thing, oh-so-many years ago… thanks for that. I love “love can bend time and bring light to the darkest places.” Yes, indeed. xo
Hmmm… I think I forgot to post my earlier comment! I wanted to thank you for reminding me of my old friends for each of them holds a space in my heart too. It cheered me to imagine you and your granddaughter curled on that futon that smells like “tea rose and crayons” and most of all to be reminded of the places where kindness courage and love still wait.
Leilya,
This prompt must feel both heavy and healing to you. I always love reading your poems about Crimea and Ukraine. I hope some day you’ll be able to show your granddaughter these places beyond the pages of a book. A standout line for me is “love can bend time
and bring light to the darkest places.” It’s a prayer.
This is so sweet and so thoughtfully told. I especially love the hair and heart of gold. Storytelling must feel more magical for your grands because of you. Thanks for sharing.
Leilya, I am sure you are one of the great storytelling and reading grandmothers sharing those special, magical tales that really show how, “love can bend time and bring light to the darkest places.”
Leilya,
This poem brings such warmth to my heart. The stories we love—even in Ukraine—shape is so much and then we hand down to our grandkids. The power of the page.
Leilya,
Thank you for this sweet poem of connecting through reading beloved stories.
I loved your combination of story and place:
I feel so anchored in my memories of these stories and so connected to you reading them across your places.
Lovely!
Leilya, this is a joy to read, and to imagine the generations of stories shaping and molding young girls into strong women, and it continues. This is just gorgeous, and I think it would be so beautiful published in a collection. I’m imagining the glorious illustrations that would accompany it.
Wow Jennifer, this is lovely, my favorite line: star-embroidered skies…such as beautiful description and one which I will think of often. My sister is visiting this week but I will be back throughout the day!
If You Had Stayed
If you had stayed longer,
I’d have brought you to the place
of the aspen and poplar,
where summer snow lines the street
and I once saw an old women,
wearing a babushka
slash overgrown weeds with a scythe.
Perhaps we’d venture to the steppe
for a picnic
and marvel at the seemingly empty
expanse of rock and grass,
enjoying our wine and cheese,
laughing as we always did,
not knowing the dark history
that predated us
or which awaited.
Ann, this poem is an invitation for us to join you. And linger. I want to stay longer. I’m drawn to the line “of the aspen and poplar” which feels like its own invitation–being OF somewhere rather than at somewhere. This makes me want to play with prepositions and see how just that small change can evoke entirely new meaning and brings new meaning in an oblique sort of way. There are so many beautiful images here. Thanks for sharing your writing!
Ann, have a wonderful visit with your sister. Those days should be cherished. In your poem the image of “an old woman / wearing a babushka / slash overgrown weeds with a scythe” reminded me of living in the village where such sights were common. It’s also interesting to me how you gently call a headscarf “babushka.” Babushka is literally an old woman or a grandmother. It made me recall some harsh realities and hardships of women in the former Soviet Union. sometimes I just want to forget “the dark history” or even the gloomier present. Thank you for taking me on this journey today!
Leila, it was an intentional use of babushka because we were in Karaganda to bring my son home. You recalled what I remembered.
This is so rich, Ann, and in so few words, carefully chosen! “babushka” and “scythe” and “steppe” and that ending that brought me up short and that feels exactly right. xo
Such mystery here. I started reading and thought this was a poem of parting (and it may be that) but I also feel that you and the other person have had a long history full of pitfalls together.
Ann, your poem is powerful with strong words and images and the old women swing scythes while wearing their babushkas is both beautiful and hauntingly sad realizing their struggles to survive and the harsh realities of their lives. I am glad to read in the comments that you were bringing your son home. Lucky boy and lucky mom.
Ooof the final lines are a loud boom. I love the lightness that transitions to ominous. Really well crafted, delightful to read.
Jennifer, your poem and your prompt forced me to write this morning even though I really didn’t have time to write this morning. You speak to my broken heart in so many ways today. Thank you for this. I will be back tonight to read but need to share my heart.
I wish we could have shared
That winery on the top of Mt Etna with
Tidbits of cheese among volcanic ash or
Prayed in an aging church with
Pews infused with generations of hope, despair or
Held on tight so the wind did not
Blow us back to America before
We celebrated in the grotto of Castlemola
With waves interspersing our hopes and dreams.
But, at the fork in the road,
we lost our way so,
I went without you.
That “tidbits of cheese among volcanic ash” is such fantastic phrasing, Anita.
Kevin
Anita, you had me at winery and I was all in at the aging church with the pews of hope and despair. What a beautiful poem – and I hear you about the broken heart – – oh my, it is grueling. You have had some meaningful experiences and it hurts even worse when resurrecting all the best memories, hopes, and dreams adds to the pain. I’m hoping that your heart feels better and that there have been and are more great memories right ahead! Cheers!
Anita, I am sooo glad you wrote today. This poem pulls me along, from one stop to the next–just as I’m getting situated and starting to delve in, another image grabs my hand and yanks me forward. Such loveliness here. I’m drawn again and again to the “pews infused with generations of hope, despair or…” but happily get tugged along as the wind blowing us back to America before is another spot to try to dig in. And those last two lines – wow!
Anita, I just have that “wow” feeling after reading your poem where each word and each line “share [your] heart.” These lines captured my attention and connected my personal experiences toy ours. This is a power of words right here for me today! Thank you.
Anita,
Yes, a poem of parting. I feel the heart beats in every scene and also feel the single heart beating on, maybe stronger, for going anyway.
I love this response. xo
Anita,
I sense the longing and the pain of separation in your poem. I always feel this way when leaving both place and people. That fork in the road may lead to possibilities, but it often also leads to loss. Gorgeous poem.
This poem brought longing to me of a time and romance I had it Italy. Yes, there was a fork in the road for me, too.
Anita, the loss in this poem strikes deep. It there in the ash, the tidbits, the pews of the aging church, the wind… and finally at that that fork in the road. Yet there is a celebratory note in that last line. Despite the loss of “hopes and dreams… I went without you.” Not as imagined, not without longing, but going on, anyway. This is profound. In itself, a message of hope.
Many shared themes today matching your final lines- going on our own way without that person we no longer know. Lovely images of travel. Thanks for sharing.
Wow, Anita, I love this poem, with all the beauty and all the questions it brings up. The “tidbits of cheese”, “pews infused” and “wave interspersing our hopes and dreams” are just three of the beauties I loved. Those last three lines add a sadness to the beauty.
Good morning, everyone! Deborah Wiles here, getting my bearings this Sunday morning, excited to see activity buzzing already around this prompt — thank you, Jennifer, for inviting me to participate! I’ll be back soon, so I can savor what everyone is sharing, and maybe share a bit of something myself. :> Happy writing! xoxo
Glad you are here, Debbie!
Nice to meet you, Deborah! Thank you for inspiring us today.
Thank you! It is entirely my pleasure. I am swimming in y’all’s wonderful poems. xo
What a treat to have you joining us and inspiring us today! I’m eager to write but await my poem to make sense on my page. 🤣
Search for a Sway
As I stepped into dark pine,
a faithful friend entered my mind,
anxiety for the unseen,
I close my eyes to wash me clean.
Traveling downhill,
I found depression,
so I kneeled.
Sounds of Black Forest,
Chilled me,
as I hunt for my harvest.
Down in the hollow,
I meet intrusive thoughts,
a recurring fight,
I have already fought.
My ladder leaned on an oak,
My breath lingering
like an obsessive smoke.
Slowly I perch as day breaks,
I meet peace,
for my sake.
As light creeps along the leaves,
My prayers were answered,
I believe.
As the sun warms my face,
I recieve love,
a welcoming grace.
As a deer soon appears,
the daylight,
is what he fears.
But,
we both met survival today,
as he flagged and ran away,
and…..
I noticed a maple leaf sway,
I found content,
and
decided to stay.
Oh I love the personified feelings turned into people and places that many of us know so well. Thank you for taking the prompt this way. I admire the rhythm.
The line in your last stanza — “I noticed a maple leaf sway” — sticks with me for some reason — a moment of quiet noticing, perhaps. I can see it.
Kevin
Boxer, the motif of the deer is strong in your poems and here it is again today, bringing hope in the fear and uncertainty. Lovely poem and so in touch with your rural roots. Glad you decided to stay!
Clayton, such beautiful phrasing throughout your poem. From the initial line to the last, I was mesmerized by how you personified feelings, made them feel more real, allowed us to meet them.
Traveling downhill,
I found depression,
so I kneeled.
Boxer, and in all of those happenings, you found the solid grounding:
“I noticed a maple leaf sway,
I found content,
and
decided to stay.”
Wonderfully said!
Clayton, there is energy at the start of this poem, but then you leave us with the contentment of staying in this safe, for now, place.
Jennifer and Deborah, you have hit a homerun with today’s poem prompt! I loved looking back at the memories on my phone to write this one, and it reminds me where I want to go on my next trip. Your poem inspired me to think of the earth that maybe once wasn’t dirt but now is, and I thought of the swimming pool where I learned to swim. I like that you created a circular ending by flipping one word. And I want to know more about this writing club near Atlanta and if it ever meets in person. Thank you both for the invitation to write!
To Be Continued
I once knew Miss Sue
who taught me
how to swim in
her backyard pool
now filled in
with earth and flowers
I once stayed at
The Blue Swallow Motel
with the Swiss dot bedspread
and Moon Pies on the pillows
and t-shirts advertising
refrigerated air conditioning
as I drove Route 66
I swam in the Illinois
cornfield sunset
I swooned over the
coconut cream pie
at the Midpoint Cafe
in Adrian, Texas
I sweltered in the
Palo Duro Canyon
Texas heat
where even the road runners
know to sit in the shade
of the picnic tables
I sweethearted a
photo finish kiss
with my husband at
Cadillac Ranch
I swapped my beaded
quartz bracelet for one
made of turquoise and
mother of pearl
in Albuquerque
at the store with
the red war paint door
because it reminded me of
my mother
I swore to return to
finish the route
to be continued…..
Kim, what a perfect ending! We travel the route right along with you and want to keep going too. Your use of introductory lines, so simple with the subject and change of verb (sweethearted is so good!), duplicates the photo reel, each like a snapshot. I now understand the filled-in pools of the south, thanks to Debbie who shared memories of her childhood local pools at Storybelly. Another circling of experiences we find in life as we walk through and gather connection from one another.
What wonderful use of detail to paint imagery in the mind of the reader! I love this. I, too, have stayed at “The Blue Swallow Motel” of my own experience, complete with Swiss dot bedspread and Moon Pies on the pillows. Or its equivalent. I love it when I can relate to the experiences in a poem, using my own moments, memories, and meaning I assign to them. This is lovely. xo
Your first stanza is just perfect!
Kevin
Kim,
I held onto every image in this poem. Such specific scenes embodied I spoons, swelters, swaps, and promises. I wanted more, like this gathering of memories is leading toward a discovery for the speaker. Lovely.
Kim,
This is a lovely poetic journey of your Route 66 road trip three years ago (?). I do hope you can finish the trip and share more Americana a unique roadside attractions in verse w/ us.
Kim, in this poem, your memories are perfectly crafted and come to life so that I too feel like I was at that store in Albuquerque. I also LOVE your ending because, to be honest, I wanted your poem to continue along this journey.
Kim, your penchant for precise detail made me experience it all – oh, that Illinois cornfield sunset! I’d have swum in it, too. I almost wrote about Texas heat today – in fact, I started that poem and quickly switched gears. Friends told me the heat in Texas is not as “bad” as it is here in my native southeastern U.S., where the humidity makes you feel like you’re walking in and breathing bathwater (I’m sure you can relate, one southern Zebulon to another!). And, it wasn’t true: Hot is hot and Texas in summer is HOT. Blazing, in fact. Those roadrunners DO know. The swap of that bracelet because it reminded you of your mother… I am undone. I so understand. I am here to read every vibrant word whenever you continue the route <3
LOVE the transformation making sweethearted into a verb. So many rich images here, Kim!
A lovely map of memories with a beautiful close. Thanks for crafting this journey.
Jennifer & Deborah: Thank you for this fabulous, rich, creative storytelling prompt. Jennifer, your poem is poignant and haunting in turn. I savored the calming offerings of nature (birds!) and the connection to ancestors. Your vibrant imagery imparts sense of awe and longing, to know self and to transcend the earth, even while “the grass” provides your “place of rest.” A beckoning.
Where I ended up with my own poem is completely unexpected – the prompt took its own turns in the tunnels of my brain.
Vestiges
In this vale
people come
and go
I can sometimes find
our artifacts
proof
that we were here
before
-poof-
we are gone.
By the roadside, here
amongst the litter
part of a letter
signed with “Love”
who knows
who remembers
what the rest of it said
before weather and time
took it.
Under the bush, there
two battered dolls
no clothes at all
once upon a time
cherished
by little girls
before weather and time
did their thing.
Sometimes,
here in this vale,
I can hear them sing
for they don’t know
how people
come and go
now being
so soon
long ago.
Fran, your unexpected journey creates such a richness in details, building depth into the coming and going. You could have ended the poem before that last stanza, circling back to your beginning, but you take us one step beyond and I’m so glad you did. It’s crafted so beautifully. The sparsity of words that almost want to sound confusing but absolutely don’t. Instead, they tell us exactly what they need to (about time, existence) in the most beautiful way. Brava!
Fran, the way now has come to be so soon even long ago will stay with me, particularly as we have been cleaning a house with so many things of long ago. When letters were written or toys were played with long ago, that moment passed and time covered it up and here is today, with only the tattered remains of yesterday. I sense that really deep concept so simply in your poem. You have a way of taking something complex and showing us how now being so soon long ago is a thing. Beautiful!
Hi, Fran! First of all, I love the word “vestiges.” :> It’s a perfect title for this poem as well. I love the word “vale.” You’re creating “a time out of time,” and I am here for it. The last three stanzas make me teary. I also like the juxtaposition of “proof” and “poof” — a tiny bit of lightness, where we can take a breath, before diving back into the mystery of time. Well done. xo
The two battered dolls naked and listening for the little girls singing in this vale. The dolls, the humans, the song. There is a haunting ache here for me.
Fran, your poem is tugging at my heartstrings as I am trying to reduce my belongings and thus my footprint on this planet; however, so many “things” bring so many memories, just to me and I wonder, “Should I really get rid of the stuff or should I just wait until my heirs put them into the dumpster?”
So wistful, Fran.
I think you could write a whole series of poems based around this idea:
There is sine beautiful rhythm in your wore choices here. I especially love proof/poof as a transition. Great images
Oh boy — the memories …
Kevin
We thought it was surprise snow,
in June, in middle America,
because we were young
and didn’t know any better,
the two of us, barely still boys,
in that old Buick, barreling back
to New England, from Madison,
the mission to Wisconsin
to woo her back, a failed one,
but still, a college break adventure,
and it was a swarm of bugs, not flakes,
a night cloud of them knocking glass
and waking us up so fully with surprise
we finally laughed at it all, and that’s
what we still remember the most:
the storm of insects clouding our view
as we drove east, back towards home
Fascinating, Kevin – for a second I thought the “snow” might be ash from Mount St. Helen’s or something. Such a great hook – and memory.
Kevin, this moves in the opposite direction from what I expected and that’s where the brilliance lies. Even more so because insects like that no longer affect drivers. I can remember road trips where the windshield would need to be cleaned at every gas stop. Now, barely a bug strikes. You have grounded us in details that place us right with you!
Kevin, we returned from a road trip recently, and your poem took me right back with that “storm of insects clouding (y)our view.” I agree with Fran about a great hook.
Oh, Kevin, this makes my heart hurt a little like a Hallmark movie where the girl says no, not knowing at the time that the future would be better for both with that decision. I love the snowflakes to foreshadow the coldness of no, and the insects in the aftermath in a night storm clouding the view of the better days to come.
“… because we were young/and didn’t know any better…” oh yeah. That line conjures up so many memories. I like the grounding in “middle America,” too. I like the alliteration of those “barely still boys, in that old Buick, barreling back to New England…” such a great *sound* to say it out loud, and a barreling good rhythm, too! so good. xo
I love this reminiscence, Kevin! So, so vivid. I can hear the thumping on the class and see the huge “night cloud” of the “swarm of bugs.” I’m glad you both were able to “finally [laugh] at it all” — the bugs and the “failed” wooing!
Kevin, your “road trip” memory is powerful and relatable. Your first line grabs the reader and pulls them into your car for the failed journey to reunite young love and your ending, is just the perfect one.
Such a vivid retelling of a memorable road trip.
This is a lovely memory with such vivid details. And I know how this feels- so many insects that feel like rain. How delightful this road trip down memory lane is. Thank you.